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I liked it!
"I play to win and sometime I cheat". Love it!!!!
Intense story--
Very absorbing and even a little scary. It could have gone a lot of different ways, and some of them would have been painful and difficult to handle.
Well-done!
Thanks, ohio
Oh yes
Great little twist
Sexy and fun
Well done! I like the tension and the humor.
Some readers must be real halfwits !!
I could see NO redeeming aspect of this travesty whatsoever! It sounds like feeble-minded prattle of an asylum graduate. One of the worst.
Well deserved 1* !!
Thanks, Anonymous!
I normally delete comments that attack me personally, but you obviously worked very hard on this, and need a hug.
yuck
lame please dont write anymore drivel. I vote negative 10 for this one
Excellent
It shows that real eroticism doesn't need an overt sex scene - and that is really top quality writing.
Beautifully paced and, even though it was short, there was enough there to let the reader get to know the characters. It especially pleased me because it was the ending I was hoping for.
I'm going to have to read the rest of your stories now.
Nice
Nice narrative tension.
Very good
So few comments! Very well done plot new, dialog good, no sex, but thatsok
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