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Mine! Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by mrichey278807/22/11

i love it!!!!!!!!!

it is so good already! please keep going!!!

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by Anonymous07/22/11

oh. . .oh

where is chapter 2???

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by Anonymous07/22/11

Very Good Story...

...and writing style.

You could, however, benefit from a beta. For example, you put 'remissness' instead of 'reminisce' and 'innocents' instead of innocence.

Just a heads up for the next chapter, which I'm sure we all look forward too!

...*still gave it a 5*...

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by foxxylady507/22/11

mine

i hate short chapters grrrr lol.but i do lo ve ur story bring them fast please

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by Nightimevisions07/22/11

Great Start!

Can't wait to read more. This looks like it has some great potential.

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by Arielu07/22/11

I really do love your stories

Is it possible if the chapters could be longer

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by Anonymous07/22/11

Mine....

Ok I love cowboy please so please don't stop with that one.
But I am loving mine..come on more.. tell me some background,just how bad our these guys,what do these hotties look like and am I gonna want one for myself..lol

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by hisangelbeauty07/22/11

wow

loved it, I will me waiting for more :)

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by Anonymous07/22/11

*****

Better editing needed, but still...

a five.

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by nivani07/22/11

Dam!!

I cannot wait to see where this story will go.You have left me wanting to read more, all I could say was dam! Your dialogue between your characters thus far is awesome! Looking forward to your next installment with this story!!

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by Nightpleasure07/22/11

Nooooooooooooooo!!! This was a great way to start this story off, I cannot wait for the next chapter....

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by bluebrowneyes07/22/11

Great Start

This story has a lot of POIENTIAL!!!! Keep going, but please don't take TOO LONG!! I personally tend to lose interest after so long. As for the previous naysayer I must have missed a line, I did not read where the heroine was described when it comes to ethnic and/or racial make-up. ADVICE: Stop reading!!

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by tammyppeters07/22/11

Loved it!

Can not wait for the next chapter

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by Anonymous07/23/11

Part 2, Soon?

You sure do have a lot of haters. Keep doing what you're doing and I bet you those same people who criticize your stories will keep reading them. I wouldn't mind if an Italian man or cowboy hunted me down because I tucked tail and ran

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by honeybree07/23/11

LOVE IT!!!!

I agree with another reader either update soon or make the chapters longer I' am literally bouncing in my chair begging for chapter 2...lol. I like it thus far and the characters are highly interesting especially Bailey. I think it is refreshing that you write her as growing up in the mob life as oppose to the female character who didn't know about it and found out then it is the whole "girl wants guy to change his lifestyle because she can't deal with it, yada yada yada" so good work

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by SpicySynAmon07/23/11

Great Start.

I think that this should be an interesting story. I can't wait to see it develop into an entire series. Good luck with your characters. Syn'

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by Anonymous07/23/11

Interesting story, but...

(I already know that you don't want to hear it)
...if you would just proof your work or at least use spell check your stories would be that much more interesting. It's like wearing the cutest open-toed shoes and not bothering to get a pedicure.

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by Anonymous07/23/11

more please more

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by mariasmd07/23/11

that's it...

come on. that was way too short. and absolutely fabulous!

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by Anonymous07/23/11

loved it!!!

But are you going to continue with the cade mckay story tame the untamable because that is a great chapter also.

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by luv_romance07/23/11

Promising...

I usually saw the word mine in non-human stories, so this is refreshing. Please work on the rest of the chapters and do not keep us waiting. Hmmmm

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by VampJenai07/23/11

I love both stories and there are always haters just ignore them... I write for the fun of it, to blow of steam, many many reasons and the stories I have posted on here have gotten critical comments for editing as well so I understand. The people who say it's a waste if there is not proper editing need to get over themselves not everyone who writes has the time to deal with all of that if you are a stickler for editing i say don't read it it. If you are looking for a great storyline then you found it. I mean seriously profesional writers with publishers and editors still have erorrs in their books people so chill. Also if you are going to write a negetive why do it anonymous. Back to the story though it's great Chyna keep it up I look forward to more stories from you don't let the haters get to you.

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by IndianPrincess207/24/11

Great

Hey Chyna girl looks like you gonna give us another fab story and I can't wait for the update this is already getting good so please update again real soon thank!!

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by Anonymous07/24/11

love it

loveing it so far! please update soon and make it longer!

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by Anonymous07/24/11

Great Start

Don't make us wait too long for the next installment!

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by Anonymous07/24/11

PLS continue...

Im so loving it, i have read it multiple times nd im still captivated by it.

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by Anonymous07/25/11

Looks Promising............

but a rather short one to begin with. Am certainly looking forward to more and soon please...........

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by Anonymous07/25/11

PLEASE UPDATE!

I'm loving this story , please ,please update and make chapter two longer. Your writing is great!

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by sweet_icing308507/27/11

Great One!

LOVE it!!! Hope you'll continue VERY SOON! Thanks!

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by Anonymous07/27/11

Intriguing!!!!!

Nice start!!!! Please update soon!

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by TripleDfun07/28/11

Good start needs a little editing

Really good start to the story. It does need a little editing for small things like spelling but I am intrigued.

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by THELOVELY1GLO08/09/11

Smells

Like a good series, again :>)

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by got2luvmel09/09/11

IDK why

people on this site always refer every Italian mobster hero written in the Interracial section to 'Seven Days' but it makes no sense to me. I've read plenty of heroes with the same ethnicity and background as Nicolas in romance novels, but they were each completely different and individually unique in their own way; hell, all the stories were different, which obviously is a given but still... Exactly when did it become a crime, blasphemous, for other writers to create their own Italian heroes in this section? I get annoyed when I see people exhibiting that no-nonsense complaining towards authors who create Italian heroes for their black heroines. SMDH

Anyways...I love this. Mike is freaking hilarious and I simply love the way he and Bailey can talk so openly, their friendship clearly shows. I was also feeling the bro-love and how he took up for his bro and tried to reason for him. Nothing, however, can top my lust/love for Blake/Bailey...GAH the simple truth that he's wanted her for years and she's wanted him since she was eleven, had him and is now running away because she 'thinks' she'll eventually get hurt is enough for my head to spin! In the good way!! I am in love with love and this is just making the goosebumps pop and my heart clench *sighs* So-fucking-adorbs already!

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by Alpha_Marm09/30/11

Hot Damn!!!

Powerful beginning......has the makings of a very spicy series...don't keep us waiting....

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by 10/02/11

Yummy!

"And that will put you in a position of being tied, face down with your ass in the air waiting to be taken on his bed and you will have no say in the matter." He promised, sending a shiver down my spine.

"Like I said, Michael I'll put up a fight!"

"And like I said, little one, I will be the one saying 'I told you so'."

LOVE IT! Great story. I like your writing style, keeps the suspense going.

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by jW0W12/15/11

I have read the others....

I think that it was a very powerful beginning and I think that it is different from the other stories. I am just reading chapter 1 now I think you have 3 more... I look forward to it.

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by dark_dreamer9203/08/12

I like it!

Oh yes...I'm REALLY liking the way this story is going.

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Me likey, Little One is running for naught because Blake is coming for you. I can't wait.

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by AMHJ8911/09/13

From the door I love this very different from seven days and thankfully so

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by Anonymous06/06/16

Innocence, not innocents.

'Little one', hate, hate, hate that, its condescending.

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