Two turds in one day. You are really full of shit. Please stop writing now. Back away from the computer. Try something else. Really! Try painting or singing.
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Anonymous09/08/11
i wonder
I wonder if you put as much effort into life as you do with your sick stories you might be a good person but i doubt it.
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Anonymous09/08/11
as written by a 10 year old
very childish. perhaps you have entered that much fabled 2nd childhood. not worth reading.
Others have posted comments that have been a bit harsh, but there is some element of truth to what they said. The plot is kind of interesting, but there is no depth to the characters and the relationships are pretty unrealistic.
It takes a lot of work to write a story, so keep at it.
I see by your bio that you have been submitting stories to literotica for 3 plus years. If you have received the same feed back all this time you have very thick skin. There is help right here in literotica if you request it that could help your approach and would also help you with editing and etc. Take advantage of it.
Knowing that he was going to dump Patrica all along, and wasn't man enough to own up to it.
It was a good thing for her, that Jeff was a loving and caring man that fell in love with her.
So I'd say that the story has a happy ending.
Thanks for the read.
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Anonymous06/07/16
☆☆☆☆+ (4.45/5.0 = 89% = A)
The story started excellent.
The main idea (idée maîtresse) of the plot was brilliant. The 3 characters were well conceived and well introduced to us. But the story does not deserve full 5 stars because the author moved the action from Wife Sharing to group sex & swinging.
Swimsuite Dance Club scenes were not necessary in this chapter (but could have been a good ingredient in Ch. 2).
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Anonymous09/24/16
Long and boring story
Rubbish
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Anonymous12/22/16
Lady named Sara
My 1st wife and I were 3 years married when she got a bad diagnosis, had surgery. We were best described as "active" up until then. There were to be long months of Chemo which meant the end of the sex life, but I was resigned to it. The hope for my wife and I was that she would survive, to be honest.
Imagine my surprise when she sat me down with her friend Sara, who she had asked to "take over" the bedroom chores? She moved in with us and then did exactly that.
A bit over a year passed, the wife recovered but the truth is she was not and never would be completely the same.
We went back to just us again, Sara never was a problem, not really. I still see Sara from time to time as friends, no more than that. Kind of like that year never happened.
Weird for some, it worked for us.
English
WOW
this could have been better.....NOT
I'm having trouble here
Two turds in one day. You are really full of shit. Please stop writing now. Back away from the computer. Try something else. Really! Try painting or singing.
i wonder
I wonder if you put as much effort into life as you do with your sick stories you might be a good person but i doubt it.
as written by a 10 year old
very childish. perhaps you have entered that much fabled 2nd childhood. not worth reading.
Try again
Others have posted comments that have been a bit harsh, but there is some element of truth to what they said. The plot is kind of interesting, but there is no depth to the characters and the relationships are pretty unrealistic.
It takes a lot of work to write a story, so keep at it.
well consider re-reading or have a good editor
a ggooooddd story and start goes dpown hill after 1000 to 1500 words due to poor editing and perhaps the hurry to not re-read your effort.
G_ T__ F___ A___!
O HE UCK WAY!
SORRY BUT I DIDN'T LIKE IT
I see by your bio that you have been submitting stories to literotica for 3 plus years. If you have received the same feed back all this time you have very thick skin. There is help right here in literotica if you request it that could help your approach and would also help you with editing and etc. Take advantage of it.
Richard was a bit of a prick
Knowing that he was going to dump Patrica all along, and wasn't man enough to own up to it.
It was a good thing for her, that Jeff was a loving and caring man that fell in love with her.
So I'd say that the story has a happy ending.
Thanks for the read.
☆☆☆☆+ (4.45/5.0 = 89% = A)
The story started excellent.
The main idea (idée maîtresse) of the plot was brilliant. The 3 characters were well conceived and well introduced to us. But the story does not deserve full 5 stars because the author moved the action from Wife Sharing to group sex & swinging.
Swimsuite Dance Club scenes were not necessary in this chapter (but could have been a good ingredient in Ch. 2).
Long and boring story
Rubbish
Lady named Sara
My 1st wife and I were 3 years married when she got a bad diagnosis, had surgery. We were best described as "active" up until then. There were to be long months of Chemo which meant the end of the sex life, but I was resigned to it. The hope for my wife and I was that she would survive, to be honest.
Imagine my surprise when she sat me down with her friend Sara, who she had asked to "take over" the bedroom chores? She moved in with us and then did exactly that.
A bit over a year passed, the wife recovered but the truth is she was not and never would be completely the same.
We went back to just us again, Sara never was a problem, not really. I still see Sara from time to time as friends, no more than that. Kind of like that year never happened.
Weird for some, it worked for us.
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