I love it and it is only the first chapter! I love the idea of him writing his feeling and having her help him and this being the backdoor for him to get close to her even if she wont open the real one right between them!
It is just awesome that there are men out there who have the strength of character and heart to reach out in an attempt to repair a broken spirit like the one in the story. Sometimes we need to read about such gruesome acts of darkness so that we can appreciate those who bear the light.
This story is a challenge in more ways than one. You touch on very harrowing subject matter with Bron's past experiences as well as work to blend in the writing of another to give Bron her own distinctive *voice*.
The level of maturity in this tale is breathtaking. Bron's story flows seemlessly within your writing, we *hear* her and feel her pain.
Adam is a fabulous character, so strong and dependable, so willing to try and find a way through Bron's defences so he can help her and show her hope for the future.
I've loved all your stories but this one is my favourite because it isn't easy to read at some points but you have to keep reading to understand where Bron is at and why she is pushing Adam away.
This is your best work yet and I know you will keep surpassing each chapter as they come to you. I can't wait to continue with Bron and Adam's story :)
First of all, this story makes me go crazy. With the addition of Broken Bones, I nearly threw this iPod across the room when I read it. It's raw, guttural, and extremely emotional. There simply is no way anyone can read that part and not feel something. Either that or you need your pulse checked because your flat lining.
Second, while a few good parts a story does not make, there is no danger of this being true. I think infact the story shines brightly without the inclusion of BB. The fact that you can continue on while skipping BB just shows how accomplished you are at writing stories.
Keep up the good work! I look forward to the next chapters!
That is how writing is done. Everything felt so real; you could feel it happening and though it didn't drive me to tears, my heart wept. Excellent chapter, and I'm so happy you are writing their story.
Ok so much for the speechless part, but I truly am having a hard time coming up with any complement that would do you justice. You've outdone yourself, for now anyway, because there is no doubt in my mind that you will do it again. I had already contemplated it, but you completely sold me on Cedar being my next read once I finish catching up with yours. Congratulations on another masterpiece and again thank you for sharing.
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this story
I am going to be annoying and post this anonymously but mainly as I follow you wonderful people on twitter and I don't want other people I know to see this. This story hits a little close to the bone with me (my situation is no where near as bad, but similar feelings brewing) and when ever I read stories about the subject makes me angry as they are so melodramatic about the whole thing (which in fairness, it is) but with out the truth of the emotions. However, this story truly gets it and I just wanted to say thank you. It is therapeutic in a way to read and experience such a different scenario with different coping techniques but with the same emotional consequences.
Right melodrama over and done with, these stories in general ROCK! but this coupling of Bron and Adam is particularly!
I honestly don't know what to say. I wanted characters different from Nick/Fran and Chris/Mia and you delivered. I'm going to stop here and pick back up tomorrow. I almost feel as if I have invaded someones personal space and I just feel the need to back off.
So emotional right now....I am feeling the sadness of Adam and of Bron being a victim....You are an awesome writer please publish your work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
English
YEAH!!!!!
So nice to see you back dear!! Now more!!
welcome back
no wonder i missed your stories so much with writing like this i can not wait for the next chapter
Two of the best in one chapter......
Ladies, you are amazing. Thank you for another amazing entry.
Great great idea
I love it and it is only the first chapter! I love the idea of him writing his feeling and having her help him and this being the backdoor for him to get close to her even if she wont open the real one right between them!
Doubly Potent
It is just awesome that there are men out there who have the strength of character and heart to reach out in an attempt to repair a broken spirit like the one in the story. Sometimes we need to read about such gruesome acts of darkness so that we can appreciate those who bear the light.
Glad your back :)
This story is a challenge in more ways than one. You touch on very harrowing subject matter with Bron's past experiences as well as work to blend in the writing of another to give Bron her own distinctive *voice*.
The level of maturity in this tale is breathtaking. Bron's story flows seemlessly within your writing, we *hear* her and feel her pain.
Adam is a fabulous character, so strong and dependable, so willing to try and find a way through Bron's defences so he can help her and show her hope for the future.
I've loved all your stories but this one is my favourite because it isn't easy to read at some points but you have to keep reading to understand where Bron is at and why she is pushing Adam away.
This is your best work yet and I know you will keep surpassing each chapter as they come to you. I can't wait to continue with Bron and Adam's story :)
Jaz
xxx
missed you
i am glad your back have missed ya hun, and i know this story is gonna be a tearjerker and i will have boxes of tissues ready for them.
YEY!!!!!!
Thrilled about this story. You know I love all your couples and I can't wait for more on this one. Thank you for gracing us with your talent :)
There aren't words...
...for how good this chapter is. I more than half expect Adam to go hunting for a certain gang member, he has to have thought of it.
Also kudos for having a story within a story!
Excellent chapter
You never fail to impress and this chapter is no exception. I look forward to reading the rest of this engrossing tale.
I know I am late commenting but I've been busy :)
First of all, this story makes me go crazy. With the addition of Broken Bones, I nearly threw this iPod across the room when I read it. It's raw, guttural, and extremely emotional. There simply is no way anyone can read that part and not feel something. Either that or you need your pulse checked because your flat lining.
Second, while a few good parts a story does not make, there is no danger of this being true. I think infact the story shines brightly without the inclusion of BB. The fact that you can continue on while skipping BB just shows how accomplished you are at writing stories.
Keep up the good work! I look forward to the next chapters!
Ladies and Gentlemen
That is how writing is done. Everything felt so real; you could feel it happening and though it didn't drive me to tears, my heart wept. Excellent chapter, and I'm so happy you are writing their story.
*Bowing down speechless*
Ok so much for the speechless part, but I truly am having a hard time coming up with any complement that would do you justice. You've outdone yourself, for now anyway, because there is no doubt in my mind that you will do it again. I had already contemplated it, but you completely sold me on Cedar being my next read once I finish catching up with yours. Congratulations on another masterpiece and again thank you for sharing.
this story
I am going to be annoying and post this anonymously but mainly as I follow you wonderful people on twitter and I don't want other people I know to see this. This story hits a little close to the bone with me (my situation is no where near as bad, but similar feelings brewing) and when ever I read stories about the subject makes me angry as they are so melodramatic about the whole thing (which in fairness, it is) but with out the truth of the emotions. However, this story truly gets it and I just wanted to say thank you. It is therapeutic in a way to read and experience such a different scenario with different coping techniques but with the same emotional consequences.
Right melodrama over and done with, these stories in general ROCK! but this coupling of Bron and Adam is particularly!
Thankyou!
From your secret kiwi admirer
I honestly don't know what to say. I wanted characters different from Nick/Fran and Chris/Mia and you delivered. I'm going to stop here and pick back up tomorrow. I almost feel as if I have invaded someones personal space and I just feel the need to back off.
If Adam really worked in just about every Spec Ops grp,should he have learned something from the SEALS,SAS,USMC or ...whatever
So emotional right now....I am feeling the sadness of Adam and of Bron being a victim....You are an awesome writer please publish your work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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