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Dirty!
Dirty, Nasty and very Hot! Too short and could have been built up better. For Loving Wives readers, this would be tease. I liked it.
Pretty hot story
Well written. Short and to the point. Oh but Pandoras box is open now. :-)
Good Story
Well written. I would have preferred that it had more detail and build up. Keep writing.
More
Hope you are going to continue this theme. Really enjoyed it.
A big fat YES!
Please write more. T'was most... Uhmm... Stimulating.
The other thing is, why would those haters read it?? Dumb asses!
I'll be watching for more from my new favorite author!
HOT
HOT / HOT / HOT / WELL DONE
OMFG
Oh my GOD, this was FANTASTIC! I fingered myself to two orgasms reading this. I would love for this to happen to me and my husband....just thinking about it is getting me hot again!
Thanks
All, thanks for the positive comments. It's appreciated. For Alerta Al - The original story was much longer. I wanted to see how "compact" I could make it and still keep the "arousal factor". This is not the shortest or longest version. It was a good exercise as I personally like this one myself. Great constructive and helpful comments.
Sorry Alberta Al
Can't believe I misspelled your name. My bad.
needs another
chapter, awesome stuff.
Great
I enjoyed it immensely! There was a typical typo and a confusing line, "the reality was very different then the real thing."
I understand how difficult it is to write and submit without errors. I have that trouble myself. Aside from that - great story. I'll be reading more. Thank you.
Nothing went wrong there
I am as jealous as hell. I'll try and follow your example.
thank you
it definitely raised my skirt
very well done
i love realism and this was it. very hot, happened quickly as in real life, so written to match the "pace."
more to come I am sure.. well, done
tranquillity -- get a hold of me :)
Great Story!
What a wonderful story. I loved how it progressively got hotter and was slowly slipping out of either husband or wife's control, which leads me to believe that they both really wanted this to happen without having actually saying so. I liked how the hubby got so excited when his sweet wife took her second load of the strangers sperm into her unprotected womb, which of course is always a turn on for my line of thinking. Thanks for sharing! Look forward to more hot exciting pregnancy risk stories in the future!
Sounds like role play gone RIGHT not wrong
Sound quite exciting and what you wanted and enjoyed, I do't see what went wrong :-)
playing with Fire
Play with fire you may get burnt !
The looser in this game will be the husband when the wife finds a man better looking, wealthier, bigger cock, better lover, tall, bigger than her husband.
They have no children to bind them together !
Nice One
Wife and me like it,
Jackass Strikes Out!
Strike one : Ann gets knocked up. Strike two : Ann contracts several STDs. Strike three : Ann decides she love strange dick and cuckolds wimpy husband.
"The thought of unprotected sex, his cum really inside her...
... just made it more exciting."
You think that is exciting? Wait until you can enjoy raising a bastard child...or being able to swim in a pool of pretty nasty STDs - T h a t must be exciting. Fool!
Fiction
I guess some reviewers don't get the 'fiction' part stories; maybe they would be better off reading 'true life' stories and criticizing those. We don't have to have a politically correct sex story, do we? Anyway, the story from the husband's point of view, could probably be stronger so we can better understand his responses, but it is hard to 'show' those feelings through story. Possibly, a little more depth into the couples roleplaying in the beginning would have helped? Regardless, a good cuckold situation that gets out of hand.
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