Spelling mistakes and lack of decent punctuation make this story unreadable. Get an editor or, at the very least, read and re-read before submitting!!!
I'm terribly sorry to hear that you found this a tough read. This was my first submission, and I'm just learning my way around here.
The unfortunate thing....I'd actually like to have helpful feedback on how to improve...and I'd love to have an editor recommendation....regrettably, your chosen path of anonymity does not help.
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Tough read!!!
Spelling mistakes and lack of decent punctuation make this story unreadable. Get an editor or, at the very least, read and re-read before submitting!!!
dear anonymous
I'm terribly sorry to hear that you found this a tough read. This was my first submission, and I'm just learning my way around here.
The unfortunate thing....I'd actually like to have helpful feedback on how to improve...and I'd love to have an editor recommendation....regrettably, your chosen path of anonymity does not help.
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