A Slave to the Servants Ch. 15

Thank you

DW told me that in the rush to get this chapter submitted on Sunday morning of the holliday weekend she forgot to include the "Thank You" for your votes that have put her at the top of the Sci-Fi All Time List that she had planned. She promised to include 1 in the comments as soon as she can though.

We can't wait to see how you the fans will recieve this offering.

Ooooh first!

Well, after the editor anyhow. Very good chapter :) I'm excited to see little Hannah grow up! Also, not sure the false masters got everything they had coming to them, but if Hannah is strong and well and turns out to be as AMAZING as I expect then woot! I guess the other guys can be allowed to live.

It's very interesting that female Paterian babies are born with their mother's and to a lessser extent their father's memories. Jean M. Auel did something similar with The Clan of the Cave Bear: the Cro-Magnons, like modern humans, had to exhaustively think about and learn things from scratch, while the Neanderthal race was born with generations of memories. However the trade off for being born knowing everything is they lacked to a great extent the ability to innovate and think about things differently. That lack of mental agility cost them, in the book. I like the twist you put on a similar concept here. I also like that the last two chapters have been devoted to moving the plot along...but I hope that down the line, unlike what happens in some relationships after babies, Ciara and her men get to rekindle their sexual relationship!

*blushes*

well it seemed my comment didn't get put in so i'll do it again..lol
i totally loved this chapter, i can see that Hannah will be a kick ass Woman with Damien's looks and characteristic, but i do feel heartbroken for Ciara to have such a short time with her daughter, being a mom myself, i could not have my son in my life, *grins proudly* He is my baby and always will be..lol Great work Hun!

Donna.

Awesome!

Damian has a daughter. I wonder if Paterian women even acknowledge their male breeder. Most Paterian men have never even seen a female child, much less their own offspring. I wonder how Damian and his brothers feel about her.
I am so glad those tutors got what they deserved!

You're the best!

I am in love with this story, if it could be bound into a book and sold I would buy it. I can not believe everything that has happened in just 15 chapters! It's exciting, sexy, well written and has been addictive from the very beginning. Actually the writing progressed since the beggining and with the editing it's become amazing. Anyway I think it's kinda sad that Ciara isn't bound to the men anymore, I loved that they could care for all her needs so easily and really understand her feelings through the bond. What girl wouldn't love to be taken care of so well by five hunks? Whatever though, any twist in the plot you pull always works out smoothly and keeps things interesting! You've really created something magical with this story, I hope it goes somewhere farther than just being on literotica. I want to see this story as a movie...

new path

ugggg, i'm trying to decide whether i like this chapter or not. i think what has me really sad about this chapter is the fact that damien and his brothers cannot bond with hannah. i know i'm looking at this from a human's pov, but i can't help it, i AM human. so to me, i was hoping the men would get a chance to feel something besides indifference towards her. i'm a mother and i can't imagine not being able to look into my child's eyes and not feel love or see love in her eyes when she looks at me. the other part that bothers me is the fact that they can't touch her, not even accidentally, without the threat of death hanging over their heads. that is going to take some tightrope walking on all of their parts. i'm really scared for them. oh plese dw, don't write that kind of scene in this story. that would break my heart......jeez i'm such a crybaby. but something that i do like about this story is now their bond is broken. i'm sorry but i saw it as dangerous to them so i'm glad that element is gone. (now watch you write it back in). ok, so now i'm done, but i love this story so much. i wish i had your gift dw. keep up the great work!

I love this chapter!

I love the way Christof got on the heated rock to support her during child birth and I hated that Hannah hissed at her dad and that they are not allowed to touch her. I look forward to the next chapter and am sure everyone will love it as well. I can't wait for you to post it. LOL

And the baby arrives woot!

Well i am sure that Hannah will be stubborn about doing her own thing, she is after all a product of 2 species.. she has has a while to swim thru mommy's thoughts and form the start of her personality. Once her survival instincts of being birthed and cared for start to wane i would think she will start to deviate from the "normal" women's expectations..

Glad to see another chapter!

Even greater to see Rue and his brothers get their just~desserts! I am curios if Hannah is partly linked to her mother? Since Hannah is like the women on this world but also like Ciara, would she not see her mother's mind as well? Also, maybe this insight she is seeing will give her daughter some of the missed lessons!

THANK YOU, THANK YOU!

I neglected to say THANK YOU to all the generous fans who vote every time. I intended to be the first or second comment, but no luck there! Thanks to all who've made this series so successful. I love writing for you all! DW

I am sadden that Damien and the boys cannot bond and fully enjoy the feeling between parent to child. I am sure they would of loved it. I wonder if the child will change her mind about men as soon as she grows up.... since she is part human.

This is better than payday!!

Great story as always. Can't wait for the next one. I'm glad Rue (or Runen) and his brothers got what they deserved.

Please right quick :)

Please keep writing, I always enjoy the day I find a new chapter in this saga and check back frequently until I find one.

This story Rocks!

When i first started reading this i wasnt sure if i was going to like it as it seemed so different, then suddenly im attatched to all the characters, and now I love this series, its well written and so original, and get so excited whenever a new chapter is added. I want more more more!

lovely!
I see I had some elements wrong after all. it IS good to be surprised.
Not sure how to feel about the inclusion of this total mind control element. I wished it had some constraints at least. It's bound to get abused by women, especially those that like to grab people from the men compounds. It feels wrong that they wouldn't use this ability if they have it. Absolute power corrupts absolutely.

Still hoping there's a kind of voluntary bond between the females also, maybe between 'sisters' when they find each other?

Will be interesting to see how the girl makes use of her human dna parts :)
Hope she'll take her mom around for some of her exploration trips later on, hehe.

(P.S. find a new tag-line for your 'part two' of the series?)

please!!!

love want more want more!!!

More More More...

It seems like something profound would happen if the men were to touch Hannah...I am dying to know what that is! Will we find out?! (Without harm coming to the men of course!). I have no idea where this will go and that is why I love this story so much! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Remarkable

Simply amazing. I've loved this story from the beginning and continue to do so. The progress of the storyline is exceptional.Most of my thoughts are posted by other users.CONGRATULATIONS DW on an excellent chapter, can't wait to see where you take us next

Yayayayay shes back!

Im so happy! The last couple chapters, i thought were pretty blah:/ but this one makes up for it! The birthing was pretty much beautiful and I am just super ecstatic. Thank yoooou! (and ps: my favorite thing is that u upsate when u say u will! Lovelovelove it!!)

Good

I agree w/ the comment that the last couple of chapters have just been ok, but I really liked this one. I had already guessed about the in-utero learning, so wasn't suprised. However, I was a little suprised that Ciara named the girl. I would have thought she would ask Nuh-ree to, to ensure her daughter had a "strong" name. That would have made much more sense, along with pleasing Nuh-ree

Another amazing chapter....

You are truly talented...

Wow!!
*****

so smooth, this chapter was way too short

nice to have all the loose ends tied up. slight disappointment that christof wasn’t hannahs father.

pity the labour was so short, would have loved to have seen how the brothers would have coped with many hours of labour pains.

as the families of rue and runen enjoy causing damien and his family problems as well as thinking themselves better than anyone else and with them having similar names, are they related?

as the babies have a connection with their fathers and their mothers, while in the womb, does that mean that the women have an even stronger connection with their men while pregnant?

it has to be asked....with evan being affected by the moon, does that mean that hes a lunatic?!

is the warning to the men about keeping away from the baby more for their protection? she could so easily inject them with her venom via a bite?

shame part one is coming to a close, but looking forward to part two. new title perhaps being......daughter of a slave to the servants? from hannahs point of view? interesting to see how she’ll fare, will her paterian or human side win?

fingers crossed for another high entry in the sci-fi fantasy hall of fame :0)

oohshoot

ok so the start of the series was amazing but in the middle everything fell flat i just wish it was more than them living in the mountains fighting with other males... I honestly skipped the last 2 entries you did please throw a curve ball bring back the exciting fun story it use to be. I do want to add youre a wonderful writer and i will keep reading your stories just add a pinch of crazy fun ;)

i had a feeling it was going to be Damiens lol but plz dont stop yet i absolutely love this story!

Great!

I have read your other story and it was amazing! I really love this one too! I think the dynamic of the relationship between Ciara and her masters is amazing. I am worried that something is going to happen now that she isn't bonded to them anymore. Please don't make me cry again!! I am begging you, I don't think my poor little heart could handle the pain! This is a great story, please keep it going for a while, you make me look forward to Wednesdays again. ô¿ô

Like it or hate it?

I loved it!

Your characters are still developing layers! I love it!

Daddy Damien! Did I spell it right?

Keep it coming!

What an incredible world!

You have built such a complex world as the background for your story. I am really impressed. I spent all day catching up on the chapters so far & I am looking forward to the next one!

haHA

i figured it was damien! loved this chapter...this story is so good it needs to be published, seriously!!

this is at par with the elvenbane series i've read....shop for a publisher if you don't have one yet....this is so good...

Awesome! Amazing!

Been reading this series for 3 days already in between work, sleep and eating time. First sci-fi fantasy I've read that sparked my interest. Maybe not sparked... More like inflamed. Lol. Waiting and hoping for a short waiting time for the next chapter! Keep up the exemplary work! =) sooo sooo love your story! And yes, i do agree- this should seriously be published!

FANTANTISSIMO

I'm loving this storyline. No matter what direction this goes in it is as young as Hannah. I would like to see the story follow Hannah as she could be the "Queen Bee" somewhere in the future. I agree with some of the others this could be a book and maybe an HBO series someday. Thank You very much.

I absolutely love this chapter! You continue to amaze me with your originality. I am so anxious to learn what you have in store for Hannah. I am sad there is no longer a bond between them, though. A very intriguing aspect of the story. Thought the birth was well done. How sad to think the dad(s) will never get to hold their little girl. . .not that many little girls hiss at their daddies!

wonderful treatment of this story line

I can't tell you how much i enjoyed this chapter. I have to echo the others who have validated your writing skills. You could definitely put this into publication. Can't wait for future chapters.

Amazing

Love it DW...waitng for next Wednesday already!!

AH-MAZE-ING

AWESOME DW!!! CANT WAIT FOR MORE ABOUT HANNAH AND CIARA

You're are such a great writer! Thank you for sharing your stories.

Lovely

I really enjoy all of your stories. I think you should publish this as soon as your done. You're such an amazing writer.

yay a new chapter!

loved it as always :) poor Ciara that she has to give up her daughter so early and I feel sorry for Damian that he's never gonna hold his child :-/

Wish I could leave 10 stars!

The men can't touch Hannah, but what if Hannah touches one of them? H-m-m-m... I too wanted to see Damien as a daddy, and the other brothers cooing all over Hannah, but my trust in you is implicit by now DW. You are a great storyteller and where you lead I eagerly follow. No regrets yet!

Superb writing!!!

I rate this story right up there with JazCullen's stories, DoctorWolf!!!! This is the first SyFy/Fantasy story that just blew my mind, to the point that I started it last night and just finished with this chapter. Now you've got me wondering how you are going to finish up your story of Ciara/Damien/Bane/Evan/Kein/Christof, along with Hannah....the wheels in my head are running so much, I have smoke coming out of my ears!! LOL!!!!! Please post soon....thank you!!!!!!!!! :)

EXCELLENT STORY

LOVE SCIFI. AND YOU ARE A GREAT WRITING. KEEP THE STORY GOING. AND I THINK HANNAH SHOULD LOVE HER FATHER(S).

Please keep them coming!

I have thoroughly enjoyed reading this series thus far. If it were published I wouldn't hesitate to purchase it. Your development of the characters is wonderful as you weave your page turner. Please, keep the chapters coming! I am anxiously awaiting news on how Hannah grows and interacts. Hopefully she will bring new twists as a "hybrid" child.

Keep up the great writing!

I am really enjoying all of your stories!

Surprised!

I thought for sure the Daddy was Evan! Is Hannah going to grow freaky fast like the Twilight baby?

Coherent and Strong Tale

The Why's and How's will always be subject to tradition.

Hannah will grow quickly in order to be able to seek her own sisters.

I've been reading through this story over the last couple days. The level of detail about the culture and this world, and the way you slowly reveal the information so that it is almost like a mystery reminds me of Star Trek. I've seen a few typos spread throughout the chapters; like where it should say we and instead says be. I'll try to make a note of where they are for you. I'm glad for the plot twists, otherwise this would have become way too repetitive. Overall I have enjoyed it very much.

loving it

rereading it all,loving the story
thank you so much DW xxx. wish i could vote again for every chapter!!! :)

and congrats to you too DW!

I'm afraid your proofreader has missed rather a lot of things. I am still enjoying this, though.

For some reason I also thought the baby would be Evan's though I hoped it would be Cristoph's. Anyway, well done once again. I was hoping Ciara would keep a small connection to her guys but still, very good chapter, the details of the story and explanations of their nature and behavior are wonderful. Little Hannah is a piece of work though... all that screeching! She gets on my nerves! :D She makes me want to say: Use your words girl! Inside voice! Hahaha. Good story.