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Goodbye, Jerilee Ch. 04

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by Anonymous09/09/11

Pretty bad

'She wasn't going nowhere soon'

Neither was this story.

If you are going to write poor sentences like this you can forget about the reader following your story - they will be too busy laughing or crying.

Read over your story and you will see.

Read every day and your writing will improve.

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