I'm not much into the Incest/Taboo type stories but yours sure did grab my attention. I loved this story and can't wait to read more. It took me a long time to get through this story. It was HOT!!! Really looking forward to more. Keep up the great work.
First; can a guy cum that much? Don't know, the most times I personally have in one session with the little woman is seven. Not bragging, just the truth. Took several hours of great fun when neither of us had to worry about the next day! Don't know how many times she made it (women cum in so many different ways) but she was quite satisfied. Not a teenager so could NOT get it up the next day;-(
Second; probably will have a new story coming up in a month or so (life keeps getting in the way of writing) that ties into this one. The title will give it away but it won't be posted as part of a series.
dezurtdawg
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Anonymous11/22/11
Horse shit
I started to read this story but quit at the first mention of an 11 1/2 " dick. It might have been a good story or maybe not but I do know that reality was definitely out of the window.
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Anonymous12/03/11
the writer's teen fantasy
Sorry but this was nothing but a load of crap where the writer puts down his fantasy. Personally I'd rather read a good story with plenty of sex in it than a ton of "ooh, harder, faster ooo I'm cummiiiiing" that basically has a story that, without the sex, would be about 2 paragraphs.
First warning sign of it just being a teen fantasy is that it's written in first person.
You DO know that there's a difference between a story being made up (fiction) and it being fantasy right ?
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Anonymous12/27/11
cowards
The previous Anonymous comentators are cowards that strike out at people to make themselves feel better, as apparantly am I, but they wont stick around to see thier effect on the writers writing style ( if any change is affected). I, like a previous comment noted, don't accually have an account here. Nor could i as it is expected that to have an account you will write. I am aware of my limitations, and they are many, but i know that if i wrote anything at all it would be FANTASY, FICTION or SCIFI. not 'real life' as mr' 11 1/2 inch is impossible' suggests. Your story was entertaining and i would love to read a sequel, despite what the plebian detractors demand. Keep on Writing, you spin a good yarn.
contact me through my email if you are insulted by my honesty, COWARDS.
This story is great and I liked it....okay so it is fantasy but it is written in such a style that it is plausible...I do love the power play between Dale and his sister, Eve, as that happens often in families.
I am unsure whether the negative comments on your story is due to jealousy or other personal issues at stake...
The best fantasy EVER. Seriously. Three hot girls in 24 hrs? His sis, mom, and sis' best friend? I wouldn't mind takin' a crack at all three of them either! Haha. But man, my girl knows how they feel. Generally it takes me at LEAST an hour to cum and that's just the first time. Normally it takes 2-3 hrs though, and the only one who can keep up with me is her because it takes her just as long the first time.
I'd love to go down the line starting with Amber and then Eva, then Robin. Make a sandwich out of it! Now on to the next part.
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Anonymous04/23/12
Are you 13?
This is just an adolescent, incestuous, completely impossible fantasy. Nothing more. Proof? A spiderman mask with a mouth hole? Puh-leese.
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Anonymous05/05/12
Vaginal Contamination
I'm concerned in a lot of these stories about the tongue switching back and forth between the anus and vagina with no cleaning at any time. Can be very dangerous to the vaginal tract and beyond. Did however enjoy the story especially when he told his sister that he would see her at home.
This isn't at all the kind of reading I usually enjoy, but that said I still kinda liked it. Sure it's OTT, but it doesn't pretend that it isn't, any reader can realize it's OTT within the first 3 paragraphs and after, no one is forcing you to read it.
Largely I don't understand the community's, and moreso the anonymous' community's ire for smut. If you don't like it, don't read it. I've had some people tell me my stories are pretentious drivel, well um fair enough lol...but uh you know then just don't read them :)
I think that any story offered up needs at the very least to taken with an open mind and just read or, not read. The ire, probably isn't overly necessary. Especially if yer anonymous.
this feels like the Indiana Jones: Legend of the Crystal Skull of smut. If you're going to go over the top you might as well go all out. Needless to say I enjoyed it.
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Anonymous08/13/12
Keep up this great writing style of yours!
This is the first time I have read any of your writings and it WILL NOT BE THE LAST!
You build the scene well and without a lot of slang that other writers seem to need. You also carry the theme well throughout the story and stay in proper context.
It's a marathon, isn't it?
I’d have liked It just a bit more if Dale wouldn’t have been superman. But it was a really fun read. ‘Exaggerated’ doesn’t even start to describe it.
Thank you for that fun! ;-)
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Anonymous09/17/12
Mujhi
Machikni mujhi randi ko ban......its fantastic......i loved it a lot.......randi mujhi lado jasto lekhchhas mujhi..............Keep writing man.............
If this is a description of your "abilities", you are a much better man than I. Thanks for a great morning of reading as well as a great story.
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Anonymous10/16/12
Crazy enough
I had this same experience, Step sister is 4 yrs older, but everything else happened...
I have good genetics and I've always worked my core/play soccer...
That's just crazy how u put my experience into this story... like u knew me!
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Anonymous11/08/12
7 1/2
Gigitygoooooooo
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Anonymous12/08/12
lado kha ,ma neepaeli hu
machikne muji
it was really fucking great
lado kha ,muji tero kathaa.
maile yo lekhe ko bez ,upper anomolous wrote in same language
@anomolous ,sathi ,malae add gara hai 5kype-fbbots is userrnamm
loved your comment
can;t stop laughing
But really story was fantastic
i hope i was up ,My cock inch is 7 inch ,I hope i had sis like u descriipted
it was fantastic
I loved your story,you have given me a challenge "i wil make more bbigger dicck than yours bez it is loved by girlz"
thanks
well writenaccc
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Anonymous12/08/12
Lado Kha
Hii again
as a black haatter
i have found her real picture
https://fbcdn-sphotos-b-a.akamaihd.net/hph otos-ak-ash3/23770_101210273255241_2878382_n.jpg
y a see is really hot
i have her fb profile too :D
cheers
Contact writer-plz identify if that is pic
i am 99% sure
too add me at masush2 at g.mail
loved it dude... i dont give a damn what all the negative comments say.. and i read them... you have your own style of writing and it is really quite intriguing for a lustful fantasy story it was really quite amazing.... AND TO ~ALAIN~ GET A LIFE AND REALIZE JUST BECAUSE YOUR A LIMP DICKED PERFECTIONIST DOESNT MEAN WE ALL HAVE TO BE JUST LIKE YOU.... GOD I WOULD FUCKING SHOOT MYSELF IF I WAS LIKE THAT PRICK.
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Anonymous04/04/13
It would be wonderful if could continue this great story. You're my favorite writer. Please continue.
by
Anonymous04/11/13
hot
HOT, HOT, HOT.
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Anonymous04/19/13
bla bla bla
What a man who can give multiple orgasms and has a neverending supply of cum gets a bit boring after you have read a few of your stories
How about joining the real world, unless you are John Holmes secret love child, there is no way this is believable. This is the literary equivalent of those shit rap stars who would have you believe that they have an 18" dick & can service 200 ho's every night. Please stop insulting our intelligence, hence the 2 stars.
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Anonymous05/21/13
got to page 2
The 'endless cum & hardon machine' is a bit much - let them take a well deserved break lol. Nevertheless a 5 star made me burst 2nd page story.
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Anonymous05/21/13
You egotistical bastard
The most unrealistic story I've ever read. One.
by
Anonymous05/23/13
Just plain silly
Sorry, but it didn't do it for me
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Anonymous06/06/13
Stories
I m sorry for the rest of you poor slobs. I thought the idea of this site was to write STORIES, not what YOU call believable. I loved it as erotic entertainment. Are you people like those who actually believe Star Trek, or do you enjoy it as entertainment. I think it was a great story and I hope you keep writing. I am a member but something has happened to my password. So I am writing as Anonymous. But My user name is "Old Man".
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Anonymous06/07/13
Why the complex?
Why so many writers here have - "I have a small DICK, and to make up for that, I'm fantasizing a BAMBOO between my legs" complex?!!!
this story was good at first but went too far and the ending was kind of dull. IF this was one of your firsts keep trying you show promise if not seriously consider shortening your stories or add more foreplay and/or seduction
...I'm gonna shoot some spidey silk uP into that...
Awesome and very enjoyable story! Ignore the loser below who said the story was 'too long', I hate assholes like those that jack off over some betty boop cartoons and then call it a 'novel'... damned whiny pre-mature ejaculators!
As with one or two other comments, the mother did nothing for me; but then I don't have a mother fetish, just sister/daughter (which is funny b/c I don't have either! lol)
English
LOVED IT!!!
I'm not much into the Incest/Taboo type stories but yours sure did grab my attention. I loved this story and can't wait to read more. It took me a long time to get through this story. It was HOT!!! Really looking forward to more. Keep up the great work.
To: Wyldnight, biggeorgewnc, et al
First; can a guy cum that much? Don't know, the most times I personally have in one session with the little woman is seven. Not bragging, just the truth. Took several hours of great fun when neither of us had to worry about the next day! Don't know how many times she made it (women cum in so many different ways) but she was quite satisfied. Not a teenager so could NOT get it up the next day;-(
Second; probably will have a new story coming up in a month or so (life keeps getting in the way of writing) that ties into this one. The title will give it away but it won't be posted as part of a series.
dezurtdawg
Horse shit
I started to read this story but quit at the first mention of an 11 1/2 " dick. It might have been a good story or maybe not but I do know that reality was definitely out of the window.
the writer's teen fantasy
Sorry but this was nothing but a load of crap where the writer puts down his fantasy. Personally I'd rather read a good story with plenty of sex in it than a ton of "ooh, harder, faster ooo I'm cummiiiiing" that basically has a story that, without the sex, would be about 2 paragraphs.
First warning sign of it just being a teen fantasy is that it's written in first person.
You DO know that there's a difference between a story being made up (fiction) and it being fantasy right ?
cowards
The previous Anonymous comentators are cowards that strike out at people to make themselves feel better, as apparantly am I, but they wont stick around to see thier effect on the writers writing style ( if any change is affected). I, like a previous comment noted, don't accually have an account here. Nor could i as it is expected that to have an account you will write. I am aware of my limitations, and they are many, but i know that if i wrote anything at all it would be FANTASY, FICTION or SCIFI. not 'real life' as mr' 11 1/2 inch is impossible' suggests. Your story was entertaining and i would love to read a sequel, despite what the plebian detractors demand. Keep on Writing, you spin a good yarn.
contact me through my email if you are insulted by my honesty, COWARDS.
buddamacca@hotmail.com
come get me, MmmWah!
Very good
This story is great and I liked it....okay so it is fantasy but it is written in such a style that it is plausible...I do love the power play between Dale and his sister, Eve, as that happens often in families.
I am unsure whether the negative comments on your story is due to jealousy or other personal issues at stake...
My comment: keep on writing for sure.
unbelievable to say the least but kept me thoroughly entertained. it was like an action flick, no need to think, just sit back and enjoy. well done.
Great Read
It needs to have a sequel with Robin and Evie with him.
GREAT STORY
would love to read what happens between Robin, Evie, Amber, and Dale
Mad
At this point im mad that there isn"t another ine yet I check every other day and im going crazy
Dude please
Make a 2nd one even a 3rd this is so fucking amazing
2nd part
{ the sister eva continues it all } is the 2nd part of this story, came out on 11/21/11
That Was--
The best fantasy EVER. Seriously. Three hot girls in 24 hrs? His sis, mom, and sis' best friend? I wouldn't mind takin' a crack at all three of them either! Haha. But man, my girl knows how they feel. Generally it takes me at LEAST an hour to cum and that's just the first time. Normally it takes 2-3 hrs though, and the only one who can keep up with me is her because it takes her just as long the first time.
I'd love to go down the line starting with Amber and then Eva, then Robin. Make a sandwich out of it! Now on to the next part.
Are you 13?
This is just an adolescent, incestuous, completely impossible fantasy. Nothing more. Proof? A spiderman mask with a mouth hole? Puh-leese.
Vaginal Contamination
I'm concerned in a lot of these stories about the tongue switching back and forth between the anus and vagina with no cleaning at any time. Can be very dangerous to the vaginal tract and beyond. Did however enjoy the story especially when he told his sister that he would see her at home.
A boys fantasy come true.
Good story although a bit far fetched. Well written, good development of plot and line, and excellent little twist with the mother thrown in.
LMFAO
Great story And i WAS laughing out loud when i read the part when he let his sister know who he was!!
All things considered, thanks
This isn't at all the kind of reading I usually enjoy, but that said I still kinda liked it. Sure it's OTT, but it doesn't pretend that it isn't, any reader can realize it's OTT within the first 3 paragraphs and after, no one is forcing you to read it.
Largely I don't understand the community's, and moreso the anonymous' community's ire for smut. If you don't like it, don't read it. I've had some people tell me my stories are pretentious drivel, well um fair enough lol...but uh you know then just don't read them :)
I think that any story offered up needs at the very least to taken with an open mind and just read or, not read. The ire, probably isn't overly necessary. Especially if yer anonymous.
Keep writing.
Thank you
Fantabulous story
Well...
this feels like the Indiana Jones: Legend of the Crystal Skull of smut. If you're going to go over the top you might as well go all out. Needless to say I enjoyed it.
Keep up this great writing style of yours!
This is the first time I have read any of your writings and it WILL NOT BE THE LAST!
You build the scene well and without a lot of slang that other writers seem to need. You also carry the theme well throughout the story and stay in proper context.
WELL DONE!!!
This story is really crazy!
It's a marathon, isn't it?
I’d have liked It just a bit more if Dale wouldn’t have been superman. But it was a really fun read. ‘Exaggerated’ doesn’t even start to describe it.
Thank you for that fun! ;-)
Mujhi
Machikni mujhi randi ko ban......its fantastic......i loved it a lot.......randi mujhi lado jasto lekhchhas mujhi..............Keep writing man.............
You?
If this is a description of your "abilities", you are a much better man than I. Thanks for a great morning of reading as well as a great story.
Crazy enough
I had this same experience, Step sister is 4 yrs older, but everything else happened...
I have good genetics and I've always worked my core/play soccer...
That's just crazy how u put my experience into this story... like u knew me!
7 1/2
Gigitygoooooooo
lado kha ,ma neepaeli hu
machikne muji
it was really fucking great
lado kha ,muji tero kathaa.
maile yo lekhe ko bez ,upper anomolous wrote in same language
@anomolous ,sathi ,malae add gara hai 5kype-fbbots is userrnamm
loved your comment
can;t stop laughing
But really story was fantastic
i hope i was up ,My cock inch is 7 inch ,I hope i had sis like u descriipted
it was fantastic
I loved your story,you have given me a challenge "i wil make more bbigger dicck than yours bez it is loved by girlz"
thanks
well writenaccc
Lado Kha
Hii again
as a black haatter
i have found her real picture
https://fbcdn-sphotos-b-a.akamaihd.net/hph otos-ak-ash3/23770_101210273255241_2878382_n.jpg
y a see is really hot
i have her fb profile too :D
cheers
Contact writer-plz identify if that is pic
i am 99% sure
too add me at masush2 at g.mail
Nice
Ok I'm 7 1/2 in. fully so I'm close
great story
loved it dude... i dont give a damn what all the negative comments say.. and i read them... you have your own style of writing and it is really quite intriguing for a lustful fantasy story it was really quite amazing.... AND TO ~ALAIN~ GET A LIFE AND REALIZE JUST BECAUSE YOUR A LIMP DICKED PERFECTIONIST DOESNT MEAN WE ALL HAVE TO BE JUST LIKE YOU.... GOD I WOULD FUCKING SHOOT MYSELF IF I WAS LIKE THAT PRICK.
It would be wonderful if could continue this great story. You're my favorite writer. Please continue.
hot
HOT, HOT, HOT.
bla bla bla
What a man who can give multiple orgasms and has a neverending supply of cum gets a bit boring after you have read a few of your stories
Oh really?
How about joining the real world, unless you are John Holmes secret love child, there is no way this is believable. This is the literary equivalent of those shit rap stars who would have you believe that they have an 18" dick & can service 200 ho's every night. Please stop insulting our intelligence, hence the 2 stars.
got to page 2
The 'endless cum & hardon machine' is a bit much - let them take a well deserved break lol. Nevertheless a 5 star made me burst 2nd page story.
You egotistical bastard
The most unrealistic story I've ever read. One.
Just plain silly
Sorry, but it didn't do it for me
Stories
I m sorry for the rest of you poor slobs. I thought the idea of this site was to write STORIES, not what YOU call believable. I loved it as erotic entertainment. Are you people like those who actually believe Star Trek, or do you enjoy it as entertainment. I think it was a great story and I hope you keep writing. I am a member but something has happened to my password. So I am writing as Anonymous. But My user name is "Old Man".
Why the complex?
Why so many writers here have - "I have a small DICK, and to make up for that, I'm fantasizing a BAMBOO between my legs" complex?!!!
not for me
this story was good at first but went too far and the ending was kind of dull. IF this was one of your firsts keep trying you show promise if not seriously consider shortening your stories or add more foreplay and/or seduction
Best ever
Make more
'Nihil nove sub sole'. - As they say: 'shit always loves shit'
One more typical, and childish tiny pervert
almost incredible
This story was SSOOOOO HOT! I came so hard off of it. The part with the mom,though,quickly disinterested me. Still great though.
This story is too long...the part with the mom was boring...and its all too unrealistic.
Awesome
this was sexy story! when Amber and Evie were cuming, i got turned on!
Very nice
Kinda disappointed Dale didn't get to visit with every other girl on campus but perhaps next chapter, huh?
Scale
Wow, where is Dale. I need him. Great story.
...I'm gonna shoot some spidey silk uP into that...
Awesome and very enjoyable story! Ignore the loser below who said the story was 'too long', I hate assholes like those that jack off over some betty boop cartoons and then call it a 'novel'... damned whiny pre-mature ejaculators!
As with one or two other comments, the mother did nothing for me; but then I don't have a mother fetish, just sister/daughter (which is funny b/c I don't have either! lol)
great fucking story
Loved this story kinda reminds me of me lol.....except the incest part.
WOW!
So fucking good!
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