All Comments on 'Keep Me Safe Ch. 02'

Ohh gosh, I really wanna know what happens next....

OMG, OMG! *Beats head against keyboard* LOL, you win the best cliffhanger award!!! Oh please say you're close to being ready with the next chapter. LOL!

That was just awesome.

I have just this second finnished editing chapter 3 so hopefuly it will be up in a few days.

I liked it.. Pls get the next chapter.. It's too good n too short

I thought it was Amy who took the photos. I knew it could be Chris. Poor Miles. I swear! He can't catch a break! 4 attempted rapes now! And Ryan verbally attacks him after invading his privacy. Jerk!

Ok, this story is starting to affect me emotionally. Can't wait for part 3...lol.

Ahhhh. This second chapter did me in. I'm now addicted.

A little longer chapters and keep it going. Hope we don't have to wait too long for a happy ending. Good job.

Something about your writing style is really throwing me off. It just doesn't flow perfectly smooth yet and I feel like some things are rushed. There are minor grammatical errors too.

Another thing that bothered me was how open Miles is about being raped... From his personality, he doesn't seem like the type who would advertise it.

Don't get me wrong and dont think I'm trying to discourage you- your story is really good and I'm really interested in the outcome of Miley. Just, oh I don't know, add more fillers (?) to make a better transition.

for Anon-

I think that Miles was a bit raw from Ryan treating him badly. I think he was looking for someone to be nice to him and since David seemed to be kind, he opened up. I think sometimes things build up to a point where even a shy person could come out with something personal. I feel very badly for Miles and though I think some might question how he was almost raped so many times, I was a victim twice so it can happen. I think Ryan is acting like an asshole. He had the nerve to break into Miles' personal safe and then attacks him with what he finds. He has never let on that he loved Miles so what right does he have to be mad over anything Miles does? I hope Miles will say that to him!

I'm confused.

If Amy took the pictures how come she acts like she didn't/doesn't know who Miles is interested in, in chapter 1?

I'm just saying... Other than that very, very interesting.

Hi, sorry about the confusion. I've explained this in more detail in chapter 3 which will hopefully be online soon it was submitted on thursday.

awesome build up of storyline, cant wait to hear chapter 3 totally get where urheaded and its great

Hi everyone, Chapter 3 will be online on the 27-9-11.

This is a good story so far, and I've already become attached to Miles. I'm wondering when you plan on updating since it's been 5 days since your comment said you'd update.

I took Chapter 3 down to re-wright after a few comments it was re-submitted a few days ago so hopefully it will be up this week

The new chapter 3 of Keep Me Safe should be online October 5th enjoy

I'm really enjoying the slow build towards an inevitable coming together of Ryan and Miles. One criticism I'll make, and please, take this as it's intended, as creative criticism. The grammatical errors are very distracting. I know, as a writer of erotic fiction myself, that we can get caught up in the moment, trying to get our ideas down as fast as we are thinking them, but I suggest finding a good editor, it will really help, not only with the grammar, but they may have some other ideas as well, to help enhance the story. Editor's are freely available on this site.

Please don't be offended or quit writing, you definitely have a unique style, and I really have been enjoying the story so far, it's just the writer in me I guess, grammatical errors, spelling errors, and punctuation errors are distracting to me and also to some readers. I'm going to read the next chapter as soon as I can. Keep them coming!