As I listen to Janis Joplin sing "Try", I wonder how this chick got it confused. Sex always changes the game.....like a bio-chemical reaction when you mix things that perhaps shouldn't be mixed?
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Anonymous10/16/11
You need an editor. This feels very rushed. I don't even know the girl's name. Take your time this could be a great story.
Storyline has great potential, but you went from talking about your sexual partners to 6 months later, you're saying you had no idea Quinn was so good. (In two sentences). Wheres the build up and sexual tension? What's the girls name?
English
MORE! And soon!!
Please? =D
i hope you continue this story. i want to see how they both will "crash" or who will be the one to admit it first. great story.
Talk about confusion
As I listen to Janis Joplin sing "Try", I wonder how this chick got it confused. Sex always changes the game.....like a bio-chemical reaction when you mix things that perhaps shouldn't be mixed?
You need an editor. This feels very rushed. I don't even know the girl's name. Take your time this could be a great story.
I Love
'Best Friends to Lovers' romances but I have to agree with anon on the editing...and, what is her name?
Too Rushed
Storyline has great potential, but you went from talking about your sexual partners to 6 months later, you're saying you had no idea Quinn was so good. (In two sentences). Wheres the build up and sexual tension? What's the girls name?
Wonderful
Me likey!
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