by lstorywriter
Change of tense makes this story a tough read. First person, third person, which is it??
There was no change in tense--it's consistently in the first person (all perceived through the eyes of I). I thought it was thin for a contest entry, though. Nothing special as a story--not much story at all, actually. There are some off images. For instance, the sparkle of the eye isn't flesh. Ho hum, much the same as most other essentially sex scenes found on this site.
If this is the best you have to offer for a contest or a nornal story imput for "Literotica" please "Do not write any further stories." This one was a total waste of time.
I so totally loved this story! Could just imagine that being me looking for my next prey. Kitty.
Way to much intro and varied between story telling and commentary, stick to one theme, nice try but not competition material.