by BeastLover18
I have. Thing for tall Asian guys. Nice to hear these type of stories.
Boring! And in need of some major proof-reading, with many sentences like "I quickly raised his head and looked at his father." Is this story in first person or third person?
…it's called development. Try reading Pynchon. Or Eco. This guy isn't in the same class, yet, but effort counts. A copy editor would indeed be helpful.
it sounded like the friends snuck onto a plane and landed in the states without a passport or going thru customs. post 9-11 that would land all of them in prison and or sent back to korea in cuffs.
continue!!!! Dont stop writing, this was a really good start and I cant wait to read more!!!!!