The Balance in Love Ch. 02

aww

Oh poor shane and aya. Now they will figure out if there's is really a love that can get through anything.

um, er.......

Now, THAT is an uncommon (and unexpected) twist. It will be very interesting to see how this is handled.

oh

he better not turn out to be a dick

thats pretty good

i had a feeling thats what was going to happen when you had blood running down her leg. i doubted it was just a period with that much blood.

i like the way you write and how you convey their emotions.

but

if you read all your stories i wonder if there even can be one where the girl doesn't get pregnant by accident, has a miscarriage or anything related to that. they don't live in the middle ages there things like the pill and condoms out there and i'm sure they know about the birds and the bees.

that is my only major remark. with dylan and dimitri i hoped you bring in another kind of drama but you reverted back to pregnancies and i'm a bit sad about that turn of events.

welcome back

Its good to see you back writing again. This story sounds promising and is starting out well. However could you elaborate further on side stories? Such as the situation with Stella, I would like to know what happened with the short discussion between ayla and Shane after the test. Also if you could put a break between "scenes" that would help when changing time frames or places.
Still glad your back tho.