by aaron32
Liked it all.
Would only request you use more line spacing and shorter paragraphs to make it an easier read - and also easier to find your place when you look back up to the screen!!!!
Yes i would like to hear about how the rest of the visit went when u goen to do CH 2.
... fulfillment of a fantasy I had about my own stepdaughter. It seemed real and believable because the writer used allusions and descriptions in the tension buildup rather than the usual dull plethora of crude four letter words so prevalent in other stories. A slow pace allowed anticipation of each next move, which added to the excitement. ... good job.
I liked the story. Nice pacing. Believable. Passionate. Sexy. Naughty. Bravo bravo