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outstanding
another breath taking piece written by the brilliant naughtykittykat13, well done gorgeous.
want more
good start san`t wait for the rest carry on with the good writing.
Great
Great beginning.. Hope to see more..:D
Full of exciting possibilities!
A really promising start. The trick will be to keep the reader(s) and the characters from falling into the well-worn pathways of the expected. That the dominant character is perplexed is already quite a " hook ". Nice work thus ar.
Can't Wait
You really need to write more with this story, and i can't wait for the next chapter..
thank you
bookmarked
God this was really good, patiently awaiting chapter 2 ;) I feel for Emily in the morning/evening when she wakes up throbbing. good start and hope to see chapter 2 soon.
Ah! An introduction.
This was a hot little story. I like the plot and the start you've made at character development. I also like the techniques you describe. My only suggestion for a shorter story like this is when you describe Mistress doing something you show her pet's reaction. This helps the reader feel the connection that is otherwise only sensed by being present.
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