The Bet

Very Good, But

I had to drop a grade because you switched names of the ladies far too often. It breaks the flow for us. Please proof read better in your next story. Thanks for your creativity.

it's a dog eat dog world!

good story...lucky bastard!

Hoping for a part 2..

Great read, would definitely like to see more of the story, I do agree with the Anonymous user, however, because towards the end you kept mixing the names up, while I can get around that, certain readers can't.. I'd either proofread or get an editor, otherwise you're off to a great start..

Nope, everyone was where they were suposed to be..

I double (and triple) checked and both ladies were were they were supposed to be. A bit hard to follow at times towards the end? Maybe, but it IS a threesome, so its going to be...

A nice sweet and loving story

Very erotic and hot sex that made the story very good. I like the thought of them keeping the good sex going for the three of them.

Thanks for the read.

Most enjoyable

Thank you, midnightdeathwriter!

Womderful

Loved it. I also re-read the story and found that the subjects where all correctly placed. No problem sorting them out at any point.

Maybe the commentor is just one of those people that did have some level of difficulty.

Nevertheless, I enjoyed the story very much.

They romped and we got to enjoy the tale!

It is a good, fun read with a great pace and flavor. Amazing isn't it how many men aren't into oral action? The payoff in affection and willingness for other activities would be enough, but I love feeling her lose control (to me) and gush in gratitude.
Thank you. Time to go limber up my tongue and lips.

part two PLEASE

Very good read. I look forward to more of this story.

Awesome story keep it going

Not bad but too much random name swapping.

Before you say again that you checked :-

'June admitted she was VERY happy to have lost the bet' - it was Beth that lost the bet.

'as I fucked Beth, and Beth ate her.' - I don't think that Beth ate herself.

This is only two of multiple examples. Yes, I can work out what was meant but it disturbs the flow of reading and is very sloppy.

I give it 3* as it would have been a better story if the writing had been better.

Nice

Nice