All Comments on 'Goodbye, Jerilee'

Agreeing with the title; The entire point of her story would improve expedentially, had the young lady dared to expose more than simply removing her panties. EG: Shaved smooth & knickerless, she'd be truly exposed to unwelome attention, albeit that would have been enough, for any nymphomaniac to be orgasmic? Not to worry, I just hope your heroine cleans her messy inner thighs up with her dress, wanders downstairs naked to show the busdriver her entire body, thus exhibiting erotic potential!

I quite liked this!

I was 19 and travelling by train late on a winter's evening when a smartly-dressed woman in her fifties opened the split of her long skirt and gave me a flash of her hairy pussy. My embarrassment and my erection both grew when she pulled her cunt flaps apart and fingered herself. Ten minutes later I fucked her in the toilet. I'll always remember, amongst other things her eyes; like the man in your story, they too, meant business.

I liked your story and I agree with the comment below that it needs to go to part 2. Here's why. Jerilee was a little too abrupt in removing her panties after she thought about it for a second. There was no build-up, that is, she didn't worry about the next stop and people getting on, she just chucked 'em. Then the guy sitting behind her, he started out as a "gentleman" then he went into near stalker mode, switching back and forth for the rest of the story. I personally would have liked him to be one thing or another, preferable a gentleman.

These are just my suggestions and you can ignore them or not, your choice. But I do enjoy your writing, it just needs a bit of a polish!

Looking forward to more stories@