But yeah, two things: 1) this story was just done less than a month ago but "on the way to college." and 2) anybody that fishes would have brought his own cooler, which means it would have already been in the car so the whole premise/set up doesn't really make much sense. Good writing is still good writing, whether people are fucking or not.
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Anonymous08/01/11
Too much like others.........
........could have been more original rather than blatantly plaigerise others!
Seen the same before, but still liked your interpretation of it.
Admittedly, not original, but a good take on it.
Please, do not be discouraged. Keep writing.
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Anonymous08/01/11
Sounds familiar!
It doesn't get old. Love reading these kind of stories. Whether it is unreasonable or not it's still hot!! It would be a funny ending if they got pulled over by cop a few blocks from home, and the Husband/Dad gets a ticket for allowing the tandem riding.
A wonderful variation on an oft-used theme! Deliciously told - good, naughty and incestuous fun! Just goes to show that we don't need a deep, dramatic story everytime - sometimes it's good to just laugh our way to pleasure!
This story should be in a movie it had me on age i was extremely intrigued
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Anonymous08/01/11
Not particularly original story, but I liked it all the same. How did Jake manage to both strip his mother naked and to fuck her without his Dad noticing? Maybe you could arrange for Jake to really fuck Jackie hard in her own bed next time.
I always appreciate hearing what people think of my stories.
While this is not an original premise, and I am certainly not taking credit for it, I love the absurdity of the situation and always wished there were more stories like this. I thought others might feel the same way and figured I would take a stab at it.
I apologize to those who feel that the setup is too ridiculous. Although I count it as a success if that is the only thing that people find ridiculous about this fun story ;-)
Keep reading and commenting and I will keep writing.
Enjoy!
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Anonymous08/02/11
See the original
I appreciate the copying effort - it shows the original was hot. I wrote the original of the "Mom takes a Ride" stories based on a true event with my then girlfriend's mother. All of part one is pretty close to true, except it was her mom instead of mine. It was written in 2001 and is still on this site under nakdsalr. You may want to take a look at it.
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Anonymous08/02/11
Seems like I read something like this before
This reads like another story I read awhile back, only change a little.
This short story was certainly fun, hehe. Not original at all, but it's sometimes interesting to read how different authors develop such scenarios. Nice work! ^__^
LOL as I was reading it I was wondering when someone would invoke "Mom Takes a Ride" which is one of my favourite stories. With that being said, I won't say anything as trite as "way to copy a great story". Yes, it was clear from the get go, even from the title and caption that I was about to read something similar, and as a fan of the original reads on, the similarities jump out. HOWEVER. You took it further than NakdSalr, and made it your own, the most obvious parts being of course moving the penetration from post-ride to during and fleshing out the incident with less brevity than the original. Kudos on paying homage to one of my favourite stories while pulling a 'Finding Forrester' and making it your own. Well written.
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Anonymous08/03/11
Fuckin great
Great but to much talking with father. He would bound to kno somethin's up
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Anonymous08/06/11
Awesome
I agree, there SHOULD be more stories like this. I too love the absurdity as you put it.
Yes, it's a benchmark off of another story on the site but that story was great and you put your own spin on this one.
Please write more like this....especially involving stockings & garter belts :) ...congrats, I just bookmarked you!
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Anonymous08/06/11
Learn.
Learning to pay attention to how people really speak to each other would help turn a barely average story into a good one.
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Anonymous08/07/11
Your all idiots.
This is probably one of the most original version of this premiss since the first one I read on this site. Granted there are a coupple of plot holes. But I would hardly call this story a rip off. I actually really like this idea and would love to see more peoples take on it cause really half the stories here are just differend varieations of the same ideas. If it had a different title I doubt there would have been as many complaints. Good job.
It's always the ones who don't stand up for their comments who cause the biggest fuss. You call us all idiots, but the similarities go past title. With that being said, you call us all idiots without actually reading the comments. Every single comment that invoked the previous incarnation prefaced their comments with some form of "good job" or "well written". In fact the only insulting comment on this story so far is yours...imagine that. Try reading everything before making blind criticisms of the community.
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Anonymous08/07/11
I apolgise
I stand corrected. You are right. I didn't fully read the comments. I do however still dissagree with the few comments that I did infact read which called this story a rip off. However that being said I have only read two or three other variations of this concept one of which that was in fact a blantent rip off of the other. I'm sry if I offendend anyone with the previous comment that was not my intention....well at least not fully.
would like to see the 'money shot'.mom gets pregnant.
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Anonymous08/30/11
Who puts sufs boards *in* small cars?
Especially if they're already stuffed. You strap it on *top* of the car. And where was the motivation for her to be incestuous with her husband only 2 feet away? "Sitting on my son's lap" just did it so much better.
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Anonymous11/18/11
Nice
Continue
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Anonymous12/05/11
Keep them cumming
Enjoyed many of your stories so far and have more to read. Keep up the good work. Just for the record, these are fantasy stories so all the details does not matter. Do not listen to all the negatives, keep writing.
The story is just gr8 - got horny just thinking of the situation where the dialogues are shouted in public and others cant understand - it just makes you hornier. good one
doesnt matter if its adapted or not - its improvised and can hold on its own
Of course this isn't original, and it's absurd and the father is an idiot and there are plot holes and everything else that people are complaining about. The point is, this is a damn fine story and it gets the job done. I'm not on this site looking for fine literature. Sheesh
English
very sexy story
What the fuck?????
this is a total rip off of "sitting On My Son's Lap".
Just not nearly as good. And is the father supposed to be slow in the head or something?
Arousing Hot
incredible story...
a repeat
read this before, but by another author.
Did the cooler just...materialize?
Because I'm left wondering how they managed to have room for it on the way to the beach.
writing was ... OK
But yeah, two things: 1) this story was just done less than a month ago but "on the way to college." and 2) anybody that fishes would have brought his own cooler, which means it would have already been in the car so the whole premise/set up doesn't really make much sense. Good writing is still good writing, whether people are fucking or not.
Too much like others.........
........could have been more original rather than blatantly plaigerise others!
Seen the same before, but still liked your interpretation of it.
Admittedly, not original, but a good take on it.
Please, do not be discouraged. Keep writing.
Sounds familiar!
It doesn't get old. Love reading these kind of stories. Whether it is unreasonable or not it's still hot!! It would be a funny ending if they got pulled over by cop a few blocks from home, and the Husband/Dad gets a ticket for allowing the tandem riding.
nice
great story...funny dialogue. well done.
A stupid and unbelievable story, crappily written. Do you hear me, Jack?
fun
dumb fun but fun
Bravo!
A wonderful variation on an oft-used theme! Deliciously told - good, naughty and incestuous fun! Just goes to show that we don't need a deep, dramatic story everytime - sometimes it's good to just laugh our way to pleasure!
lots of fun!
Good read! Liked the teasing, well written!
Hot as hell story!!!
Have to say this one had me throbbing!! Great story! Hope you write more!!
Hottttttt
This story should be in a movie it had me on age i was extremely intrigued
Not particularly original story, but I liked it all the same. How did Jake manage to both strip his mother naked and to fuck her without his Dad noticing? Maybe you could arrange for Jake to really fuck Jackie hard in her own bed next time.
Thanks for the feedback!
I always appreciate hearing what people think of my stories.
While this is not an original premise, and I am certainly not taking credit for it, I love the absurdity of the situation and always wished there were more stories like this. I thought others might feel the same way and figured I would take a stab at it.
I apologize to those who feel that the setup is too ridiculous. Although I count it as a success if that is the only thing that people find ridiculous about this fun story ;-)
Keep reading and commenting and I will keep writing.
Enjoy!
See the original
I appreciate the copying effort - it shows the original was hot. I wrote the original of the "Mom takes a Ride" stories based on a true event with my then girlfriend's mother. All of part one is pretty close to true, except it was her mom instead of mine. It was written in 2001 and is still on this site under nakdsalr. You may want to take a look at it.
Seems like I read something like this before
This reads like another story I read awhile back, only change a little.
yeah it was hot
can't wait to see chap. 2 and them going to the mall. great stuff centrum even if it isn't your story completely.
timeline is wrong
if they are married for 18 yrs after they discovered she was pregnant, her son would only be 17. Just saying.
^__^
This short story was certainly fun, hehe. Not original at all, but it's sometimes interesting to read how different authors develop such scenarios. Nice work! ^__^
LOL as I was reading it I was wondering when someone would invoke "Mom Takes a Ride" which is one of my favourite stories. With that being said, I won't say anything as trite as "way to copy a great story". Yes, it was clear from the get go, even from the title and caption that I was about to read something similar, and as a fan of the original reads on, the similarities jump out. HOWEVER. You took it further than NakdSalr, and made it your own, the most obvious parts being of course moving the penetration from post-ride to during and fleshing out the incident with less brevity than the original. Kudos on paying homage to one of my favourite stories while pulling a 'Finding Forrester' and making it your own. Well written.
Fuckin great
Great but to much talking with father. He would bound to kno somethin's up
Awesome
I agree, there SHOULD be more stories like this. I too love the absurdity as you put it.
Yes, it's a benchmark off of another story on the site but that story was great and you put your own spin on this one.
Please write more like this....especially involving stockings & garter belts :) ...congrats, I just bookmarked you!
Learn.
Learning to pay attention to how people really speak to each other would help turn a barely average story into a good one.
Your all idiots.
This is probably one of the most original version of this premiss since the first one I read on this site. Granted there are a coupple of plot holes. But I would hardly call this story a rip off. I actually really like this idea and would love to see more peoples take on it cause really half the stories here are just differend varieations of the same ideas. If it had a different title I doubt there would have been as many complaints. Good job.
To Anonymous
It's always the ones who don't stand up for their comments who cause the biggest fuss. You call us all idiots, but the similarities go past title. With that being said, you call us all idiots without actually reading the comments. Every single comment that invoked the previous incarnation prefaced their comments with some form of "good job" or "well written". In fact the only insulting comment on this story so far is yours...imagine that. Try reading everything before making blind criticisms of the community.
I apolgise
I stand corrected. You are right. I didn't fully read the comments. I do however still dissagree with the few comments that I did infact read which called this story a rip off. However that being said I have only read two or three other variations of this concept one of which that was in fact a blantent rip off of the other. I'm sry if I offendend anyone with the previous comment that was not my intention....well at least not fully.
The storyline has been used before, but the author did a good job of making it his own.
Nicely done.
Erotic and kinky. Just the thought of her son causing her to orgasm next to her husband was hot, and then her son fucking her was the best part.
Thanks for the read.
seatbelts, seatbelts
safety first!
A helluva ride!
And screw the naysayers! Definitely Five Stars!
not bad story
would like to see the 'money shot'.mom gets pregnant.
Who puts sufs boards *in* small cars?
Especially if they're already stuffed. You strap it on *top* of the car. And where was the motivation for her to be incestuous with her husband only 2 feet away? "Sitting on my son's lap" just did it so much better.
Nice
Continue
Keep them cumming
Enjoyed many of your stories so far and have more to read. Keep up the good work. Just for the record, these are fantasy stories so all the details does not matter. Do not listen to all the negatives, keep writing.
Love to see more of this family!
http://www.literotica.com/s/sitting-on-my-sons-lap
funny
A very funny story but still hot too
Absolutely
Stiff bone hot hot hot.
Big dummy
That dad is deaf dumb and blind if he could see or sense what was happening
lol!
Great! very erotic and funny!
Great scene!
Wish they were off-roading!
Loved it!!!
I came at the same time!!!!!
Riding son.
I enjoyed that one, it had a bit of well placed humour in it.
My mum enjoyed riding me very much too, not only that, dad loved watching.
How about a Gangbang?
The story is just gr8 - got horny just thinking of the situation where the dialogues are shouted in public and others cant understand - it just makes you hornier. good one
doesnt matter if its adapted or not - its improvised and can hold on its own
gud work - keep on working!!
The deal
Of course this isn't original, and it's absurd and the father is an idiot and there are plot holes and everything else that people are complaining about. The point is, this is a damn fine story and it gets the job done. I'm not on this site looking for fine literature. Sheesh
AWESOMENESS
Love how you use "cum" and "come" with the dialogue! Keep up the great work :)
one hot story
this story was hot, i love stories like this. Mother and son sex while in the same place as others are in. Thanks you the hard-on
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