Loved this! Incest is one of my favorite type of stories and this is one of the best I have read. Please continue it!! Either with Eva and her mom's "talk" or even with their future plans to marry. Great job!
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Anonymous10/01/13
sequel, yes
yes there is a sequel to this story
it's called My sister eva continues it all
look under the DEZURTDAWG name to find it
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Anonymous10/18/13
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Well, this story is fairy-tale-kind, but it's somehow fun to read. Thanks for a nice evening.
great story hope mores cumming on this story its pretty hot
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Anonymous09/09/14
Annoying
Stopped reading after page 2, the notion that a 7" cock (apparently it shrunk 1" since the start) is huuuuge and that even at 8" any woman/girl would run away screaming is a clear indication of inexperience since 7 or 8 may be a good enjoyable size and is above average, it's nowhere near huuuuge and terrifying. Eventually it became annoying enough to ruin the story alltogether with some of the other inexperienced flaws in it.
It might have been a bit more believable if you had split it into 3 different stories. Amber, E V, and mom. but putting them all together, and having it all happen in 24 hours or less, made it hard to accept as even remotely possible.
But it never quite delivered. His sister and Amber are such sluts I can't imagine having a serious relationship with then, unless you consider disposable fuck toy a serious relationship. Tossing the mom into the mix didn't help either.
Lots of fucking is what it's about, and this story has that. We like to meet Dale but he's probably been put out to stud now. What a horse!
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Anonymous11/30/14
great storie
It's a great story overall there's a reason why its called a fantasy people nothing has to be exactly true if you want to read a realistic story you got to go find something else who are you to judge what the writer puts into a story may I remind you that you're reading this and probably knocking one off only because of the fact that you can't get any yourself so instead of trying to degrade the story how about you actually look into the actual story line doesn't have to exactly line up with reality nowadays who the f*** cares there are plenty of people out there who make plenty of different story types go find something else if you're going to degrade this man's work as for the author I want to congratulate you on making a great story keep writing don't let these dumbasses go and get you down and tell you otherwise I'm looking forward to chapter 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 and so on and so forth until you decide to stop writing on this story again great job with the story looking forward to the next one in the series
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Anonymous12/04/14
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OMG loved it PLEASE right more!
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Anonymous12/19/14
Fantastic
This series was fantastic.
. It was a definite 10 but since the top is 5 I settled for that. Keep up the good work.
It was marathon sex without much intimacy. In fact, after the descriptions of his relationship with his sister, the idea that she didn't kick his balls up around his ears for sexual "fraud" when she found out doesn't make sense. Assuming, of course, she couldn't tell the guy she got so close to that he was literally inside her was the brother she had lived with her entire childhood.
The author seems to think a big prick makes everything work out alright in the end. That, and the main character's rampant, almost comical egomania, blew any ability to suspend my disbelief. As others have commented, every woman he meets (including his mother!) just starting to blow him after a few minutes in his presence? That kind of plot belongs in the mind control category.
Despite all that, the mechanical sex itself was fairly well done. If the author can just give us actual reasons to care about his characters, his future stories could greatly benefit.
One last note to those posting the reflexive, childish and even death-threat-laden defenses of the writer and his work. The comment section exists for a reason. Nobody gets better at writing by just hearing empty praise.
For those making the specious argument that no one should comment negatively when they can just go read something else, the narcissistic author can simply turn off the comments for their stories if they don't want public feedback, or if they believe their work will be judged unfairly.
If the reader is just supposed to "keep it to themselves" if they have criticism, then anyone else can make the argument (which I disagree with, by the way) that maybe the author should "keep it to themselves" and not bother submitting stories. I don't believe in either.
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Anonymous06/28/15
Jesus H ...?
I always hear folk say "Jesus H" but I never knew what it meant. I'm sure that's just me though. The story is great and I have it bookmarked. I'll admit I do have fantasies about this, I don't think it's possible. It's very hot and I'm glad I found this. Thank you for working so hard to make this a great story. Keep it up -Elisa
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Anonymous07/01/15
amber !!!
Amber was the star of the story for me and I really enjoyed the description of the scenes giving all the details. I loved it and would encourage you to write more.
Wow, that's a long comment! How come you haven't posted a story of your own?
I know why you didn't seem to like my story; it contains none of the following: "School Uniforms, Cheerleaders, Lingerie and French Maids"! Definitely your fetishes, not mine.
I do wonder why, when another reader comments in defense of an author, you suddenly decree the story writer to be a "narcissistic author" who should "turn off the comments for their stories if they don't want public feedback". That is a huge, and unfair, leap to decide on your own that the defensive comments were apparently posted by the author him/herself.
I choose to let most comments remain posted unless they are particularly vile or offensive. (After all as you know that is the job of the author to monitor the comments and delete as needed.) Yours will stay.
Anyway, TDF, thanks for reading my story and taking the time to write your comment. Hopefully you also voted, 1 to 5, your choice.
One question...what the hell is that a photo of???????
I do have to say I thoroughly enjoyed this story. It is probably in my top 15 incest story list. I will say I do agree with that tall dark guy. It did seem like having a big prick makes everything better but these are just stories. No one wants to read about the night of the four inch dick. Like I said I did truly enjoy this story. I will look forward to reading more of your stories. Thank you very much.
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Anonymous07/15/15
IT WAS HOT.
I would like to read a continuation.
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Anonymous08/02/15
Hi, the part with the Halloween costume is excellent. I think you should have stop the story where the sister sees the Spider-Man costume on her brother door.
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Anonymous08/04/15
More please make a series
Love your story
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Anonymous08/13/15
No title
That was an amazing story. I extremely enjoyed it! Looking forward to your next story!
English
a sequel, please
This is a great story, very well told. Any chance of a sequel... Robin and Evie's 'talk', maybe? Keep up the good work.
Sequel?
Loved this! Incest is one of my favorite type of stories and this is one of the best I have read. Please continue it!! Either with Eva and her mom's "talk" or even with their future plans to marry. Great job!
sequel, yes
yes there is a sequel to this story
it's called My sister eva continues it all
look under the DEZURTDAWG name to find it
* * *
Well, this story is fairy-tale-kind, but it's somehow fun to read. Thanks for a nice evening.
THE BEST
Trully kinky could it continue, perhaps with Mom and Evie's talk and Amber tagging along as the 'sis-in-law and later dad joining in? what do u think?
HOT
Is there a sequal. That was really hot and sexy.
WOW !!
Damn - I do like reading your stories !!
Very hot story!
You kept my dick hard through almost the entire afternoon! Thank you for a nice afternoon!
I quit reading at 11 1/2" dick. if i cant find a story believable, i don't read it.
same
This is the same thing on fanfiction
great read loved it thanks
Excellent
was a great read
Ruby
OHMIGOD if anyone wants to hook up post a comment! This made me so horny...
Hi Ruby
This made me way harder than I thought it would. I'm interested in your take ;)
unbelievable
that was unbelievable and so hot and sexy even if it was illegal
TaB00
IF LOVIN YOU IS WRONG I DON'T WANNA BE RIGHT!!!!!!!!!!
Damn. This the best story I've read by far!
Horny
I just cummed with a screw driver in my pussy . Great story he sounds hot .
sweet
great story hope mores cumming on this story its pretty hot
Annoying
Stopped reading after page 2, the notion that a 7" cock (apparently it shrunk 1" since the start) is huuuuge and that even at 8" any woman/girl would run away screaming is a clear indication of inexperience since 7 or 8 may be a good enjoyable size and is above average, it's nowhere near huuuuge and terrifying. Eventually it became annoying enough to ruin the story alltogether with some of the other inexperienced flaws in it.
it soon became too much
It might have been a bit more believable if you had split it into 3 different stories. Amber, E V, and mom. but putting them all together, and having it all happen in 24 hours or less, made it hard to accept as even remotely possible.
Brutal
How did this story get such a high rating?
So Much Potential
But it never quite delivered. His sister and Amber are such sluts I can't imagine having a serious relationship with then, unless you consider disposable fuck toy a serious relationship. Tossing the mom into the mix didn't help either.
good story I do not know what they are bitching about
Almost there
He just needs to make Dad his bitch, impaled on his cock; then they all can wander around naked and fucking all day every day.
Story delivers
Lots of fucking is what it's about, and this story has that. We like to meet Dale but he's probably been put out to stud now. What a horse!
great storie
It's a great story overall there's a reason why its called a fantasy people nothing has to be exactly true if you want to read a realistic story you got to go find something else who are you to judge what the writer puts into a story may I remind you that you're reading this and probably knocking one off only because of the fact that you can't get any yourself so instead of trying to degrade the story how about you actually look into the actual story line doesn't have to exactly line up with reality nowadays who the f*** cares there are plenty of people out there who make plenty of different story types go find something else if you're going to degrade this man's work as for the author I want to congratulate you on making a great story keep writing don't let these dumbasses go and get you down and tell you otherwise I'm looking forward to chapter 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 and so on and so forth until you decide to stop writing on this story again great job with the story looking forward to the next one in the series
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OMG loved it PLEASE right more!
Fantastic
This series was fantastic.
. It was a definite 10 but since the top is 5 I settled for that. Keep up the good work.
Dmilrs & Grind
Porn with humor. I loved it.
Eva may have started it, but Dale finished it!
While I am in awe of his equipment, I was even more impressed by the three ladies abilities to use it. Keep up the good work.
UNDER HER NOSE ALL THE TIME
PARDON THE PUN. I REALLY LIKE THE STORY. IT IS IN MY FAVORITES
RON TEXAS
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:))) What a shit :)))
:-)
There should be more stars. GREAT!!!!!!!!
more
This was a great story. I would love for a sequel to be written so that I can enjoy that one too
wow
The hat trick. Now Dale has all the fine women he wants. Greeeeeat as Tony the tiger would say or Even better as Dale's lovers will say. 10 stars plus
Ron Texas cowboyridecc@yahoo.com
Amazing
One of the best writers/stories on here, sad I don't see more of your work.
"We spent the next four hours switching back and forth as I would fuck one of them to two or three orgasms and then switch to the other"
Damn, Dale, don't you know that should you have an erection lasting more than four hours you should see your doctor????
More more we want more
listen to the comments left by your readers. You have to continue with this. 5 stars +
OMFG
I love ur story dude!!!!!!!!! its sooo awe!!!
Keep writing! pls!!!
Mechanical and Off-putting.
It was marathon sex without much intimacy. In fact, after the descriptions of his relationship with his sister, the idea that she didn't kick his balls up around his ears for sexual "fraud" when she found out doesn't make sense. Assuming, of course, she couldn't tell the guy she got so close to that he was literally inside her was the brother she had lived with her entire childhood.
The author seems to think a big prick makes everything work out alright in the end. That, and the main character's rampant, almost comical egomania, blew any ability to suspend my disbelief. As others have commented, every woman he meets (including his mother!) just starting to blow him after a few minutes in his presence? That kind of plot belongs in the mind control category.
Despite all that, the mechanical sex itself was fairly well done. If the author can just give us actual reasons to care about his characters, his future stories could greatly benefit.
One last note to those posting the reflexive, childish and even death-threat-laden defenses of the writer and his work. The comment section exists for a reason. Nobody gets better at writing by just hearing empty praise.
For those making the specious argument that no one should comment negatively when they can just go read something else, the narcissistic author can simply turn off the comments for their stories if they don't want public feedback, or if they believe their work will be judged unfairly.
If the reader is just supposed to "keep it to themselves" if they have criticism, then anyone else can make the argument (which I disagree with, by the way) that maybe the author should "keep it to themselves" and not bother submitting stories. I don't believe in either.
Jesus H ...?
I always hear folk say "Jesus H" but I never knew what it meant. I'm sure that's just me though. The story is great and I have it bookmarked. I'll admit I do have fantasies about this, I don't think it's possible. It's very hot and I'm glad I found this. Thank you for working so hard to make this a great story. Keep it up -Elisa
amber !!!
Amber was the star of the story for me and I really enjoyed the description of the scenes giving all the details. I loved it and would encourage you to write more.
To: talldarkfellow
Wow, that's a long comment! How come you haven't posted a story of your own?
I know why you didn't seem to like my story; it contains none of the following: "School Uniforms, Cheerleaders, Lingerie and French Maids"! Definitely your fetishes, not mine.
I do wonder why, when another reader comments in defense of an author, you suddenly decree the story writer to be a "narcissistic author" who should "turn off the comments for their stories if they don't want public feedback". That is a huge, and unfair, leap to decide on your own that the defensive comments were apparently posted by the author him/herself.
I choose to let most comments remain posted unless they are particularly vile or offensive. (After all as you know that is the job of the author to monitor the comments and delete as needed.) Yours will stay.
Anyway, TDF, thanks for reading my story and taking the time to write your comment. Hopefully you also voted, 1 to 5, your choice.
One question...what the hell is that a photo of???????
dezurtdawg
Pretty damn good story
I do have to say I thoroughly enjoyed this story. It is probably in my top 15 incest story list. I will say I do agree with that tall dark guy. It did seem like having a big prick makes everything better but these are just stories. No one wants to read about the night of the four inch dick. Like I said I did truly enjoy this story. I will look forward to reading more of your stories. Thank you very much.
IT WAS HOT.
I would like to read a continuation.
Hi, the part with the Halloween costume is excellent. I think you should have stop the story where the sister sees the Spider-Man costume on her brother door.
More please make a series
Love your story
No title
That was an amazing story. I extremely enjoyed it! Looking forward to your next story!
Loved it
I would love to experience this girls
phoenix23ninja@gmail.com
Email me if you want to make this happen
By the way i dont check email that often
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