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Please Cowboy? Ch. 07

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by SexyChocBBW07/26/11

Really?

Kind of disappointing. I expected so much more,

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by hisangelbeauty07/26/11

damn

I hate to say it while i loved this story, there are deep holes that need to be filled in, but i loved it any way
great job.

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by cuteButSexy21807/26/11

NICE!!

I really enjoyed this story. Lilly and Scott finally stopped frontin and admitted the truth to one another, I was hoping for more family time but it's all good. The sexy scenes were worth the wait. GREAT JOB :-)

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by Anonymous07/26/11

story sooo hot

But I don't get why he said those cruel things to her before. Or why he later changed his mind. I keep waiting for that info... because it sticks out like a thorn preventing me from fully enjoying - no savouring this story.

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by Anonymous07/26/11

yes!!1

that was wonderful and sexy. i loved the way it ended. i love how he took control and finally ended their crazy mess that he made!! i love how he took the responsibility for his actions and was manly about fixing the problem.

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by Anonymous07/26/11

I would have like this story better if it were fleshed out a bit more. If the holes in the plot were addressed it would really improve the quality of your story. I still don't get why Scott's character goes from 'I don't love you' to 'You're mine' with no real explanation. Kiss or no kiss, the man should have at least apologized to her for being such an asshat.
She gave in too easily. She should have made him earn it.

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by shyintx07/26/11

A little short

and now for his brother and her sister's story. Hope you won't leave them hanging.

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by ChynaMarie07/26/11

So i know....

there are a lot of holes, sorry everyone...but hopefully i can fix it as i'm beginning to write another tale that...well all of you guys will see. SORRY:/

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by Anonymous07/27/11

really.

so good in the beginig. ended to quick. everything went to fast in the final yet short chapters. i hope ur next story doesnt end like if u were tired of writng. becuse you are really good @ what you do.

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by Nightpleasure07/27/11

Though I do agree with some of others about Scott, the story was good. Hopefully there will be a continuation of the siblings and their love for one another. Maybe you can let everyone know just how hard it was for Scott to get her back even though the sex was great. Maybe start off by ending their story with what actually happened other then them declaring their love for each other.

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by thickntasty07/28/11

I liked it

I really liked the story but I feel it was a little rushed maybe you could write an epilogue or something. over all it was good but i think you could have taken a little bit more time developing your characters, and going more in depth in the story. Over all once again I will say it was a good story

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by IndianPrincess207/29/11

Great

Thanks for the update and I'm sure we will also be seeing more of them in the other sisters stories as well I'm looking forward to them I can't wait this was great!!

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by THELOVELY1GLO08/09/11

More

Needs to be added to their story and/or add them to her baby sister and Cade's story and soon!
Thank You

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by Anonymous08/31/11

ok i gotta say that this is kinda WTF i mean they do but cant stalker much rapist much more the whole fuckin family and hers seem to be ok with it

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by Anonymous01/16/12

Huh?

It's a nice story, but why couldn't he be with her? How come he just gets to sex her up and all is forgiven? I guess I need a little more explanation about them.

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by blckvixen0802/17/12

disappointed

i have to say i was hoping that scott would have worked harder to win lily back other then fucking her. thats what it was this whole time, he fucked not made love but fucked. and he never actually say "i love you" he got away with breaking heart and all is dandy. and the family making it easy for him to do was messed up. no one decided to kick his ass? just disappointing all around.

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by Anonymous07/10/12

im sorry babe but this story was just so not a story

you need work i mean work to get a good story that was just a freaking porno to me no enjoyment i keep read to see if it wood get better but it didnt i think lily should have been more of a backbone and find a nice good looking man that good for her

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by black_maestra12/20/12

wasn't she pregnant?

I read in the previous chapter when she was pregnant that he tossed her in his F150 truck and then he tripped her and she fell on her side. didn't he care that at that point in time she was technically 4 months pregnant? She a month preg when he found out and he found her 3 months later. Scott's character kind of sucked, like I,said before, liked the idea, but he was such a dick when the dust clears. Build more into your characters, show some of their personalities.

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by quietman20007/03/13

This story was simply riddled with technical problems, and the other readers are right that the characters and details needed more fleshing out. Even with all that, it was really hot, and I'm glad they ended up together, even if it was rushed getting there. I like happy endings. As for him being such an ass and the head games they kept playing with each other, that's how life is sometimes, and a good writer can't ignore that fact. So kudos to you for that. I was a little confused at some points in the story, but I enjoyed reading it. I too want to find out more about them as well as the siblings. Nice job.

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by ladiebrowneyez12/25/13

;l

yo im kinda MAD because this story is good but could have been better, theres always a missing gap space in timing in your chapters when transitioning, 5 - 6 like the fuck happen at the end of 5 to lead to six then a year later like ..... o.o was it really a rush to finish? i would have like for the story to continue a bit more and not skipped around as much

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by Anonymous03/14/15

This was a great read! Thanks for sharing with us

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by Anonymous07/21/17

Awesome story💕💕💕💕💕

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