Your prior stories had some realistic characters. The ones in this story are just one-dimensional and unbelievable. Wife loves hubby, yet jumps in bed with another with no plan to end it? Then hubby just accepts her cheating with no plan to deal with it? We really have no real to care about either one.
For once, a story where the guy's dick doesn't get hard when he sees his wife with another man.
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Anonymous08/23/11
hmm..
reminds me of an ex girlfriend of mine. good riddance.
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Anonymous08/23/11
very real
Very real i see it happening every day it could be either one who comes up with the excuse to cheat. Men win 7 out of every 10 custody battles i wonder why.
As a walter, myself - I find such stories very sad, while being held closely to the narrative. What is not made enough of is how much these stories in some cases belong in a non-erotic category for much of the readership. Of course in that case I read less than 20% of the non-erotic listing.
Perhaps our society need to make it more difficult to marry (recognizing the act of conceiving and birthing be more of a community, city, state and national concern). Shift the choice to responsible adults, churches and focused community organizations.
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Anonymous08/23/11
more please
Feels like a synopsis rather than the finished piece.
I have read the same story in a few other articles. This one is shallow in comparison to others. "Dig Two Graves" is a better example of the wife-believes-the-lover-instead-of-husband storyline.
Why would the husband allow the man in his house? I understand that he did not care. There is a difference between not caring and being shit on in your own house. You know, the one you pay for. That was a big finger poke in the chest.
She just went out and started screwing Charlie because Charlie SAID Walter was having an affair? There was no check to see if it was true, or a confrontation with her husband? The woman seemed to be looking for an excuse to cheat.
What lawyer would push a divorce for adultery without any proof? Most judges are going to get pissed at you for wasting their time. Walter told her he wasn't screwing around and Celia doesn't start pushing Charlie for proof? Then after it's all over she thinks that she can just say I made a mistake and all will be well? I'm glad Walter wasn't a wimp but Celia is painfully stupid. As to taking action against the guy in his house, what does he do? His wife invited the guy in. The guy is an ass and will never leave voluntarily. Any physical action Walter takes will end up getting him arrested. You could call the cops and they would probably ask Charlie to leave but they couldn't force him to. There is no win for Walter. Of course, I would have found some way to beat the shit out of Charlie at some point when I was sure I could get away with it. Muggings happen all the time. He did force Charlie's divorce and financial ruin so that was some payback.
Maybe some of the problem with the story is that Walter is very even tempered about things. I actually identify with him. If my wife did what Celia did I would have hated her but then cut her out of my feelings and arranged to blow her off. No muss, no fuss. A boring response for a story however.
What happen your stories have always been good or a great read to me. This story was very weak. Maybe I read to much. Thanks for sharing maybe the next one will be my kind of story.
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Anonymous08/24/11
You've written better.
As said before, no lawyer would risk his reputation without proof. Also, a 7" cock is above average...average being AVERAGE. The sex was ok but if I were him, I woulda fucked her for one or two weeks after the divorce then dumped her ass.
Your writing is getting better. The crowd that reads these stories hate wimps. Sooner or later Harry in VA will attack you so don't give a shit he has 60IQ, dumber that old dog shit. So man up your male characters and continue. You will do well.
Keep writing you rate a 3.8, so keep it up, just tighten your story line and get rid of the wimps.
Keep writing.......................
just to point out a couple of the logical inconsistencies of this 'story' -
what lawyer would go into court using the word of an adulterer as the only proof in his claim of adultery against the husband?
how likely is it that he would be standing outside the department store at just the time his ex-wife was being charged with shoplifting?
The ex-wife got fat after the divorce; then she is caught shoplifting; why not give her cancer and warts? Don't hold back on your punishment .
btw: if Duna and huedogg are in your corner, rest assured your story is a worthless piece of shit.
Just sayin'
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Anonymous06/12/12
well, thebullet has a point
huecuck is a self-described cuckold and although he admits to liking Matt Moreau he, like all beaten cuckolds, rates stories solely based on depravity of the revenge. duna is a mental case so it becomes problematic judging any story based on his comments so best just not to read them.
Thanks for the offering. Not sure the legal stuff is realistic, but I see you point was the revenge rather than striving for accuracy.
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Anonymous03/14/13
UN-fucking believable
After reading a story (Tom,Dick and Harri) of a wimp that this writer posted today, I wanted to see if all his stories were like that. This one having one of the highest scores, I read it, and almost fell out of my chair. A story without a wimp. Actually he gave this husband a pair of balls. From reading the comments, I didn't think this writer could write stories without wimp humiliating cuckold husbands. I guess I was wrong. Maybe it's just this one, from the looks of the scores on some others. Oh, well there is hope. (ML)
But the wife seemed really dumb to me. I do enjoy a good BTB story but in this case his wife was such an idiot I couldn't get all that steamed up about her cheating. The whole thing just seemed to lay there on the page. It didn't create any emotion.
Sweetie cannot be this unconscious and still have attracted (and kept content) a man like Hubby! Even after having the paucity of her accusation explained to her, she perseverates in believing it! And, she has a lawyer! Maybe it is her twin sister? Nope, Sis wouldn't have gone past junior high, either! Certainly Sweetie should be able to get the fee back from the (totally inept) legal beagle!
Another worthless story by this failure of an author.
And I quote from the next to last paragraph - "That was the last I ever heard from Celia....She called me a few times after that.....". This is but one example of the poor writing this author offers in his stories. He didn't hear from her but in the same paragraph she called him several times? I sorry but that kind of stupidity just does nothing for me. No stars.
I never commented. well I enjoyed it. I like a good thin plot line every now and then. It's a comfortable break by a really good writer.
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Anonymous10/14/15
Well at least he got rid of the cheating slut
Not much emotion in this but at least this time the husband had some balls and didn't let his whore of a wife run all over him. Better than most of your stories.
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Anonymous10/16/15
well
not bad for murphy... still, I don't much like stories about brain-dead wives...
One thing I always stand by is that cheaters are the most stupid people alive. The idiot cunt here is proof positive. This tale was interesting in a stupid way.
You can over look a lot in a spouse for love. Unfortunately, poor moral character, poor judgement brought on by poor childhood training, and low intelligence is a deal breaker. She must have been beautiful, because she didn't have anything else going for her. Besides the emotional aspects of marriage, the real reasons to be married are mutual support and to create a nest for your offspring. There was no mutual support in this case, and she would have made a terrible mother. Good Riddance.
English
Get Real
Your prior stories had some realistic characters. The ones in this story are just one-dimensional and unbelievable. Wife loves hubby, yet jumps in bed with another with no plan to end it? Then hubby just accepts her cheating with no plan to deal with it? We really have no real to care about either one.
Yeah!
For once, a story where the guy's dick doesn't get hard when he sees his wife with another man.
hmm..
reminds me of an ex girlfriend of mine. good riddance.
very real
Very real i see it happening every day it could be either one who comes up with the excuse to cheat. Men win 7 out of every 10 custody battles i wonder why.
worthwhile yet predictable
As a walter, myself - I find such stories very sad, while being held closely to the narrative. What is not made enough of is how much these stories in some cases belong in a non-erotic category for much of the readership. Of course in that case I read less than 20% of the non-erotic listing.
Perhaps our society need to make it more difficult to marry (recognizing the act of conceiving and birthing be more of a community, city, state and national concern). Shift the choice to responsible adults, churches and focused community organizations.
more please
Feels like a synopsis rather than the finished piece.
Same story
I have read the same story in a few other articles. This one is shallow in comparison to others. "Dig Two Graves" is a better example of the wife-believes-the-lover-instead-of-husband storyline.
OVERKILL
is always over the top and it always trumps stupidity. TK U MLJ LV NV
Good
Why would the husband allow the man in his house? I understand that he did not care. There is a difference between not caring and being shit on in your own house. You know, the one you pay for. That was a big finger poke in the chest.
Good revenge story.
This is the 6th writers and stories where somebody does prank with infidelity. Is this a sport in the States?
Almost a Repetition
These Revenge stories usually are more violent or everyone complains that hubby is a wimp. What happened to the ant-wimp squad today?
No comminication.
She just went out and started screwing Charlie because Charlie SAID Walter was having an affair? There was no check to see if it was true, or a confrontation with her husband? The woman seemed to be looking for an excuse to cheat.
Nice story but
the husband did the right thing, except the coming to my house part. Also she would have moved or I would have burnt the house down.....lol
Why did you submit this????...
....it could have been lifted from 1000 other stories.
OK read but stupid
What lawyer would push a divorce for adultery without any proof? Most judges are going to get pissed at you for wasting their time. Walter told her he wasn't screwing around and Celia doesn't start pushing Charlie for proof? Then after it's all over she thinks that she can just say I made a mistake and all will be well? I'm glad Walter wasn't a wimp but Celia is painfully stupid. As to taking action against the guy in his house, what does he do? His wife invited the guy in. The guy is an ass and will never leave voluntarily. Any physical action Walter takes will end up getting him arrested. You could call the cops and they would probably ask Charlie to leave but they couldn't force him to. There is no win for Walter. Of course, I would have found some way to beat the shit out of Charlie at some point when I was sure I could get away with it. Muggings happen all the time. He did force Charlie's divorce and financial ruin so that was some payback.
Maybe some of the problem with the story is that Walter is very even tempered about things. I actually identify with him. If my wife did what Celia did I would have hated her but then cut her out of my feelings and arranged to blow her off. No muss, no fuss. A boring response for a story however.
well done
well done cut and dry story. Why fight over the wife? She cheated and the author had the hubby make up his mind and follow thru.
thanks for the nice tale
A very tightly written story
A fast paced story,straight to the point and no fooling around.
I liked it and the story held my interest through out.
Murphy621!!!!!!
What happen your stories have always been good or a great read to me. This story was very weak. Maybe I read to much. Thanks for sharing maybe the next one will be my kind of story.
You've written better.
As said before, no lawyer would risk his reputation without proof. Also, a 7" cock is above average...average being AVERAGE. The sex was ok but if I were him, I woulda fucked her for one or two weeks after the divorce then dumped her ass.
Nice snapshot of a breakdown
Men with Balls! Love these stories
Felt rushed. 3stars.
Stupid characters
I don't believe there was any love in this marriage. So, the story lacked emotions and the tension of this genre.
Not your best!
3*
fun read
Nice gentle pace with great irony. Very enjoyable. You are a very clever wordsmith. Thank you.
Pretty dam good............
Your writing is getting better. The crowd that reads these stories hate wimps. Sooner or later Harry in VA will attack you so don't give a shit he has 60IQ, dumber that old dog shit. So man up your male characters and continue. You will do well.
Keep writing you rate a 3.8, so keep it up, just tighten your story line and get rid of the wimps.
Keep writing.......................
s
#2 REALITY AND CRUELTY
brings results and revelations. TK U MLJ LV NV
Good read for someone in high school.
There is no depth.
There is no character development.
There is no meaningful dialog.
Other than that a great story.
I guess I am a 57 year old high school student.
I enjoyed it. Good job.
cut and paste story
just to point out a couple of the logical inconsistencies of this 'story' -
what lawyer would go into court using the word of an adulterer as the only proof in his claim of adultery against the husband?
how likely is it that he would be standing outside the department store at just the time his ex-wife was being charged with shoplifting?
The ex-wife got fat after the divorce; then she is caught shoplifting; why not give her cancer and warts? Don't hold back on your punishment .
btw: if Duna and huedogg are in your corner, rest assured your story is a worthless piece of shit.
Just sayin'
well, thebullet has a point
huecuck is a self-described cuckold and although he admits to liking Matt Moreau he, like all beaten cuckolds, rates stories solely based on depravity of the revenge. duna is a mental case so it becomes problematic judging any story based on his comments so best just not to read them.
Cheaters Never Win
Good revenge. Now if only charlie passed on an std...
HA
traitor
he swallowed hot jizz, cornhole took a buggering, betrayed!
Finally
A story with no wimp!
I don't really care that there was no wimp.
All the other stories this writer has spewed forth dictates that this story is also worth only 1*.
once again everyone
we see a pussy ass anoncuck following me around like a stalker. Go away little doggie and dig up you bone or boner. Which ever works for you.
Thanks for the offering. Not sure the legal stuff is realistic, but I see you point was the revenge rather than striving for accuracy.
UN-fucking believable
After reading a story (Tom,Dick and Harri) of a wimp that this writer posted today, I wanted to see if all his stories were like that. This one having one of the highest scores, I read it, and almost fell out of my chair. A story without a wimp. Actually he gave this husband a pair of balls. From reading the comments, I didn't think this writer could write stories without wimp humiliating cuckold husbands. I guess I was wrong. Maybe it's just this one, from the looks of the scores on some others. Oh, well there is hope. (ML)
OK story
But no way a man gets that fair a hearing in divorce court.
Okay tale
But the wife seemed really dumb to me. I do enjoy a good BTB story but in this case his wife was such an idiot I couldn't get all that steamed up about her cheating. The whole thing just seemed to lay there on the page. It didn't create any emotion.
Pointless
This author has done much better.
Silly
Sweetie cannot be this unconscious and still have attracted (and kept content) a man like Hubby! Even after having the paucity of her accusation explained to her, she perseverates in believing it! And, she has a lawyer! Maybe it is her twin sister? Nope, Sis wouldn't have gone past junior high, either! Certainly Sweetie should be able to get the fee back from the (totally inept) legal beagle!
Listening with your cunt.
That is a good line.
THEY WHO LOST EVERYTHING
and have nothing to stay on top, must learn humility and ennui. TK U MLJ LV NV
move along folks
there is nothing here to see
Another worthless story by this failure of an author.
And I quote from the next to last paragraph - "That was the last I ever heard from Celia....She called me a few times after that.....". This is but one example of the poor writing this author offers in his stories. He didn't hear from her but in the same paragraph she called him several times? I sorry but that kind of stupidity just does nothing for me. No stars.
I read this a while ago and fived it, but...
I never commented. well I enjoyed it. I like a good thin plot line every now and then. It's a comfortable break by a really good writer.
Well at least he got rid of the cheating slut
Not much emotion in this but at least this time the husband had some balls and didn't let his whore of a wife run all over him. Better than most of your stories.
well
not bad for murphy... still, I don't much like stories about brain-dead wives...
Stupid
One thing I always stand by is that cheaters are the most stupid people alive. The idiot cunt here is proof positive. This tale was interesting in a stupid way.
Duh
Good Riddance
You can over look a lot in a spouse for love. Unfortunately, poor moral character, poor judgement brought on by poor childhood training, and low intelligence is a deal breaker. She must have been beautiful, because she didn't have anything else going for her. Besides the emotional aspects of marriage, the real reasons to be married are mutual support and to create a nest for your offspring. There was no mutual support in this case, and she would have made a terrible mother. Good Riddance.
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