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by greenmountaineer07/11/11

Skillfully done

I particularly like the sound of this poem. I think the hard consonants and the contrast in sound with the emphatic pauses from the punctuation really worked well.

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by simply__me07/11/11

This

is quite good. It reads with a proper feel on the emphasized words--like it almost bounces with the swats.

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by PoissonSurLaLune07/11/11

I like

As probably the worst poet ever I don't have all that much to add to the two past comments. It does a good job of shaping the rhythm of the reader, although for me personally the second line was a little clunky.

The underlying theme of death as a form of purity and suicidal release was a a little dark, but that's not a bad thing.

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