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" I see seagulls and tonight I'll fry them in butter because there is nothing left."
That would be a five alone, just for the ending line.
yep, I agree
the previous comment and knowing your food prefs, it makes it a killer line. I don't know how to say this, it will probably come out wrong, but the piece sort of scared me. It is so visual, to me, at least, I can see a barren waste land, like in Mad Max and that future, that time lines scared the shit outta me.
The rhythm in your lines is catchy, you did a very good job in your word choices but I question the "palms", maybe I am reading it wrong, but it seems like an extra s in there.
I hope it never comes to that for you; frying sea gulls.
~ m
PS, I am PM'ing you about another matter...
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Hey Maria, WillowedCabin (I want to call you Willow, but that would be to familiar). This poem originated from the 5 Senses challenge thread in the PF&D forum. Then, I used to obsess on super natural disasters that came on T.V. documentaries. Some of which could/would destroy the western seaboard so hence a poem of the aftermath on the new west coastline, Great Salt Lake, Bonneville Salt Flats.
Glad you all enjoyed my scary-crazy poem. Like I mentioned the 5 Senses challenge, that's where I get some whacked out ideas lately for newer poems I've been posting.
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