Intervention Ch. 05

Against the site rules

The addition of a person unde the age of 18 makes this an illegal story.

@anonymus

you are just an ...hole!

No, it's okay...

He never actually read the rules. They say: No sexual activity involving persons under 18. There was none in this story. But there _was_ a 16 year old who was alive and active in this chapter. It's a back story, and in later stories one discovers that she does wind up seeing a lot of stuff before she turns 18. I expected that I might take some heat for that.

Under age female

The way I look at it is this: Even though she may have been 16 when entering the household and saw a male having sex but did not participate then it's fine.

I had no problems with the story. I thought it was great and would like to read more. I a reader is dissatisfied with a story then there are plenty of other stories to read on this site.

I liked it.

not as well as I would if you had went forward rather than backwards in the story, plus this fuss about the underage thing would not be happening. Never the less, "Intervention" is one of, if not my favorite stories on Lit. More please!

i liked it

if it was illegal, then im pretty sure that literotica wouldnt have allowed the story to have been posted to chunks' submissions.

As usual I love your story

Thomas seems like the perfect guy, the guy of every girl's dream except if it was for me I wouldn't want to share him ;)

I hope you will write more stories. Keep them coming.

continue please

please make a part six and continue the in the present not the past of the story. Damn this is one hot series

I would like to see him take Esmeralda's virginity as one of the next chapters.....

Not Underage

Lighten up! As the stories say at various points, Esmeralda has now been at Thomas' for two years, and arrived when she was sixteen. So, now she's 18, before anything had happened. No problem.

It is hot but still is a good story! Wish I was him

Love your writing

Oh my how I do love your writing! I've found myself in love with everything I've read so far. Since I wouldn't have enough room on my favorite list for each chapter of your stories as well as your one-shots I will definitely be adding you as one of my favorite authors. You have such a way with words. Truly amazing and totally a turn-on!

Wow

I just found the story and hope you continue it ... one of the best I have read in a long time. Can't wait for Ez and Julie to join in more

Not underage

If you find the fact of a 16yo GIRL viwing a naked man as disguting, vulger, distubing, etc. How come you are still reading the story? I repeat story because that is all it is. No one lives this way they could not. As a man I can assure you that it would be imposable to come that many times! Get a life and let the rest of us enjoy a GOOD story when we find one!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

more please

i hope there is more, i would like to find out if he sleeps with the other three?

amazing

Chunks you're a boss, your stories are great and truly enjoyed this series. I began reading this when your A New Dawn series brought me here, and i must say im thankful it did. Good job and now im off to finish A New Dawn, I would love to read another installment or two in this series hope im not asking for to much.

Oh.My.God.

Dude, your writing is amazing. I've been very distant when it comes to sexual contact with my boyfriend, but your writing really pushed me over the edge. Please please please make more!

Just amazing...

Every time I read this story end to end I just learn more and more about the craft. Thank you for sharing this with us, I'm loving the ride, don't you dare stop! Definitely 5 stars again!

HOT!!!!!!!!

That was fricking hot, what a lucky guy

Hot, hot, hot!!!

Liked the 'back story. It was just as hot as the main story. Is there more - with Esmeralda?
All in all, a great series.

Thank you for the back story

It is not often an author comes back to visit an earlier story. Even more rare for the author to provide a way for the previous chapters to be meaningful, not just fun.
well done.

Excellent story

Perfect way to end it. Wish other authors used this technique.

FUCKING AWESOME...!!

That's it...i m going 2 fuck my wife now...

but still...

Thomas is still kind of a jerk.
He has all that money but he doesn't do anything to help Juana and Esmeralda become legal residents.

Not as bad as many in Cali. though, since quite a few hold the threat of deportation over the heads of their illegal employees to keep their wages lower.
(If they are not in the country legally they cannot be legally employed.)

At least he pays them well.

please make more

please can you make more for this story :)