Two things... Don't be afraid to use spell check and two use an editor. Your grammar and syntax is bad. It can make the story hard to read.
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Anonymous09/05/11
I agree...
The story could be very good; I like the plotline. But, the spelling and grammar need a great deal of improvement.
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Anonymous11/06/11
Spell check wont catch correctly spelled but wrong words for the context: "she began messaging her clit". You meant massaging. Messaging is like texting. Stopped reading right there, sorry.
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good story, but...
Two things... Don't be afraid to use spell check and two use an editor. Your grammar and syntax is bad. It can make the story hard to read.
I agree...
The story could be very good; I like the plotline. But, the spelling and grammar need a great deal of improvement.
Spell check wont catch correctly spelled but wrong words for the context: "she began messaging her clit". You meant massaging. Messaging is like texting. Stopped reading right there, sorry.
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