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Very intriguing.....!!!
I like it very much please continue although I have a feeling that I may not want to read this at night!!!!LOL!!
Absolutely
no need for a follow up. A perfect, self contained tale. Beautifully paced throughtout the ending was a little rapid but certainly did not detract from the enjoyment.
Very nice!
This was very well done.
I agree that it should be left to stand on its own. Any sequel would undermine the climax.
good Job!
I enjoyed this Story, kept me intrigued until the end! keep it up :)
Absolutely stunning
I utterly adored the suspense of your writing, in how she couldn't distinguish all the time between the dream and her reality. I had to laugh despite myself at the ending to it. Exceptionally well done; personally I don't think it needs to be continued. It is perfect exactly as it is.
WOW!
I was actually holding my breathe there towards the end. I'm torn between saying continue it and don't continue it. Leaning towards don't. Easily could be a stand alone and easily could have ending imagined.
Really enjoyed it and since I didn't stop due to bad spelling or grammar even better!!! Keep up the awesome work.
Excellent
I liked your style, and I thought the prose was tight. I especially liked the phone conversation between Christine and Troy.
Still - needs an ending
This is very well written, as others have commented, with strong descriptive writing, lively and realistic dialogue, well rounded and empathetic characters. It also well paced and suspenseful. The sex scene is also rendered well, and erotically charged. The ending is the problem here as it does not deliver, unless there is a part 2 - though with the death of the supporting characters this might be tough to write. You've ended the story mid-action - as she fires the gun - but this does not make the ending ambiguous - as - the 'demon/entity' of her dreams is clearly supernatural the reader will not expect him to be finished off with a mere bullet - thus we have an incomplete story. It feels, to me, as though at the time of writing you did not have an ending in mind, so broke off at the climax of the story. Story writing is organic, but you need to decide on an ending or you will frustrate your readers who have invested time and imagination in reading your work.
Clearly you have a lot of talent as a writer. I look forward to reading more of your work.
LOL - read it twice
I didn't realise I had already this story until about half way through. Figured keep going and when I reached the end searched for my comment. Apparently it is just as good the second time as the first time.
:)
Liked it until the ending
Troy and David didn't deserve to die, but neither does Komos. I don't think Komos understands the real world legal system, where a person can't get away with murdering another person because of jealousy - though murderers do get away with it. His decision to get rid of Troy and David was to protect Christine, but based on her behavior, she doesn't want anyone to make decisions for her/control her - she wants to be her own person. I don't think a sequel is necessary - though it would be interesting to see what happens to Komos/Christine, assuming he doesn't die.
i agree with the last comment
Damn that was an awesome twist ending!!!!
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