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by MyZenTrail08/14/11

lightly flowed...

into a deep thought (~_*) a memory tornado (grin) nice write

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by WillowedCabin08/20/11

A major triumph for you;

A whole lot of vulnerability and great imagery for the reader. I felt with this. Now, what I'd like to see, is for you to keep it active. Less talky-talky, more action (God, don't you love my technical vocabulary...) The beginning sequences in this are fabulous, but the middle-end withers from lack of action. *Just my opinion, take it or leave it.

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