All Comments on 'My Sister's Wedding'

this probably doesnt belong on LITEROTICA in any category. But it was good reading. TK U MLJ LV NV

I have always said that anything you publish get's my attention and this one is exceptional.

Thank You for sharing your creativity!

Alan

Sometimes it's just nice to read a real story...

This was a beautiful little love story. I found it really uplifting. Thank you so much for all of your stories.

That is a very beautiful story.

Most of the time on here all you read is SEX stories hardly ever do you read a love story WELL DONE

When you write stories this great, this consistently, it makes it really hard for the rest of us. Another truly great feel good story, I have to admit that the Tim thing got me, I was sure she was cheating on him, but I suspect that you planned that. Great job, I loved it. SS06

Thank you for all the wonderful comments. I felt good writing this story. A little long for a contest story but I wanted to do right by my characters.

With Respect

DG

Than with a great story from you. Thanks, your romance stories are always complete and uplifting. One of your best.

I just got pulled along with the story. A great read and a happy ending. Thank you...

TY for writing.

This is a great romantic story. I really liked it. You're a talented writer. At a certain point I believe you mixed up "Chris" and "Cindy" though...

Finally a story where the sex just happens instead of sex where a story sometimes happens!

Great effort!

DG just another outstanding story. It really made me feel good reading it. Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing it with us.

As another noted, it was a great way to start the day. Clearly drawn, believable characters, and an excellent story line, none of which surprises me since you are one of my favorite Lit authors. Thanks for this one.

Lit ID: Tyro999

Wow, what a lovely story. Made my heart melt :-P

Fortunatelly DGHear can not write wrong story!

The start of the story was pretty good. The middle was not so much. The end was like looking at a friends wedding pictures. A little interesting, but not really...

...partly because it clearly showed love, which is what makes good sex GREAT sex!

... and the part of the story relating to the song at the wedding made me pause to dry my eyes and let the lump in my throat go away. Thank you

If there was more stories like this on this website I wouldn't ever go to my job.. Amazing story! Loved it.. Jessie reminds me of my on 3 year old.. Has me wrapped around her finger, and the worst part is.. She KNOWS it..

I would love to see more like this.. And I'm definitely going to start reading the rest of your stories.. Thanks :)

-LI

to copy edit a writer as fine as the Master of the Feel-good story, DG Hear. This writer is as good a storyteller as you'll find on Lit, and there are some real fine ones here. Thank you, Sir, for trusting me with your precious productions.

Once I start one: why nothing will do till I finish. The stories are hokey and simplistic and I'll never admit to my " high toned" friends I consume them( on the sly when no ones looking). Halfway thru the damn story I know what's going to happen. I should quit but NO. I can't. So here I am your Brokeback reader. "I Wish I Knew How To Quit You"(r stories)!!!

My Sister's wedding was INCREDIBLY well written, not the typical story I read here, but I was captured from the start!

Another amazing story! I truly loved it!

I can't add much to the other comments, it was well crafted, I saw one small error in the entire story, but it certainly didn't detract from the flow.

Well Done! I so enjoy your stories

Thanks for another of your great stories..Will continue to look forward to more of them.....

I LOVE YOUR STORIES! You made my weekend. THANK YOU!!!

A truly great story and one I would list as in the top 5 or 6 that I have read these past many years. Thank you and please keep up the good work. John

Loved it but two small quibles.

1) I'd kill my wife if she decided to do something so monumental as stop her birth control even if it was something I wanted without even the slightest mention. Not a way to start a happy marriage in my opinion. I understand what you were trying for but it didn't ring true to the characters you had built.

2) You made such a big deal of the honesty between David and Cindy and set things up the "Sister in laws who adore him" to be an interesting plot wrinkle and then dropped it. I think it would have extended to story quite a bit so I can understand you not wanting to add another plot element. Especially and keep this 1 chapter but I think you missed a prime opportunity that I know your excellent story-telling could have made the most of.

Looking forward to your next!

I enjoyed this story, particularly Jesse's character...so utterly charming and endearing. But I did not love the story because of a couple of small problems. The author made such a big deal out of the protagonist screwing all his sister in laws, but that potential tension went absolutely nowhere. This led to a very disjointed, almost poorly organized story that was very frustrating. The romance suffered. Anyway, good, but not great story.

I believe you mean Cindy.

Didn't understand the necessity of the sister-in-law aspect though.

The subplot of John having slept with all of his sisters-in-law proved both largely irrelevant and a narrative cul-de-sac. Keeping it to just Dave and Cindy (and maybe transferring the strawberries & cream kink across from Collette) would have made the entire story arc a lot cleaner, as well as removing the potential explosion should either of the other two confide in Toni that they'd slept with her new husband. That said, it was well-written and had definite moments: in the main, well done.

Very beautiful story. I understood the whole consept of John sleeping with his brother's wives. It was just a way of tying in 'its better to have loved and lost, then ever to have loved at all'. Jessie's character is just cute. Cute is a simple word, but it fits that little girl. And yes Toni stopped taking her birth control, but if she and john loved eachother as much as your story portrays then starting a family shouldn't be an issuse at all. I just can't say enough about your story, I hope you win.

Did someone admit to being the copy editor of this story? DG is a fine writer but he has never learned that the first person singular pronoun, when it is the object of a preposition or verb, is always me and not I. You should have caught that frequent error in this otherwise "flawless" piece.

really enjoyable

And I still admit it.

One of the harder parts of copy editing a story is to keep faith with the character doing the narrating. John, the narrator, is a web designer and engineer, not a professor of English; although college-educated, he does not eschew, in ordinary speech such as DG Hear has put into his mouth here, the Middle Western United States vernacular with which he grew up. Therefore, John will, at times, make grammatical lapses. It is my job, as quibbler/copy editor, to keep the character, and his voice, as DG Hear intended, only correcting what I conceive to be errors that would distract the reader.

As DG Hear is a much finer writer than you or I could ever be, when I send back his text as edited, I have no problem if he rejects any suggestion I make. It is my first principle of quibbling/copy editing that the story is the author's story, first, last and always.

Or, as another editor, with whom I have not always agreed, has suggested as a first principle, that of Hippocrates: "First, do no harm."

DG Hear has made John real. He made you, and me, and all his readers, care about his character and his story. My contribution is minuscule by comparison.

Another great story!

I'm an island of negativity in a sea of love. But geez, this is so formulaic. It's DG Hear's formula,of course, because no one but him could have written it.

But in that sea of love, isn't there some rough water, sometimes? I guess I'm just a cranky guy, but this kind of stuff should be in small doses, not six pages of constant artificial sugar.

Hey, DG always writes well. Okay,serve me some sweetness,but give me an order of conflict on the side.

DG,

Thanks for sharing on Lit.

X

Loved it, well written as usual, and a lovely Romantic Story. Wish I could vote more than 5

Nobody has the knack for writing a story that makes a person feel good like you do, my friend. Even though this one didn't have any plot twists or truly wicked characters, it just became a joy to read the deeper you got into it. Just adore your work, man.

For a beginning writer, I thought you did a good job.

That said, the opening was like reading someone's resume and I quickly lost interest.

Writing in first person is difficult if the narrator doesn't engage the reader, and for me the protagonist seemed self-absorbed. Who cares if he banged his sister-in-laws? Or has twelve people working for him?

It beats the crap out of your story. I encourage everyone to go to Dream_Operators page and vote for his submittal. He won't allow comments so I guess your vote will tell him what you think.

DG, your story was great as usual.

Thanks for the the feedback to my comment. I don't have a story in this contest, so I'm not sure what "submission" you are referring to. But if it makes you feel better to bash the lone story I wrote a year ago, by all means do so.

I didn't allow comments on that story because I don't think it's fair to authors to allow people to comment anonymously. That's why, unlike you, I commented under my Lit nickname in this thread.

I stand by the comments I previously made about this story because that is how I truly felt. And I would think that the author would appreciate any honest feedback that might help her\him to improve their skills. If you disagree with me, that's entirely your right and I respect your right to voice your opinions.

I'd have to agree that the protagonist did seem somewhat self-absorbed in the beginning. He was more likeable once the explanation of how he had ended up fucking all his brothers' wives came out.

Toni and Jessie especially were great. One couldn't help but be attracted to them both.

All in all, I suspect you achieved your objectives with these characters and I enjoyed the story. Thanks

A story like yours comes along so seldom. It was sexy but not blatantly so. It dealt with everyday people and how their lives were interconnected.

It overwhelmed me how beatiful your story was. Also how beautifully written it was.

I hope you will continue to write and share your stories with us.

Nice story, although the red herring of sleeping with all the sister-in-laws as well as April, had me wondering if the cruise was going to be some kind of orgy with secrets coming out left and right. I kept wondering where the sister-in-law angle was going. You are a cruel tease! ;)

But a nice romantic story works as well.

Had to chuckle at some of the comments. "For a beginning writer..." almost had me laughing out loud. Keep up the great stories, and best of luck in the contest.

When Jessie asked John if she could call him "daddy," I cried. I almost forgot I was reading an erotic story because it felt like I was reading a pretty good novel!

Another red H! I love to read your stories, DG.

To the prior poster, I suggest you read some of DG other stories. Also those written by DanielKitten.

Awesome story

Best story i had ever read in my whole life. I Wish i could give you more than 5 stars.

I got weepy eyed a couple of times. Almost forgot it was an erotic story. Very good.

It's going to show from anonymous, but you can call me ¢huck

you the man wish you and yours the best.. maybe one day i will experience heaven..peace

It was way longer than most of the stories on this site, so I wasn't expecting it, but it was so good I couldn't stop reading!

Hi my name is chris. I read this story 4 days ago and still i'm not able to get this story out from my mind. So i came back here to tell you this. Your story is keep on playing in my mind like a movie. Some incidents of ur story are stucked inside my mind like a leech who stucked in a vaccum jar. My fav incident of your story when she told him in the ear "I KNEW YOU WERE JEALOUS" i luv that part. Dear author you are great. I don't have the words to describe your greatness. Keep making more stories like this one. You are the best erotic love story's author in this whole world....!

this is one of the best stroies i have ever read. it was erotic but gentle at the same time i think it was a bueatiful storie and you should right more it was longer then i expected but well worth it. great job,

The story: DG's formula redux. A lot of people like his stories - but that doesn't make him the best writer ever on this list, or even very good. Consider Dan Brown's potboilers (e.g. The DaVinci Code. Commercial success? Immensely so. Good writing, in any sense of the word other than being a commercial success? Are you kidding?

The editing cleans up the grammar and spelling - but I wonder if it sucks the life out of the story? The author's characters always sound the same - the male protagonist, his true love, villains (if there are any)

Singed comments: My God, nobody uses his/her real name. To demand anonymity beyond that is absolute cowardice. If somebody doesn't like what I write - at least they'll know who (in the world of Literotica, at least) wrote it

@ Dear H. H. Morant I read many stories on Lit and SOL T think DGHear's stories are equal level. Yes some amataur writers can produce better stories but his/her all stories are not equal level. When you start a DGHear's story you know you will get similar quality without disapointment. I think to write same good level is a great thing.

I loved the depth of your story and the passion you portray through your words. Giving enough to keep reading, I love it. Sexy and intriguing. Great job. I hope you WIN IT!!!

DG, I never tire from reading your stories.. most all, like this one, "multiple times"

Thanks Again!

Alan

I have never left a comment on a story prior to this. However, I really did enjoy this. It was not a wham bam than you ma'am story, but one with feeling and heart. Don't know if the events are real or not, but a great story non the less.

i have no words to describe it simply the best

hey buddy! i must tell you that your story made me fall in love with my husband again.Thanks for such a lovely notion about happy marriage.lol.

Now that is what its all about! Love, ultimate true love! It comes when you least expect it. Very good story... showing that it takes work, and patiences. The work is honest caring communication and patiences in restraining your sexual needs to show you aren't just an rutting animal in heat but really do care for your intended... I love this story...

Wow! Great story. Don't care if it's fact or fiction, I just enjoyed it. Got a little misty eyed a few times, but I'm a hopeless romantic. Thanks for writing it. Ted

it starts out with him fucking his brother girlfriend, then he said nothing while this slut married into his family and all you fags act as if this the greatest story in the world. This whole story was bullshit because of how it started.

Not mine...I loved the story....as for ...fucking his brothers girl friends....read the story again ...they all happened before anyone was committed to the other.

Thanks for a good read.

Flippin loved this story.

You are one of my favorite authors. Your stories are realy good and you don't sex everyone to death.

A super dupper story. Lovely read. Thank you. But where is DWidiot? He/she can smell out a good story from miles away and then come and shit on it. Too old, unrealistic or "oh my God there are cops in it" or worse violence! Thank God he hasn't found this one yet. Loved it. Thanks. Jim

No not the awesome people in the story you just read about joy and happiness and family -

The dickhead with the one track mind below - a future sister in law makes a poor choice but find a loving person to have it with who respects her life choice - (not a married woman by the way not even engaged) so this story completely sucks nothing good here move along - wow

GREAT STORY - wonderful read thank you !!

I would be far less than pleased to find out my wife stopped birth control without talking to me first! Happy about the baby -YES ! But the secret about the birth control is a big NO NO!

I would also be miffed to not be told first about my own new baby! This is his family, not his in-laws or his folks but his. Wife has violated same rules of due order of business of a family and marriage.

Other wise loved the story !

I've not read all of DG's stories, so I'm unaware of any 'formula'. But as soon as Jessie showed up, I knew where it was headed. . .

I tend to agree, the opening bits about him fucking all his brothers' wives seemed to point in a very different direction, and I'm not sure what real purpose it served in telling the story. At first, I was half-expecting to read about John's behind-the-scenes adventures with all his SILs on the cruise ship. And every time a new female in-law was introduced, I half-expected to hear about how John had fucked her too, once upon a time. But DG was telling an entirely different story. . .

All that said, I enjoyed the story. But then, I'm as much of a hopeless romantic as the next guy. And gosh - the love preceded the sex; what a concept!

it was a compelling love story, with family involied .. not just a stud fuck story..

i hope u write more storys,

Loved it.

Reading Your Story Made Me Realize What a Good Wife I Have. Thank You.

What a super romantic story , well told. Congratulations

what a wonderful, loving story. THANK YOUY

Another great story. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

Thank you.

i really liked this one

If it isn't i show already I wouldn't believe u :)

It was good but at most of the time dialogues were too gay from john . I mean crying and all that

Very good job of character development and describing the families. A serious scenario with the death of a soldier that you turned into a nice love story. I enjoyed this very much.

Awesome story and captivating characters .

As I have stated before about a few stories on literoica, it is way to good not to have been published in the mainstream press.

George in Omaha

right up till the very last.

you would think she would discuss it with her new husband before going off the birth control pills.

A work of art. Keep writing.

This is a one hell of a story, i really enjoyed it, great job !!

Damn, you should be writing movies scripts :)

If this story is for real then i wish you all the luck in life to you and your family.

With talent like this you need to exercise it by writing more. Keep practising and who knows you may find there is a book in you.

That story is by far the best one I've ever read here!

I don't know what's about this story, but I can't get enough of it. I have read it over and over again A big thank you for writing a master piece of a story about romantic comedy and love. Love you all! Bye. Greg. ..10 stars.

I would write a longer comment, but I'm crying so hard I can't see to type. Loved the story!

Just absolutly, Positively GREAT.

you have good writing skills. the story isn't too bad but my personal opinion is that you can make them better. I find the plot to be rather dry... the characters were developed well but i was unhappy that the reason for them getting married was to accommodate for lack of cabins available.

Some writers seem to think that a good story need a lot of twist and complications to be good. You've proben them wrong. I truly enjoyed it. Simply great

you have a great imagination and write very believable stories....loved it.....

Simply The best.Good writing Skill. Kind of story i always enjoy.

I laughed and laughed and laughed! It was a beautiful peace that left the reader filling in the gaps in the sentences and paragraphs with imagination. I don't know much about writing styles but I loved how this story flowed and the unexpecting humour that rose up. Thanks so much!