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Stick to the original story line with Sarah and Sullivan. Too much straying from the original story. Good writing but off track too much.
Why did you bother to continue after 2 years and then not stick to the original storyline?
Author's Note:
Uh oh! Based on these comments, it looks like I should have done a smoother job of introducing a sub-plot. I got back to Sarah and Sullivan in Chapter 4, which should come out on Wednesday. (Next time I'll write the whole series before submitting a chapter, because I don't really know ahead of time exactly how the story-line will develop.)
Go Andy!
The story had some interesting suspense, interactions and something to learn. Looking forward to seeing what happens with Sullivan and Sarah.
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