Story of My Life Ch. 01

THIS ONE IS BETTER

IN REGARDS TO MY COMMENT ON YOUR OTHER STORY, THIS ONE IS BELIEVABLE AND EASY TO UNDERSTAND. IT DOES EXAGERATE COLLEGE LIFE IN THIS TIME PERIOD. MAYBE IN THE 60s THAT WAS MORE ACCURATE. I LOOK FORWARD TO CONTINUE READING YOUR SUBMISSIONS. TK U MLJ LV NV

It's a good start though could have been better, I found it a little difficult to read in parts, she should have been more assertive when asking for a new room and at the very least made a complaint against her former room mate, regardless of the reason he only gave her a hand full of clothes he picked up off the floor, from her dresser, that he broke. The other thing is, do you proof read or have an editor? There's wording and punctuation that could be changed to make it a bit better to read.

5 stars

Great character development, interesting starting storyline, has real potential

loving it

i love it so far. i can believe that some people in this day an age are still a bit phoebic an that get all weird on people. but anyway keep up the great work hope to read from you soon

Great start!!

Wonderful start to what I hope is a great on going story. I would see about an editor for some spelling errors though (i.e. THEIR not THEY'RE hips). If you don't want to go through an editor maybe just reach out to a friend or other writer. Can't wait for the next chapter. WELL DONE!

You had better continue this, please.

Really good so far, please continue

LOVE THE WORD THAT ARE AT TIME SO FUNNY

awesome story love the writing and the way you have with words i must read the whole of your srories they good no great