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Needs to be in the present
Premise of story, I feel, was an attempt to extend the story and I found the story to be quite boring. At lest for me, writing a shower scene and recalling the sex is very basic writing. Instead I would have preferred that that story was written in the present and made the reader feel as though they were reliving it instead of being retold the story.
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I was wondering...
...where you were. Where have you been?? I was feeling neglected. My life isn't complete without a slutwhorebitch comment from you. :)
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