My Sister Eva Started It All

Normally

I like your stories, but this one was just another huge dick, brainless sister and utter bullshit narrative!

Oh who cares what others think

I think it's good sure it was totally unrealistic but who cares its made so the reader has to get some relief.or the will exploded

sir, thanks for your stories they're great

top three incest writer.

VERY Hot

Fantastic story, one of the best I have ever read on this site. It had everything. I'll br reading more of your stories, but this will be hard to top

Dreaming

this kinda sounded more like a teenage boy's fantasy, a dream, i didn't really believe it but it's such a good story, don't get me wrong :)

good stuff

good job good read from start to finish

one of the best

I stayed hard the whole story ...Incredible

Fantastic story

WOW!! Great story, I was totally into it the whole way through. I couldn't put my iPad down I had to keep reading. Please keep up the good work.

Polly :-)

damn

one hot story you are great at keeping the action going when is the next chapter cumming

didn't finish it......felt punkd'

You know something D, as soon as I read your first story on literotica, I KNEW I shouldn't indulge anymore. I'm not surprised with the content here; just thought I should give it (& you) another chance, & boy was I sorry.

I agree with the poster. This is one Frigging teen boy fantasy. WTF??

Please stop posting....You totally suck! All your stories SUCKD!!

Leave. Don't come back.

Fuck him

Of course that dude posted anonymously. Pussy. I just don't have an account. This story is great and you NEED to do a couple more chapters, not just one.

Enjoyed the story.

You must be in my age bracket to use a "Tales of Wells Fargo" reference.

Too bad we don't know what happened November 2 through January 2 of the next year. Did they live happily ever after?

To anonymous

Hey pussy, how about you write something or at least have the balls to post under an account name.

I liked the story, perhaps a tad OTT but it's a fantasy and it was a good read no matter what.

To "mcbtws" re: Normally

I appreciate the comment, but hey,you've been on here nearly two years and still haven't posted a story yet. How can a writer learn how to NOT write an "utter bullshit narrative" if you don't show me how! Just a thought.

To those of you anonymous ones who get pissed when the writer comments back - get a life! By the way, I'll be busy responding so control your urges to bitch about each of them. Thanks.

dezurtdawg

To "texaswaldo60 " re: Damn

Glad you liked it! Since I posted this as an entry to the Halloween contest I am not allowed to have another chapter. That will not prevent me from continuing it with another slightly different title. I'm just trying to work the title so it follows in order on my author's page. And yes, it will be 'action packed' as others have called my stuff.

dezurtdawg

To anonymous who " felt punkd' "

It is obvious that you just don't like my stories. I have no problem with that! There are several writers on this site whose stories I despise. The difference is, I just won't read them anymore, but I see no reason to comment about how I detest them. What is the point?

So next time you see my name as the author please just skip right over the tale. How about it, do we have a deal?

dezurtdawg

Great Story

Just like your other stories, this one was interesting and fun to read. Hope you write many more in the future because I am always watching when you submit one. Thanks alot for your time and effort.

To "Brockstud " and the anonymous just before him

Of course my stories are a bit OTT! As you say, they are fantasies and are thus allowed to go where ever I chose to send them. Not much into 2-1/2 inch dicks pumping(?)into 400 pound BBWs. I also only write fiction where the sky is the limit. My life is my life and shall never be written about here. Glad you liked it.

As to the other comment about my use of 'a "Tales of Wells Fargo" reference.' I have no idea what you are referencing so I will have to re-read it to figure it out. As far as the next couple of months for them, just hang on to your horses... it's coming.

dezurtdawg

A true Master of Art

I loved your story. I just had surgury yesterday, and this story brought me to pure ecstasy. I wish you the best of luck on winning the Halloween contest. But I really hope you continue with another chapter, even if its with another title. Maybe the next one should involve a 4some, with mom, Amber, Evie and her brother. Maybe the mom and her daughter would taste eachother. Overall, a true master of erotic literature. I applause you.

I loved it dawg!

Definitely a Five Star effort!

Great job!

I really enjoyed the story. Well written and well paced. Look forward to many more stories from you.

This one definitely calls for a followup chapter. Very enjoyable read.

Oh yeah!

Great story. You made me hornier than a 7 peckered billy goat! I hope you continue and get Evie, Amber and Robin involved in a foursome say at a secluded cabin somewhere. Keep up :-) the good writing.

And now there are three.

The young stud is going to be a very busy man, now that he has three women wanting his cock.

I like the thought that all three of the women are BI, and that will give two of the women something to do, while Dale fucks the other of them.

A great story with a happy ending. Or is there more yet to come?

I hope so!

Thanks for the great read.

Absolutely wonderful

This is a great story. You combined story and smoking hot sex better than all but a few. It seems that most of the time it is either story or sex but not both. 5* and I will read others that you have written.

Knock them all up!

Is Robin still fertile? Knock Evie and Amber up in the meantime! Have incest babies!

DELUSIONAL

To each is own, I suppose.

Over exaggeration is possibly stimulating for those hoping to actually have a first experience at some future date.

I prefer stories more related to reality.

Really ??

Honestly, All The Sex Scene Was Good ... U Went Into Details ..Nice ... But U Pushed It Way 2 Much .... Only The First Page Feels Realistic ... As Soon As U Go Into The Second Page It Feels Like I've Just Entered Som1's Never To Be True Stupid Fantasy ...... I Mean C'mon ....

But Still Good One Buddy ... Try Keeping It A Lil Real Next Time :)
3.5* out 5

didn't waste my time

I stopped reading after "nstead I now sport a solid eight inches that is as big around as my wrist! (If I measured it down the underside to my balls it is nearly 11 ½" but that is probably cheating to measure it like that.)" Have you ever seen a wrist before?

?????!

I don't know what that guy was talking about. I loved the whole story. Nice work. Who gives a shit about misspelled words. Geez!

just further proof.

this is just further proof of why you are one of my favorite writers on literotica. Such a hot story that I nearly passed out in the middle and finished reading it when I came to.

from "felt punkd".....again

No D, we do not have a "deal".

I comment to get the writer to put out better stuff. This is why I comment & why I'm not going anywhere.

Its ok you feel comfortable with what you write & from some the comments you've got fans who are into that sort of thing, but a word of advice:

Read ALWAYSWANTEDTO, RGJOHN, TURNIPHEAD, RAWDOGPRO, MUSED, SCOURIES (early stuff), etc.....world famous Literotica authors, then you'll see what I mean about better stuff.

Sorry D, but your stories still !SUCK! and require a re-boot.

-ALAIN

Loved the fantasy

I love to read the stories that take me away from reality.

If you want reality, watch the news or read the news paper. This is fiction.

Good job!! Nice revenge story.

To "-ALAIN " AKA Anonymous punked

I am amazed at how powerful your requirement to read only porn perfection is! Granted the six authors you mention are among the best and yes I HAVE read many of their stories. But they write in their style and I write in mine. That does not mean that my stories "!SUCK!" as you so kindly state. There are currently 54137 members here who have submitted at least one story which must really be tough on you since most of them obviously fall well short of your pick of 6.

You say you want to "get the writer to put out better stuff" yet all you can say is it was a waste of your time and that my story "Suckd" (you left out the 'e'). So unless any author you comment on this way is a mind reader, you are not achieving your stated goal. Such a sad waste of time!

I am curious about one thing though ... how did you manage to post two (2) anonymous comments? I believe this site only allows you to do one unless you trick the system by using different computers. Just wondering.

Keep reading, if you so choose, but why waste your time with another comment just to rant about how the story 'Suckd' and you didn't finish reading it.

P. S. Thanks to all the other readers for their comments - good or bad - and their votes - also good or bad although I prefer higher ones.

And to -ALAIN, I prefer only one vote from you and remember, I have the right to remove your - or any other - comments if I so choose. If you have read much of my stuff you know that I have seldom done that as I feel most comments should remain as posted. Like yours.

dezurtdawg

Interesting Story

Well now Evie is such a naughty girl. The story is a very ego stroking thing. Not a horrible thing as fiction goes. Being a sexual deity at times is a good thing at times. I nearly stopped reading early on, but I decided to stick it out. I had to see where the author was headed. I enjoy a good fantasy and there was no woman left unsatisfied, so it worked out. So scold an author or commend the author; that depends on how reality invades life. You didn't write the story how I like it! OK then, ummm yeah imagine that. The story was written, I would def nail Eva just to show her up and Amber was icing on the cake. Mom, well she needed a lil somethin, somethin and sonny-boy was the scratch for the itch. Ya'll get over it, it's friggin fiction.
RS

Amazing

Great story! The details show when reading it all. As for the critic who hates your writing so much, it shows just how stupid some people are. Leaving BS comments and hiding behind a anonymous "guest" name. Very pathetic!!!

HOT Story!

I totally enjoyed this story, and can't wait to see what happens when Mom talks to Eva!

Thanks for entering the Halloween conteest!

It's really great to see some of LITEROTICA'S best authors submitting stories to contests again.

For a while there the only stories the contests were getting were 750 stories from the SURVIVOR authors and in categories like non erotic and non human!

Meanwhile the reading public wanted good, hard hitting erotica. Which you're helping to provide. Thanks...

Interesting/Amazing Fantasy

Your style of writing did not bother me at all. The "revenge (Evie), Love/lust(Amber), Sex God(Dale), and mature-desire(Robin)" elements made the story... "versatile" in a way and kept me wanting to read more. Keep writing and I'll keep reading! Great story overall!

Eva started it...

.....but YOU have to CONTINUE IT...PLEASE!!!!!!

Great

Hope you will write another chapter to this story. It was great, Only wish I was one of the girls getting fucked so good.(Had to use my vibrator while reading)
Thanks,
Jill NZ

Story belongs in fantasy

Good writer but almost laughingly sophmoric fantasy.

Re: Fantasy per 'anonymous'

Perhaps one of us doesn't grasp the idea of 'fiction', but unless the author states that he/she is writing a TRUE story, then EVERYTHING on this site is fantasy! But hey, at least you thought it was good, and that's all I'm after!

dezurtdawg

Well, others have said it, but...

you REALLY need to continue this one! I want to hear more about the family stud, and his adventures in the family! :D

nice

continue

More, More, More!!!!!!!

This really needs at least a sequel.

Great Story

This was a great story lived it and need more, I know it was a one shot Halloween story but hay if you every think to add more about Dale, his sister, her friend, and there mom Robin. It is great and I hope you do more with them even if it's just Dale, his sister, and there mom. Thanks

You've done a wonderful job with this story. The only problem I have with it is that I'm not sure a person can come that many times in a row before passing out (or possibly worse ;)). I can't say for certain, but the number of times Evie came certainly seems impossible to me. Even so, I've yet to be able to finish this story. It's that damn good. lol I'll leave you to wonder just WHY I haven't been able to finish it yet. ;) I look forward to finishing this one and reading more submissions from you. Keep up the good work. I really hope you win the contest.

Good I am expecting the next part

A Great Halloween Contest Story

I have really enjoyed this story... I am curious to see what will transpire with Dale and his three loving lovely women
Eva, Amber & Robin... I'm also interested to see this story continue with its current plot... Thanks for a great read so far...