All Comments on 'I Wasn't as Clever as I Thought'

The story was pretty great, but I was distracted due to the overuse of commas! Fix that, and the story will read so much better.

way too much comma slices. your punctuation is need of a lot of work, and it really lowered the quality of this piece. You need an editor.

This is a beautiful story - I always say that the best place for a young man's thick bare cock is buried deep inside an older married woman's snatch - my snatch !!!! -

Great story - never mind the silly comments about your punctuation - anyone with a brain can work out that this is a beautiful story 5/5

Sarah Leather, London England

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