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keep them coming
keep it coming i cant want to read more
Addictive
The characters are so raw and brutal. It's really a savage world you built and I'm loving every word of it. Hope much more is in the making. Thank you! DW
i like a dominating man as much as the next girl
But this is just plain abuse and rape. Its completely unbelievable how someone so determined to escape they try committing suicide, the next minute is "forgiving" and thinking her abuser needs "compassion" after another brutal beating and rape. Thought the whole thing was distasteful and that's saying something cause it takes a lot to turn me off. Not that other stories haven't as well but never before have I been compelled to comment. Anyway this is just my opinion and I realize to each his own but I'm just sayin...didn't like it at all!
Hm. Seems inspired by Twilight
Some awkward grammar is present (dangling participles and ending sentences with propositions), and the character development isn't believable. As another poster said; she was determined to escape, lots of bit words about being her own person--and then a flip 180-degrees after one beating where he even *told* her it would only bruise, not cut or leave welts. Too much fantasy in this fantasy.
The co-dependent attitude isn't to my taste for a fantasy of sexual release, but that's just me. However, you're describing Battered Woman Syndrome, but far too soon--she hasn't been through nearly enough to make it believable.
Copy cat
It's just like innocent pawn except Greywolfe is wayyy meaner and just plain abusive but I love Innocent pawn and will keep reading in hopes you shake it up.
Keep it coming!
Love it! The right mix of savagery, passion and emotions. I love how conflicted Greywolfe is about his feelings toward Andrea. I can not wait to read more!
MORE PLEASE!
I check every day for new chapters. Hurry please.
wow.....
Much better than i thought it would be
WTF?! alejhruohgaojvn9irowjiaknvakrjfaldh98492qjkanvakjn! !!!
I dislike this man. I want him to suffer just as bad as what he's been doing to his slave. Sadly, I may never know i my wish will come true. Great story, though!
Unfinished business
It amazes me how many stories are started and just left. I know that we have busy periods occur in people's live, but there are a number of writers, like yourself, who start and then just disappear for months and years. There is more to this story, obviously. You should come back to this.
This is one of the most vile stories I have ever read
This story is disgusting. Imprisoning a woman and forcing her to do thinks against her will and then having her apologize for not wanting it is rape and this story is vile.
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