Well written and and as tender as the girl in pink . And yet the anonamous comment could only chastise you for incorrectly using the word come. Seems he was only spell checklng
This is a terrific story. But early on you said something about the "plutonic delivery of my words." "Plutonic," an obscure term from geology, cannot possibly be what you mean here. You might conceivably have meant "platonic," but I don't think that was it either. What did you have in mind?
This is a weird blot on an otherwise excellent story.
Very sweet and believable
Thanks for the comments! This was the first story I wrote in one sitting. And yes, I definitely meant "platonic" and I realize the mistake now.
Utterly believable and far above a lot of the usual offerings!
She enjoyed you introducing her to the world of sex and love.
This part was good:
"....She was fondling my buttocks and I was kissing her other ear when I felt her reaching her climax. .... she managed to cry out, "Good God, I can't believe this... Oh, it feels... Oh, with you inside me, it's... Oh God, here it comes!"
...I could feel her pussy clamping down on my cock..... I let out a groan that put every ounce of my being into my orgasm. I imagined the condom was absent, and I was coming into her with all that I had....."
Imgaine she felt it too, as a virgin Christian girl, who'd long wondered what it would be like the "first time" she let a man put a penis in her so willing pussy...
"....At last, I collapsed onto her. I told her I loved her again, with me growing flaccid inside her and not caring. I finally propped myself up and looked at her, and she was positively angelic. Her face was glossy with sweat and tears, and she looked at me like she had just unlocked a secret to the universe. We lay there, intimately entwined and wet. I kissed her once more and felt her crying again. And this time, I knew they were tears of joy. ,...."
She showed you some of her "Christian" love, man.
Realize some of those religious women put-on an act like they're "better" than others, but they have sexual desires just like anyone else.
Be glad she allowed you to express those with her..
I hope you dated her more and didn't use her only as a fling.....
Considering Christian take wine each communion at mass i don't see why she wouldn't drink wine. Also how would playing tennis break your hymen? It happens occasionally in sports like horse riding where the girl is constantly hitting her vagina off a saddle. Running around a tennis court would hardly break it
Some of these other people leaving such harsh and undeserved comments obviously didn't read the same story I did. I love listening to a debate, especially on Christians and sex, and I see you chose the same side I did. Aside from the debate, it was quite a warm story, very believable, sensual without being obscene. If I ever became the first for any woman, I think that's exactly how I'd want it to happen.
Really loved this story. Great job!
Not sure if a Christian girl, no matter how much she might want to keep a guy let go that fast. Maybe over a period of time, but not the first date - just my opinion.
Still a very good story and would live to see it develop more!
Great short story with interesting points of view . It was a classic situation which a lot of people have ended up in. But the couple in the story seemed to work through some tricky issues to an honest an caring conclution. Yep 5 stars from me! BP
As one of the other commenters put it 'your story is sensual without obscenity'
I couldn't agree more.
It is peculiar that the 'Anonymouses' who are so expert in hymeneal rupture but don't put their money where their mouth is and submit something.
For some reason I cannot give you the 5* this story deserves as the system won't let me vote.
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