& your story was Donovan's Doomsday or Deflowerment or Fellatment Day !!!
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Anonymous05/19/13
Next time my ass!
First, you didn't do a very good job of describing the "saddle" so it was hard to visualize his problem. Two, no way does he let her unzip his pants in a public place like that. Too much chance of discovery and getting booted out of school. Third, he would have been cold, the stone would have been cold, he would have been scared and the liquid was "cool". No way he would have had a hard on, more likely to have been shrunk up tight. She "bound his wrists fast? What was she, an experienced calf roper? Was she a huge, powerful woman? Because if she wasn't, no way she pulls a strong mans arms behind his back and ties them together AND holds them together at the same time? That's just silly. And her "soft silk that's as strong as steel" snaps when he gets erect? And to wrap it up at the end she's going to risk her job by doing it again? Like he won't report her and she losses her job or the chance ever to get another one? SO many holes and dichotomies in this sorry tale that it's laughable.
English
Unusual. Interesting adaptation of the genre. Well written
Interesting Agreed
Yes let's see what you have in mind for the future chapters, more milking, relationship, actual coitus?
Some grammatical issues but good, enjoyed
Wonderful!
Exquisite creation, highly erotic. Loved the charcters and felt as if I were there. Beautiful saddle, potions. Wow. One of the best I have read.
Kinky Incas
Very well written and original erotic
short story. Good descriptive writing, good characters and dialogue made for a compelling read.
HOT!!
That was very hot. And very creative, as well. Nicely done. ; )
Yesterday was the Mayan Doomsday !
& your story was Donovan's Doomsday or Deflowerment or Fellatment Day !!!
Next time my ass!
First, you didn't do a very good job of describing the "saddle" so it was hard to visualize his problem. Two, no way does he let her unzip his pants in a public place like that. Too much chance of discovery and getting booted out of school. Third, he would have been cold, the stone would have been cold, he would have been scared and the liquid was "cool". No way he would have had a hard on, more likely to have been shrunk up tight. She "bound his wrists fast? What was she, an experienced calf roper? Was she a huge, powerful woman? Because if she wasn't, no way she pulls a strong mans arms behind his back and ties them together AND holds them together at the same time? That's just silly. And her "soft silk that's as strong as steel" snaps when he gets erect? And to wrap it up at the end she's going to risk her job by doing it again? Like he won't report her and she losses her job or the chance ever to get another one? SO many holes and dichotomies in this sorry tale that it's laughable.
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