Talla's Temple Ch. 25

Nicely Done

A Well written story. Very detailed and descriptive and provided very nice "mind pictures" for me as I read it. I enjoyed it very much.

I hope you will be continuing Book 2

Thank You

What a ride!

Somehow I think there is more to a mesh than anyone from Form ever allowed anyone to know, though I guess they have a few secrets of their own.

Please write on. I really enjoy your story, it is one of the few truly original pieces I know here.

Thanks for the story

Thanks a lot for a great and original story. I really like the world building, as well as the story and plot.

I hope you plan to continue the story and I will be checking regularly for updates :)

This chapter made me cry

How can they be so wicked to them Poor kids... This chapter came fast hopefully book 2 will come at d same pace. Keep up this excellen work.

Wow

I do believe that this is going to come back to bite the Temple in the ass.

I hope they destroy the temple.

Bring on Book 2.

looking forward to Book 2

looking forward to Book 2

This whole series has been amazing. Never in my life have I eagerly awaited updates of a series of short porn stories, but you've fixed that.

This stuff is great. Thanks.

damn good read

I was skeptical at first, but became very intrigued with this world you created. It gave me a lot to think, question, and pick at. much more than just a story. cant wait for book 2. youre one of the few i actually check back to see if more has been posted. Thank you for letting us into your world.

Great cliffhanger!

Allow me to join the others in, first, congratulating you on the completion of Book 1, and , second, urging you to continue this wonderful storyline in a speedy fashion. There was a lengthy gap between two of your chapters (I forget which two), and I despaired that this story had joined so many other unfinished ones on this site. Thank you for continuing. Keep up the great writing!!!

Masterful

I have to admit that as a sci-fi writer myself, I never came to this site for anything more than a quick read and such things that accompany a lack of true involvement. In fact as a writer i felt that this site was only full of rather unimaginative people writing emotion and lust filled prose. But your writing has kept me riveted and coming back for more than just the usual. In fact, I didn't continue to read as a way to satisfy my beastly intentions, but rather for your skillful adaptation of literature to this genre! You don't write smut for what it is, you've found a way for sci-fi to become more human in mature intention. I do look forward to your future endeavors as a writer, both here and else where. If you'd like I would love to do a collaboration with you. I'll try to send a more private message with my contact information. Congratulations and Cheers!

Cant wait for more

This series is one of the most interesting and intriguing stories I've ever read Pls post book 2 as soon as you can.

Book 2

Hi
Are you going to publish book 2 soon ?
Can you at least post an update please.

Book II

Believe it or not, yes, I've finally finished chapter 1. I'll be submitting it soon.

Thanks for the encouragement!

Xav.

how the hell

am i supposed to go to bed now

Good read

The writing was great, the setting and background were all thought out and intriguing, but the plot left me a bit underwhelmed considering the high standard your hard work set the tale to. Talla jumped the gun acting without all the information available and in the end paid the price. No forward thinking aside what her baser desires demanded of her. It made me shake my head several times and then she and Zhairilo are left at odds against the temple which I have to admit has done pretty damn good considering the barbaric nature of human kind. I feel myself more leaning to the temple's side than the wayward couple, simply because they didn't play things smart. It was a good read, I pity Talla for her suffering, but in the grand scheme of it all, she doesn't have my full heart behind her. The temple has a way of life that works, and her selfishness is now trying to tear it down? I shake my head.

Excellent work none the less.