is up and running. Great story, as always. DG Hear, MFG, scores again. It's truly an honor and privilege to copy edit as fine a writer as DGH, MFG. Enjoy, fans!
I know I've expounded ad nauseum on how much I enjoy your work but, dammit, you just have "it", whatever "it" is. Looking forward to your next offering.
Having unprotected sex at a swingers party is like playing Russian roulette with a Gatling gun.
And having unprotected sex afterward without first being checked is a terrible idea. Four months is nothing for STD's. Not only did HE have unprotected sex at the party, but Sheila had been having unprotected sex for some time with hard core swingers.
Bad, bad bad.....
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Anonymous10/01/11
the characters are
not as good as usual. you told us a lot about the main male character but this is about it. I know nothing about sheila besides what she did and that she did nothing after the breakup besides strange phonecalls and I know even less about anybody else involved in this story.
the story is ok but this is it.
by
Anonymous10/02/11
UDDER??
"There was udder silence for what felt like minutes". Couldn't help laughing at this. Your story contained more grammatical errors than you have shown in the past. -- Thom
by
Anonymous10/02/11
I gotta agree with BigGuy
Reading about swinging and unprotected sex with multiple partners/strangers is fine, but the reality... Mercy!
As a med student I can tell you there are a nightmare of possibilities that come with such high risk behavior (unprotected oral, anal & vaginal intercourse)--AIDS is just the tip of it. Not only are there a host of bacterial infections -some which never show symptoms- that can cause sterility (among other health nightmares), but you have a few forms of herpes (incurable, and definitely a bummer on the marriage/dating scene), several very nasty (and potentially life threatening) forms of hepatitis (also incurable), as well diseases and infections that can cause cancer. And the list goes on from there.
Yikes! You'd be safer playing Deerhunter Russian Roulette.
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Anonymous10/02/11
"There was udder silence"
Aside from the distant mooing from his cow of an ex-girlfriend?
If you want literary perfection, go to a library and read the classics. If you want a great story about realistic characters, take the time to appreciate stories written by people like DG. I have never known him to miss.
If you want literary perfection, go to a library and read the classics. If you want a great story about realistic characters, take the time to appreciate stories written by people like DG. I have never known him to miss.
I really fucked up the "udder-utter" error. I don't know if I was dozy or just plain dumb. Like the groom who gets the bandages wrong on a really fine horse, it hurts to watch a great runner stumble away from the gate, and hear the railbirds curse (and rightly so). Sorry guys, and especially sorry, DG Hear, MFG .
This was pretty good, and I like happy endings. I have to agree with some of the others who mentioned the lack of a condom at the swinging party. I don't know the incubation time of AIDS but I'm sure it's longer than four months.
No characters were harmed in the making of this story. Unlike pornographic videos in which the actors have to protect themselves, the participants in a story don't actually exist. They will only get a disease if the author writes it for them.
This is Fantasyland, which is the only place where unsafe sex is completely safe. I don't think it's the author's responsibility to teach the readers about safe sex. I think the author should be able to assume that the reader knows that this is fantasy, not a how-to manual with the chapter on safe sex missing.
I appreciated reading about the darker side of the swing. I think it's great that you could make that into a sexy story.
Good story!
by
Anonymous10/11/11
Very Good
I enjoyed the characters, the plot and the sex(the right amount). I also like happy endings!
by
Anonymous11/11/11
Didn't Enjoy It
There was no context. So they're in a loving relationship, have been with each other for years, and . . . . . BOOM, he finds out she's a cheating whore and then immediately does the same. I'm all for infidelity stories, but when you set up that they assumedly 'love' each other I'd expect some sort of chain of events that would lead to it, otherwise there's no connection/context for me to the character.
... one editorial quibble: "she and Sue introduced Brad and I to ..." should be "she and Sue introduced Brad and me to ..."
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Anonymous01/29/16
I'm thinking before she moved away
Sheila made a huge scene at their wedding, ruining the day then made sure everyone knew what they had done, which tainted his reputation with everyone in town. Beware a woman scorned.
English
Yes!
DG,
Thanks for sharing on Lit.
x
YES,
as always a great read! You never disappoint... Thanks for sharing with us!
I like your stories...
Thank you for writing them.
tom anon
The Master of Feel-Good
is up and running. Great story, as always. DG Hear, MFG, scores again. It's truly an honor and privilege to copy edit as fine a writer as DGH, MFG. Enjoy, fans!
'The path of true love n'er shall run smooth'
DG 's words are fine shock absorber for a bumpy true love excursion though .
Surprise, surprise, another great one!
I know I've expounded ad nauseum on how much I enjoy your work but, dammit, you just have "it", whatever "it" is. Looking forward to your next offering.
Good Story
The first page was one of the darkest chapters I have seen written by DG but then came Julie... Thanks
Having unprotected sex at a swingers party is like playing Russian roulette with a Gatling gun.
And having unprotected sex afterward without first being checked is a terrible idea. Four months is nothing for STD's. Not only did HE have unprotected sex at the party, but Sheila had been having unprotected sex for some time with hard core swingers.
Bad, bad bad.....
the characters are
not as good as usual. you told us a lot about the main male character but this is about it. I know nothing about sheila besides what she did and that she did nothing after the breakup besides strange phonecalls and I know even less about anybody else involved in this story.
the story is ok but this is it.
UDDER??
"There was udder silence for what felt like minutes". Couldn't help laughing at this. Your story contained more grammatical errors than you have shown in the past. -- Thom
I gotta agree with BigGuy
Reading about swinging and unprotected sex with multiple partners/strangers is fine, but the reality... Mercy!
As a med student I can tell you there are a nightmare of possibilities that come with such high risk behavior (unprotected oral, anal & vaginal intercourse)--AIDS is just the tip of it. Not only are there a host of bacterial infections -some which never show symptoms- that can cause sterility (among other health nightmares), but you have a few forms of herpes (incurable, and definitely a bummer on the marriage/dating scene), several very nasty (and potentially life threatening) forms of hepatitis (also incurable), as well diseases and infections that can cause cancer. And the list goes on from there.
Yikes! You'd be safer playing Deerhunter Russian Roulette.
"There was udder silence"
Aside from the distant mooing from his cow of an ex-girlfriend?
excellent
excellent
A top notch DG story!
I really loved it. Definitely Five Stars!
To hell with petty-assed critics!
If you want literary perfection, go to a library and read the classics. If you want a great story about realistic characters, take the time to appreciate stories written by people like DG. I have never known him to miss.
To hell with petty-assed critics!
If you want literary perfection, go to a library and read the classics. If you want a great story about realistic characters, take the time to appreciate stories written by people like DG. I have never known him to miss.
Fun read.
A terrific story. Really two terrific stories. Just wonderful. Thank you Mr. Hear.
Mea Fuckin' Culpa
I really fucked up the "udder-utter" error. I don't know if I was dozy or just plain dumb. Like the groom who gets the bandages wrong on a really fine horse, it hurts to watch a great runner stumble away from the gate, and hear the railbirds curse (and rightly so). Sorry guys, and especially sorry, DG Hear, MFG .
Okay
This was pretty good, and I like happy endings. I have to agree with some of the others who mentioned the lack of a condom at the swinging party. I don't know the incubation time of AIDS but I'm sure it's longer than four months.
Just Lovely!
Thank you! A beautiful story,beautifully told!
Great Reading
Great Reading... as I have enjoyed all your stories. You have a wonderful talent.
I liked the story, condoms or no condoms.
No characters were harmed in the making of this story. Unlike pornographic videos in which the actors have to protect themselves, the participants in a story don't actually exist. They will only get a disease if the author writes it for them.
This is Fantasyland, which is the only place where unsafe sex is completely safe. I don't think it's the author's responsibility to teach the readers about safe sex. I think the author should be able to assume that the reader knows that this is fantasy, not a how-to manual with the chapter on safe sex missing.
I appreciated reading about the darker side of the swing. I think it's great that you could make that into a sexy story.
Good story!
Very Good
I enjoyed the characters, the plot and the sex(the right amount). I also like happy endings!
Didn't Enjoy It
There was no context. So they're in a loving relationship, have been with each other for years, and . . . . . BOOM, he finds out she's a cheating whore and then immediately does the same. I'm all for infidelity stories, but when you set up that they assumedly 'love' each other I'd expect some sort of chain of events that would lead to it, otherwise there's no connection/context for me to the character.
Yeah more of that secrets hurt theme
She was a liar and a cheat and her head was stuck way up her ass - it came unstuck way too late to help -
Nicely done -
Great story ***** but...
... one editorial quibble: "she and Sue introduced Brad and I to ..." should be "she and Sue introduced Brad and me to ..."
I'm thinking before she moved away
Sheila made a huge scene at their wedding, ruining the day then made sure everyone knew what they had done, which tainted his reputation with everyone in town. Beware a woman scorned.
good one
glad he dumped the skank and found a real woman....
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