by totallyatease
No, I wrote this story and forgot about it long before I even new this site existed, I only pulled it out of mothballs a couple of weeks ago.
Sam is not a likable character. He's judgmental, abrasive, and just not likable. Maybe if he had charm then he could be a character I love to hate.
Not as good as your later writing but this was obviously written before you got your mojo. Very hard to like or empathise with your male lead,who appears to suffer from multiple personality disorder!
I agree with previous posts - Sam does not have many characteristics as of yet that make the reader want to be sympathetic towards him. Surely there will be a reason why he's so hostile? However, it has a lot of potential and there's enough to like in it that I will keep reading. :)
... There WILL be another chapter, yes? Love the air of mystery about Chris.
I'm not too certain who 'Chris' is, but he sure does sound interesting;D
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