There is so much potential for genuinely complicated relationships and conflict, it's a shame these characters keep behaving to amp things up like a bad reality TV show. Nathan lies to Sandy at a point when there was really no need; Sandy decides that she and Nathan should "show" Jenn rather than tell her. (And I don't think it was all that surprising that it was Rick with her: who else could have signed her out of the hospital--the hint was Nathan saying they wouldn't tell him because he "wasn't family." Of course with Sandy right there in the parking lot, they could have gone back in and found out immediately.)
This story has/had the possibility of being both erotically super-charged and a poignant exploration of what sits behind labels like abuse and depravity, especially the way these get replayed across generations. You've created some appealing and appealing flawed characters; let them play this out without extra histrionics, please.
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wow just wow
I really did not see that coming great story though would really love to see how this story ends
Sandy's comment about Jerry Springer had it right
There is so much potential for genuinely complicated relationships and conflict, it's a shame these characters keep behaving to amp things up like a bad reality TV show. Nathan lies to Sandy at a point when there was really no need; Sandy decides that she and Nathan should "show" Jenn rather than tell her. (And I don't think it was all that surprising that it was Rick with her: who else could have signed her out of the hospital--the hint was Nathan saying they wouldn't tell him because he "wasn't family." Of course with Sandy right there in the parking lot, they could have gone back in and found out immediately.)
This story has/had the possibility of being both erotically super-charged and a poignant exploration of what sits behind labels like abuse and depravity, especially the way these get replayed across generations. You've created some appealing and appealing flawed characters; let them play this out without extra histrionics, please.
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