A New Dawn

Yes!

Dawn NEEDS to be with Mary Beth!

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Threesome

NIce

Nice work. Looking forward to see how far you take it.

Great Story

Would love a follow=up

I am agreeing with the others

A follow up please!!!

I love it

Very well written with humour, emotions and hot scenes. I gave you 5 stars !!

Absolutly awesome.

Found Chapt. 2 first so I had to back track and read 1. One of the best stories on here. 2 seemed to be the end of it but I sure would like some more of these characters.

Great Start......

This is a great start and I really enjoyed reading this chapter. It peaks one's interest and makes you want to read more.

As a Literotica author, I know it's good to have comments and votes for each chapter of your story. This chapter of your story has many angles of possible development and is great reading, I gave you 5 stars.

Now I am off to read the second chapter of Dawn.

Awesome Start

I read this to be up to speed on the newest before reading it. I really liked it. Great work here!

Great that there are clear multiple levels to the story

I really enjoyed keeping track of Dawn's growing up, the cop career and murder, and the relationship between the duplex neighbors.

Really Great Story

This story has a lot of information to bring all the plots together. A very enjoyable read. The BEST uncle-niece story I've ever read. Hope there is alot more to come.

Wonderfully done

Great story and believable also. Heading off to read the rest of your stories.

Very Well Written - My, My

You are certainly a very good writer. While you could have stretched out the emotions between the characters, you gave us enough to understand them. And the sex was hot.

It was good but the story was far too fast paced. There wasn't enough time to get to know the characters, much less an emotional connection. It would be great if you added back story and gave them some emotion.

Been there..."thought" about that

Having a 'hot" niece is fertile ground for all kinds of fantasies...Yours is as good as most...

"Ever been with a woman?"

LOL. I love Mary Beth.

oh goodie,, 4 more chapters!!

very sexy little family incest tale!

I Don't know what to say but....

There's the Noir, the LA factor, the mature and younger gal factors, he'll even the inter racial Asian and the blonde in LA schtick, and the tough cop voice over in my head thing. I stumbled across this looking for something with a good rating and got that and more. Much more. And I've got Diana Krall playing in the back ground. Damn all I need is a scotch! Great writing so far. I know I'll have more to say and I have feeling it will be good! Nicely done. Very nice indeed.

Re-reading this for the I-don't-know-how-manyth time

We need you to write part 6, and soon. And then parts 7 and following. Every time I re-read your stories I love them more.

Very nice little story

After having this experience with a cousin or two, I remember the anxiety of early incest. But they were such good fucks I lost it fast.

not usually into uncle/niece or dad/daughter stuff but i liked

Good gravy

You write really well. Thank you!

A little off

If you're going to have a plot device of a brother/father being brutally murdered, you need to pay homage to it with a more genuine reaction than "Huh. Dad/Bro is dead. Oh well. Let's fuck."