All Comments on 'Danger Zone Ch. 01'

by vvolfe

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WerewolfEnthusiastWerewolfEnthusiastover 12 years ago
one word

one word would be ouch. that would bloody hurt she is gonna have one killer headache when she wakes up. anyway like it so far. looking forward to reading more.

MizTMizTover 12 years ago
First Story?

I tried to see what else you may have written but your submission page showed no storys, not even this one. Strange.

Anyway if this is your first story congratulation. You have peaked my interest and that doesn't usually happen w/a one page story. You also left one heck of a cliffhanger.

I hope the wait for chapter 2 isn't a long one. And again, if this is your first story congrats on being a published author!

stealthgundamstealthgundamover 12 years ago
great start!!!

but can i suggest that you submit multiple page stories rather than single page entries.

vvolfevvolfeover 12 years agoAuthor
Yes it's my first story

I had thought 4 pages in word would have equaled to at least 2 pages on the site but I was sadly mistaken.

I am working on the next chapter now and I will try to make it longer. Now that I know you like it, I'll try not to keep you waiting :D

IzkaPlm18IzkaPlm18over 12 years ago
Loved it

LOVED IT!

I do hope you post another chapter soon! :P

And yea, I know what you mean about the writing... I think you need to have at least 10-13 pages on Word to have a pretty good size on Lit.

Good Luck!!! :) I can't wait for the next chapter

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
i want more.....

This is a great start to a story, but i'm waiting for the rest hopefully just as good ... keep it up.

wall13666wall13666over 12 years ago
Good Start

Bit short, not a big fan of stories that start and end in less then a page. Hope to see more soon. keep it up it has some great potential

jdjdisherejdjdishereover 12 years ago
Keep it up.

I wouldn't listen to those complaining about how short your story was. Sometimes having it short only serves to grab someone's attention and get them interested in the next chapter. Anyways, I liked the mystery here. I'll be looking forward to more.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Oh wow!!!

I have been meaning to read this story forever!!!! Now I'm wondering what took me so long. You've really got me hooked with this first chapter. :-) -DC

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