Is This It Ch. 05

this woman gave the hubby a std and blame him

was another man whore in front of his employee.get real and use common sense.stop being a wimp and kick t ass.or be a cockold of the town.she needs to go to aa.

Is This It?????????????

If it is what a waste!!!!!!!

SHAME KNOWS NO BOUNDS

ESPECIALLY WHEN FAMILY ASSISTS IN TRAITORING. TK U MLJ LV NV

Is This It?!

Seriously - is this it?! Is that why the story has that title, because the author knew it would have an abrupt, nonsensical ending? The story was good up until this point, but this chapter was a big disappointment. The reconciliation was far too quick, and unjustified. It's not just that she cheated on her husband with a short affair. He cheated too, so in a sense they were even. But then she made it clear that she had no interest in reconciling, kept on with her lover in a way that publicly shamed her husband, and refused to even say that she loved her husband, not even a little. THEN she wants to get back together? And she STILL has never said she loves him. A big point was made of that all throughout the story, and yet here at the end, she STILL apparently doesn't love him, because she never says it (to sing a song with those words is not the same as to actually say the words in a meaningful discussion). He would be insane to take back a woman who has made clear she doesn't love him. It just seems like things didn't work out with her lover, so she went back to her second choice, her husband, since she didn't have any better option.

This story needs a chapter 6, where a more sincere reconciliation takes place. Perhaps she gets revenge on her lover to show that she really does love her husband and he's not just a second choice? And to show they really can be happy together and aren't just staying together for the kids?

Another RAAC story

There probably should be a category called "Reconciliation at all costs." This woman set out to publicly humiliate him, egged on by her Mom. Not sure, but the phrase "poor white trash" comes to mind (even though Debbie and her family were well-to-do). I don't see any reconciliation without extensive counseling. Oh, and "T" needs to go.

Should have cold cocked t

More better if t has a permimately broken pee pee for his efforts. it is the right thing to do even in bloody britten.

Depth of Emotion Thinking and Sensitivity.

This started out so well, short-chaptered though it was, and was getting somewhere, but this last chapter, if'n I was walking through the Emotion, Thinking and Sensitivity, it's fair to say I would not be getting my toenails wet.
And this is the Last chapter? Where is the rest?
What went wrong?
And why the change from L W to Mind Control?. . . Chaptered Tales really SHOULD stay in the one genre, n'est ce pas?
And as one previous commenter opined, Do we need a "RAAC" section for "Reconciliation At All Cost". My opinion is "No, keep us guessing!!"

Cheers, and Thanks, I think
Kilroy

And What about "T"

Don't care, really, what Happens to his character be it getting off scot-free, . . . BUT. . . the number if times I saw "T" and Read it as "I"....
Words of Wisdom from the audience, Next Time Call him something different, I was thinking TW, or TX, but then people would then be readimg That as "TV" or "Texas".

Experiment a bit with what the name LOOKS LIKE in print, especially the ariel used here.
and a hint picked up from another site.. DVD Review can look like "DUD review".
Thanks, & Cheers
Kilroy

Heartless Bitch!

No Love for a husband, but love for T. You need one more chapter when our hero wakes up from the dream he is in now. Then he realizes that he is still divorcing this Heartless Bitch!

no way!

The bitch publicly shames him by blowing her lover 2 days in a row in front of his associates and all she talks about is how her affair got started. How could they have reconciled without talking about that?

What happened to T? Did he dump her as soon as the divorce proceedings got started? How come you don't mention the kids except in passing? The problem with your short chapters is you don't develop the scenes. This is the worst example of RAAC that I have ever read. This chapter does not fit with the last one. Simply singing a song that she says is her husband's favorites, that she never sung to him before, is not enough. She still has not said she loves him and her actions indicate that he in fact hates him. I would never take the crazy bitch back.

sorry wrong turn here

up until this chapter i was really getting to like the characters ,but you wimped out .No excuses you killed your own story

Lazy end. 1 star.

Karaoke? 'I will always love you?' Oh please enough already.

Crud.

Still needing another ...

... chapter!

I'm not a member of the BTBB so I don't mind if you went for reconciliation if that's how you felt the story should end. It is your story and you certainly can end it any way you wish!

But as pointed out by others there are many loose ends I wish you would tie up. Not only about "T" and others but how about who masterminded the setup? (For instance were T and Irene behind it all)? So consider an epilogue!

Thanks for the sharing!

One other comment ...

Are you aware that I found your last chapter in "Mind Control" instead of "Loving Wives"?

Is this Really, Really It? Indeed, Quelle Appropos.

Well it's been a slow-ish' week in LW submissions. This serial has been the best sustained effort we readers have had to peruse between figeting on
our hands as we wait for the Stang Star opus of the week ( MIA so far).

I wondered if Fawguy had a bus to catch as he brought the series to what seems to be a RAAC conclusion. Janet has been a moody cow to him for literally years, doleing out monthly mercy fucks, cheated in public multiple times, acquired a social disease from her lover and tried to deflect the STI onus on him. She could have infected him but withheld the knowledge from erroneous health clinic notification for two months.

To top it all if this woman ingests three to four drinks, her dormant libido erupts and she becomes 'the town bike'. Is there a combo Antabuse and birth control pill this woman could swallow daily?

This started out so well. Fawguy gave us a semblance of a real man for narrator/ lead character. There was Scottish Highlands local color and the contrast of spouses' differing social classes as garnish .

Chris recounted a credible tale of vocational success as a specialty in plaster restoration. He had flaws but once his family got underway worked hard and was cautious and discrete on his liaisons that Debbie caused on large part by aforementioned 12 x yearly duty fucks.

Fawguy has talent. Judging by this effort , he has more talent then time. I hope he doubles up his chapters in the future and stays away from using cheesy Whitney Houston songs as inspiration when casting about for story conclusion. BTW I hope he made his bus.

Disappointed

If this is the end of the story I am very disappointed. There needs to be more to the story and at least something that resembles an ending. This chapter leaves a lot of loose ends flapping in the wind. Tie them off. Give us more.

Also, why the hell is this story in "Mind Control"? Did I miss something? Or was I the victim of Mind Control?

I have really looked forward to each chapter of this story as it continued to evolve. How do you go from Chris's total humiliation at the end of Chapter 4, to a sappy loving ending in Chapter 5?

The previous commentor was right, I know it's your story, but this ending is lazy and not worthing of your previous efforts.

ITS YOUR STORY

and you can write like your want to (APOLOGY TO LESLIE GORE), HOWEVER EXPECT (INCOMING)....TK U MLJ LV NV

I can see why you went with Mind Control

Because no mam in control of his faculties would go back to this bitch. Debbie has never shown him ANY respect, is he really pathetic enough to crawl back?

????

OK! I hope there is more than this. This can't be it. This was to short. I've followed the story. What you got tired of writting. You even mad this shorter than the other chapters?

I've have never written this before.

This was crap for an ending. You don't go from public humiliation to loving spouse with a song. What about the a$$ that caused this? Do they still work with him? Severl one night stands do not equal a 3month affair. One night stands are lust, a three month affair is emotional. I am a reasonable person and will forgive a lot, but the way this was written, I cannot see ever looking at her without wanted to choke her. I would probably have paused the divorce pending developments, but would not have moved back home and if I did spend the night, it would not have been in her bed.

You had such a good start even with the short chapters. Keep writing, you have talent. Develop an end game. (Was this the end?)

What character had a mind to control.

There was no evidence presented to make a reader think any of the characters in this story had a mind of any kind. His wife gives his sworn enemy blow jobs in public and he reconciles with her immediately? Which one of these clowns has a mind?

Yet another example

of LW stories that cannot make intelligent cheaters. They were both stupid and selfish people. In this case divorce would be the only healthy thing to do. If they are both so easily manipulated, then they will cheat again. Save the children from them also. Terrible examples of parentng. And why is it she gets away with PUBLIC humiliation of him and everyone feels sorry for her. The stupidity germ seems to infect family and friends too. If this is evolution at work, the human race is in big trouble.

how to ruin a story...

just write a throw away ending. Great story until this last chapter. All the wonderful tension and intriguing characters in your previous chapters just went down the drain. Nonetheless, thank you for your efforts Faw.

Story with lousy ending

The outcome of the story is: keep cheating - everything will be OK.
He should have kicked her ass out of the door long ago. It is also unproved that the kids are really his. So a little bit revenge would be the spice of the story.

Great story until last chapter

You had me till the last chapter nothing special ending!

Never worked in construction!

You obviously have never worked in construction. To take the Heartless Bitch back, he would need to sell his business and move to another country!

Great Writing

But the story did not make too much sense to me. I agree with the previous commentator that he would have start all over again in another city if he took back the wife who publicly humiliated him twice. Finally she really had to say that she loves him in a relaxed loving way...

Great Read until

This was a great story until this last chapter, you just ended it with him looking like a wimp, need a couple more chapters so he can get his revenge on T and to see if his mother in law was part of the set up. Have no problem with them getting back together, but it was to quick, this was the first time they had spoke to each other in months and the next day they are back together, first he would need her to prove her love for him, and then they would have to sell up and move away to try to start a new life. if not kick her back to T and his mates and let her become the town whore and write another stories about her whoring her self out with her mother in tow.

crap

Go back with her? Horrible!

I don't mind a reconcilliation story...

But, there are some very loose ends about this one.

First, if Debbie is so broken up about the divorce, then why was she still screwing Little T long after the papers were filed? For the story to work, that really needed to be answered in very straightforward terms.

Second, although Debbie explains the how long she was cheating, and why she was doing it, there is no explanation or reason to believe that she has learned anything from the episode. For that matter, there is no indication of why, or if, she has stopped seeing Little T. even as she is trying to get her husband to return.

Third, there is no indication of how this couple (neither of whom seem TOO dedicated to keeping their marriage intact - to state it mildly) would work in the future to keep from repeating their behaviors.

Somehow, just having her sing a song about 'I'll always love you' — granted, implying that she has finally come to realize that she in fact DOES love her husband — seems like thin gruel to inspire her husband to return to the family, and move past her behavior.

And, if I might add, how could she, her husband and children, ever continue to live in that town? She has pretty much ruined her reputation there, and by reflection, her husband's if he takes her back.

Maybe an epilog to explain some of the authors thoughts on these issues would be in order.

A final observation: the chapters in this story were too short. This was really about a two to three chapter story, rather than five really short chapters.

I'm afraid to think what some of the other comments are like, but I hope that the author might find these thoughts to be constructive as he approaches future stories.

They deserve each other...

I don't know why everyone is upset... neither character is worth two shits... He fucks married women, and cheat on her repeatedly... he is a bigger piece of shit than she is. As far as I can tell she has several "get out of Jail free" cards left in her deck.

Just another WACC story

The dumb slut and the cockold. Are there no men left in the Lit stories and no they do not need to hurt anyone, just leave the slut to her own ways.

P.S. It is just BS to stay together for the children. I know I have been there and hated it.


Kilroy

How is this mind control

Did Debbie learn how to control his mind and nobody else knows it. You can not even put this thing in the right Cat let alone tell a coherent story.

wow seriously

How come everyone is on the guys side? He admitted he cheated on her, Everyone read about him cheating on her. He had multiple partners. She had one partner, granted it was over a long period of time but he cheated on her longer then that. I think they can get over this

WOW more to it, MAYBE????

Great story Good build up (except too short chapters)..
4 ch. on how it started but 1/2 on how it ended.. well one para. on it... why did she change her mind... did Little T(urd) dump her???? How are they going to trust each other?? WOW at least 2-3 more of your chpt's..

Yes as some have said he also did it but he did it discreetly, she did it in public. big diff. not good for either.

This is not over!!!!

Yes he cheated first, but his was one night stands and discretely. Her was open in public view for maximum damage. He had no feelings for his in digressions, but hers is with the one she loves. The Turd T showed no love for her but wanted to humiliate her and him. She never said she loved him, a song don't count. What about there jobs, they both work with the Turd T, he is not through using his slut and will now share her first before passing the slut along. Will he eat his cream pies for the children, fuck the children. If there is no love from both sides then there is no marriage. Staying together for the children will only do more damage to the children in the long run then staying together. Its better to cut your loses so the children can accept and move on with there life's also. Children need love and support from both parents, not one, to grow and mature. So if this is finished then the whole story rates a one, if fawguy88 finishes it more realistically then I'll rate it higher. It will only get a 5-star rating if the bitch pays the Turd T back, that was not love what he did to her and if she loved what he did to her then a divorce is the only course, love or not, she will cheat again.

WTF

sit down take a week and write chapter 5 properly mate that was terible i swear the longer you write a story the worse it gets

Sick

That was horrible.This chapter says only one thing. Men can do adultery their entire life and get away scotfree. They want their wives to accept their cheating and adultery happily. But the same men want their wives to be loyal to them always. If the wife cheats then all hell breaks loose. sick. No wife should tolerate adultery from husband. Wife should chop off balls of the cheating husband and feed off to cats.

ITS ALIVE!!

I think your story has taken a life of its own and is trying to write itself out of the many corners it has found itself in Blow off our comments and take this one as learniing experience. To my mind, there is no shared fault here it was hers now it's all his. Ping Ponging the adultery between them seems to be spinning the wheels of the story and not making for a fulfilling read. Just a simple thought from a simple man. Cheers and keep writing!

the mess of life

well as both my mate & I agree that they are both to blame he never heared her say I love you to him. after somany years. I think he should do some big damage to MR T for what he did. Liked the part where he defended her as she was still his wife . that was a good thing shows he still loves her in some ways. lets have more to this story becuase as one of the other said Mr Turd is not done with her yet. but please make the chapters longer & more action in them. the turd know she what happens when she is druck. knowing that he will make her drink with out her knowing it until to late. As my mate said the guy should have the kids tested to see if they are his. as it sounds like the turd may have put them in her when she was drunk & then sent her to fuck her husband. this he did with out checking that she had no Jiz in her at the time. would love to see the turd get fucked over for what he's done to them both. make them the turds boss. Dianne & Dave

LOL and Double LOL

This is where the shit hits the fa(w)n. No vote.

Not bad.

I think you need at least one more chapter. Some sort of calamitous revenge needs to be enacted on Mr T. Then These two need to explore her exhibitionistic side. Clearly there's potential here for other genres.

What a bunch of ROT!

So, the whore gets away with it, huh. What a crappy tale.

I can't imagine any male with any balls ever taking that woman back after her outragess actions, or a father that would tell his son to do so. This story was just to much to accept in any way.

Good until Chpt 5

Just a story but think you blew the ending, seemed rushed to end the tale and left to many hanging pieces. She a tart and he's wimps out in the last chapter. She has to be drunk to get pregnant and he excepts her never telling him she loves him. Yea, your characters need some real therapy

What a pile of crap!

Pathetic!

no way

There is no way a man could forgive ANYONE for the public humiliation she heaped upon him. The guy would have no self respect at all and that makes this story, as another poster said " pathetic".

Why is he BTB brigade up in arms?

Good story. Don't know why all the outcry 'torch the bitch'. HE was he first one to cheat and did it more than once! The lack of sex from his wife is no excuse, nor was his cheating on her. The wedding vows say 'in sickness and in health, in good times and in bad'. Postnatal depression is serious stuff. BOTH of them cheated, broke their vows and hurt the other. fawguy88, you've got it right. The BTB brigade on this one has no understanding of human relationships or true love. There are no wimps here - it takes more courage and hard work to forgive and rebuild a relationship than to cut and run (with or without revenge.) Signed, Surreptitious