@ Anonymous - I appreciate your honesty but I would be interested to see a real critique from you after you finished the story rather than the blanket statement you made. Honestly, I think your comment is unfair because you did not finish the story. Perhaps it was slow to get to the action but I still enjoy the story.
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Anonymous09/18/11
Pretty good story.
and it probably hapens more often than not. Mind you, there aren't too many people who are in charge of 130+ people and they come into work on the weekend...that's why they have managers and assistants.
Thanks for the feedback. I am new at writing so perhaps you could fill me in on what of any interest could be added to the ending. The sex, the erotic part of the story, was over. I am not sure what else would matter to the reader other than the brief closure included at the end about Julie leaving and me going home.
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Only one...
Only one comment that I can think of ~~ not really much of a story and was a waste of my time even though I did not finish it.
Really?
@ Anonymous - I appreciate your honesty but I would be interested to see a real critique from you after you finished the story rather than the blanket statement you made. Honestly, I think your comment is unfair because you did not finish the story. Perhaps it was slow to get to the action but I still enjoy the story.
Pretty good story.
and it probably hapens more often than not. Mind you, there aren't too many people who are in charge of 130+ people and they come into work on the weekend...that's why they have managers and assistants.
Endings....
.....that is what most stories missing GOOD ENDINGS that is. Yours was just blaaaaaaaaa
Ending
Thanks for the feedback. I am new at writing so perhaps you could fill me in on what of any interest could be added to the ending. The sex, the erotic part of the story, was over. I am not sure what else would matter to the reader other than the brief closure included at the end about Julie leaving and me going home.
Excellent
Very hot story.
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