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I liked it.
A lot of back stories were given. I really liked that. I had a feeling those bastards would try something (I just didn't know what.) I love how they are making Ken feel. I hope Consuela will learn to trust him.
I await the next chapter.
A NEW MAN IS UNCOVERED
and the world awaits, and is happy, TK U MLJ LV NV
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While I like the story so far...
I thought Ken's reaction to his first nighttime guest was weak and felt contrived. I can believably imagine him reacting several different ways to Marcia's visit that could well have ended up with the same result but been more satisfying to read.
Consuela's reaction to seeing Marcia leaving fit well enough, but the conversation with her mother about it didn't feel natural as I read it, instead it felt stilted.
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