All Comments on 'Campfire Fantasy'

so, so nothing great

I think the theme or storyline was good, but the characters were fairly flat. It seemed as if it were an outline to me.

It may have been the lack of real names of the characters, or the characters needed to be fleshed out more, which caused the story to be less than believable.

As far as the sex, that was erotic but a little hard to follow. I couldn't visualize it in my mind while I was reading, but it may have been just me.

I hope that you get others to comment on your story to see what they say about your work.

I try not to be too critical with my comments, because I know that you have put some work into posting your story to the network, and I wouldn't want to discourage anyone from writing erotic literature, since I do love the stories.

Thanks for the post

Rich (digdaddyrich)

This might have been an interesting story, but there was no continuity in the story; too many changes in tense, in subject, and in speaker. I recommend a class in basic English composition.

not ideas

Story read alright but the story's starting point is a bit odd. By odd I mean the story seems to start out with the action and there is nothing that builds up to it.

We all were sitting around the campfire. My wife was sitting to the left of me. The night was pitch dark. The fire was the only source of light. My wife was caressed & petted by the guy sitting on the other side of her. His arm was around my wife's back as though they were a couple. Her jeans were hip huggers & her T short was short. He was caressing her bare skin...

I did nothing. I was like a rabbit caught in the headlight. I in a hypnotic trance of sorts. I behaved as if i was an impartial observer, not her husband.

What happens on the campground stays on the campground.

:-)

Is the story realistic? It definitely is REASONABLY REALISTIC! Similar stuff happened to people i know.

What happened to me at a campfire party years ago was that my wife was AWOL for about 25 minutes: she and a single guy were nowhere to be seen. What can i tell you... sucks to be me!

:-)

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I'm copy pasting an older comment.

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Anon - almost 4 years ago

EVENINGS SPENT AROUND CAMPFIRE ARE LIKE A BOX OF CHOCOLATE - YOU NEVER KNOW WHAT YOUR WIFE WILL DO!

We all were sitting around the campfire. My wife was sitting to the left of me. The night was pitch dark. The fire was the only source of light. My wife was caressed & petted by the guy sitting on the other side of her. His arm was around my wife's back as though they were a couple. Her jeans were hip huggers & her T short was short. He was caressing her bare skin...

I did nothing. I was like a rabbit caught in the headlight. I in a hypnotic trance of sorts. I behaved as if i was an impartial observer, not her husband.

What happens on the campground stays on the campground.

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