Imagine

Wonderfully and fearfully made

Glad you did this, it absolutely gave me chill bumps at how it ended.

Well crafted! (And hot!)

Impressive writing, and a hot story. Always love your work.

Haunting story.

It really gets under your skin. Creepy. Sexy. Disturbing. Well-written.

WOW

Everything I would have said was already said in the three previous comments. Different from your other stories but damn good.

Imaginative and

intense. A real, realistic, dilemma mixed with creepy Halloween horror and bravely written. Delicious.

Loved it.

Creepy and hot!

too much

THIS WAS CRAP there was to much unneeded shit on the first page of this and im still dry down there so i rate this as a FAIL sorry

wow

wow.....i dont believe some of these comments......lol......people are crazyly weird

i don't get why ppl get pleasure in writing/creating tortured, insane characters- turning love for a half brother into craziness.....a half bother is barely incest- it's like doing a cousin at best/worst-- i feel bad for hal and how you made him

Hal is a character it's all about the story plot and personality. if he didn't believe having sex with his half brother was so wrong, this story would be totally different. I think it's a good start. no one needs to write a story to please everyone else.

Damnit

I hate your endings. Always. Beautiful story and then CHOP it ends and leaves me frustrated!!!