by Mixedwritings1993
I can't even compose an objective critique of your story, because I wouldn't know where to begin. The best thing you can do is learn the fundamentals of writing, since you don't seem to know them now.
About the scat wouldve been nice. Overall it was a terrible story.
Terrible story, very badly written. You are clearly illiterate, so my advice to you is to stop writing.
I couldn't get into the story because of how terrible the writing is. A little advice: Proof read your work.
Omg that was such outstanding story but im just wondering when are you going to make another story ( the continuing of this story).
Loved the story. I agree that a fecal warning would have been nice, but the biggest issue was grammer double check it. I've found read the sentences in reverse order (last to first), this makes you brain look at it like new insted of connecting and skipping over what it rembers.
I don't know why this story has such a low rating. I love this story. More Please
Could it be true that Nicole loves her brother Brian by being dominant to him,its like the old saying "Read between the lines",even tho Nicole appears to degrade Brian she obvious does it out of love or she wouldn't care what he does with his time,but Nicole always has him service her.
In a way I envy Brian because he has a beautiful younger futa sister who wants no one other than her brother to please her,I wish Nicole was my sister as I would gladly clean her asshole and everything to make her happy and Nicole may say stuff like how worthless Brian's cock is but in truth she says it to show she cares.And at the very end you see she says "I love my slutty older brother" tells you she's not the evil sister she portrays herself as,she just wants love by dominating Brian,which is beautiful.
It could use a proofread but it's a good story, ignore the haters and toxic chodes 👇