Doing It for You

decent writing

but WBC will flame you and this story, and vote "1"

great stuff

it was hot hot hot the bible thumpers will roast you that's how you know it s good

Bible Thumpers? WBC?

Okay, I'm lost. This is LitErotica - why should my story be attacked by bible thumbers or this mysterious WBC? True, it's a story that includes explicit sexual content, however, it IS a story, too. It has a beginning, middle, and end. It has tension and twists. The main characters learn, grow, and change by the end of the story. The explicit material demonstrates the breadth of what she did and what he experienced. And, at the end, they remained a loving couple - learning to grow past a physical concept of faithfulness to a deeper, more satisfying concept. All works for me. :D

Now I Know Exactly Why William Macy ( the camera operator ) went crazy in ' Boogie Nights' !

I enjoyed this story but felt the ending was a cop out. Up to then the author did a sterling job describing the porn set , the habitués & the protocol . I felt like a insider . Nice! No detail was missed chronicling the narrator's discomfort at his wife's new gig.

Then in the last few paragraphs - Presto Majesto! - everything is copesthetic . They had something pure & priceless going on & traded it in for six thou . These are tough times economically but it rings a little hollow trading unsullied wife for rebuilt transmission.

The up side is that pupils at schools where she substitute teaches buy her DVDs & be that much more ' hot for teacher' . 5 stars to the author who, pushing these quibbles aside, had me riveted to his story .

Porn within porn

The writing is decent, and very descriptive, flowing in an easy way. The light humor eases some of the potential tension a couple of times.

I'm not sure about the plot. I think the ball got dropped, but that's only because I like to read about characters with some level of respect and faithfulness, for themselves and for others.

All in all, it's not bad story.

i 'm not

I'm not a bible thumper and i think your story stinks and so does your attitude don't write if it bother you so much because your content makes a normal person puke.

Good Writing

and a very hot story. But I feel it would have been better in Group than in LW.

Thanks for the read.

To 'I'm not': shouldn't someone be monitoring your internet use, you fucking simpleton?

Keep writing bucky.

didnt like ending

the husband gave in too easy, would have been better story if he got mad at wife, threating to leave her. but instead writer had him wussing out like most husbands do in literotica lately

Marriage?

I wouldn't ask a girl friend to do this,yikes! Found this a complete turn off, no love or respect here, just sluts and wimps, no thanks.

Thanks for the comments so far

As for the ending being a "cop-out," I'll agree, it can read that way on the surface. And the idea of him getting mad and stomping off the set was made in the Story Idea section where the idea came from and didn't feel embraced by the guy suggesting the story.

Aside from that - I've read stories and wondered why the author chose to end that way or end it there. So, here's my support of the ending for anyone who cares. It starts with the man's reaction to seeing his wife in that sexually charged atmosphere. A struggle begins within him. As shocked as he is, he's clearly struggling with arousal, too, indicating that a piece of him is approving of what's happening as his internal values clash against "how can she?" There's more than money on the line and the story represents a major shift in their relationship as it grows beyond the attitude of "absolute faithfulness" and into the realm of devotion towards one another on a deeper level.

What's more, I believe the ending suggestions - regardless of what just happened - their life will continue to be the same as he gives to her (or she takes from him) in a way that's customary and familiar to them both.

What happens next is left to the reader and can be a subject of conjecture. On the surface, it appears they have not torn their relationship asunder. They've learned, grown, and will face their future together with a new dynamic that flies in the face of old fashioned values. As for her future as a substitute teacher: yeah, she probably ruined that for herself in this puritantical world. She might need to find a way to replace that lost income. Or, the world might need to grow a bit to accept that she is still a viable person.

Excellent ending!

If that didn't break them up, then nothing will. Loved the ending. There was a lot of love and emotion going on at the end and he was able to see that. Keep writing.

BuckyDuckman I'm really surprised

about your own comment of how and why.

you use some big words here like : their relationship as it grows beyond the attitude of "absolute faithfulness" and into the realm of devotion towards one another on a deeper level.

or: their life will continue to be the same as he gives to her (or she takes from him) in a way that's customary and familiar to them both.

or: They've learned, grown, and will face their future together with a new dynamic that flies in the face of old fashioned values

or: As for her future as a substitute teacher: yeah, she probably ruined that for herself in this puritantical world. She might need to find a way to replace that lost income. Or, the world might need to grow a bit to accept that she is still a viable person


all that said even without batting an eye, your the first one who would not even shake hands with anybody when presented to you.

and of course you give a fuck what kind of teachers are in school.

they way you wrote the story , that marriage is dead.

WTF? Can someone translate for me?

I don't mind addressing questions about why I wrote the story the way I did. I think it's a cool feature of this site. But I have little patience or interest in addressing the opinions of anonymous flamers.

So, I'll ignore the suggestion that I'm overly literate ("you use some big words..." Really?) or the wrongheaded suggestion that I don't care about teachers. However, I would LOVE for someone to decipher what this person meant when they wrote:

"all that said even without batting an eye, your the first one who would not even shake hands with anybody when presented to you."

I've read it half a dozen times and still can't figure out what it means. I'm not socialable in their opinion? That's the best I can figure out.

new working

I loved it have done a few movies with my mate and afew lovers. would love to do a gangbang like that but as I'm 57 years young now. I love to fuck and my guy is away most of the mth working as a driver so he knows I have lovers and he has seen me with some of them. I think she should do some more movies . lets have the next part to the story keep it going.
Dianne

IMO

If she were my wife she would be totally useless. She showed her willingness to fuck all those guys on camera, now she expects to be satisfied by just her husband...I don't think so. He will now have to look over his shoulder to see if there are anyother guys waiting to be serviced. Will he be able to trust her for only $5000? I know i wouldn't be able to. I think I would be more like the director, "For the record? You're more of a man than me."

great story

great story. why someone would critize a story after reading the subject and the category is beyond me. lighten up people.

Well written but,

this is another marriage that has begun the journey to divorce.

Peice of shit story

Why did he not suck the men off himself. He is not a man and should be elminated from the human race.

He will never satisfy her again

as her loving husband he is done, she will not even be able to tell if he is inside her. He should have left the set as soon as she took her clothes off. He is just one fuck(up) dude.

That should read

fucked(up) dude.

Two Different Guys

The Second he saw her getting undressed he knew, he would not like this. He protested and she talked down to him and put him in his place (HER PLACE AND SCOTTIES)!

This guy would have told her right then - do this and go home with the crew, never again to my house!

When she stripped on the set, he would have quietly walkede out - BUT, you changed characters! What WAS ONCE A MAN IS NOW A LAUGHABLE WIMP, A WUSS, A CUCK and an abject loser.

Jill, is now a hot, horny porn star no longer needs light boy - who needs Mr. little dick!

Awakening

I like the way 'light-boy' thinks he appreciates their relationship and then is faced with the need to reinterpret her personality, including evidence from their childhood! Fortunately, he is able to cope with what he discovers about her and about himself, although it is not an instant revelation. Very nicely done! Re: the flamers...I don't like non-consensual, so I DON'T GO TO THAT SECTION!!! (and hold my peace when elements of NC show up in LW.)

MUST BE THE DRUGS

GUYS YOU DO NOT REPEAT DO NOT SNORT A LINE OF VIAGRA.

fun hot story

Well paced and well written...great tension...would have liked a non-vanilla ending. Thank you for sharing your storytelling talents.

Ah, inspiration! A sequel to come soon!

Thank you so much for the story related feedback, including those who have issues with the subject matter. I'm sure it was exceptionally difficult for you to take the time to read all the way through my little story when the subject matter was so bothersome for you. I'm unsure what can motivate someone to suffer like that, but then, I guess that's just one more area where we'll disagree.

Meanwhile, I'm proud to announce a quite unexpected development. Your comments have inspired my muse to write a sequel to the story that will deal with the after effects for Jill and our hero, Light-boy. Will L.B. grow a pair? Will Jill finally get what she has coming to her? Is this marriage and life-long love affair truly on life support? Stay tuned, fans and fans with fangs, the answers are waiting story approval.

Loved the story!

I'm glad that there will be a sequel coming! I guess I'm a little bias because it was my idea in the first place, but I'm excited to see what happens to Jill!

Little information

I would also like to say to everyone flaming Bucky he wrote a lot of the story from a dream that I had!

Fantastic

This is what Loving Wives used to be all about; an innocent wife finding that inner insatiable slut. Bravo! I can't wait to read the sequel.

cunt

This guy should have spilled blood! Are there really guys out there who allow this shit, or even encourage it? Time to nuke mankind out of exsistance if that's the case.

sequal

The only thing that needs to happen in the sequal would be for the pussy protagonist to grow a pair of testicles and go fuck Jill's friends, family, and co-workers just to see how she likes it.

This isn't Loving Wives

This guy is a cuck, post it in fetish so we don't have to read this crap.

HI IM BILLY

FOR THE LOVE OF GOD IN HEAVEN HELP ME MY CAPS LOCK IS STUCK FOR THE LOVE OF GOD

Chapter Two Posted

I was so inspired by some of the earlier comments about the nature of their relationship, I felt compelled to write a second chapter. http://www.literotica.com/s/doing-it-for-you-ch-02 Happy reading!

Really great story!!

Super hot!

We loved your story! Very well written and hot! It amazing that some people feel as though this is true life and can't wrap their small heads around a fantasy. It seems to us that the haters in loving wives probably have been hurt by their significant other and vent their frustrations on the writers as they were incapable of pleasing their spouse.

Outstanding story!

Hot, hot, hot!!!!!

Fantastic

I've followed the thread on the Story Ideas page and would have written this if I had time...but you outdid anything I could have done...great job!

For those that do not know this was an idea on the Story Ideas forum that Buck picked up and wrote in record time. Regardless of the subject matter or dispute on the relationship, it was an excellent job at taking a plot not his own and moving forward with it.

Awesome job BD!

OSMOSIS IS LIKE AN APHRODASIAC

for turning on watchers and wanna be pornos. TK U MLJ LV NV

What a load of shit

Can't wait for the aids test - how awesome is that

How sad...

Fat, drunk and stupid is no way to go through life, dear Anonymous. (Thanks Dean Wormer!)

As the author, I can assure you not a single, imaginary person was harmed in the writing of this work of fiction.

Saxon_Farted out of his poopchoot

another cuck and wannabe cuck was born

I waited until I read the second story before leaving this comment and I'm glad I did. This story really evolves in part two, though it's part two is a different kind of story. I guess, if I was just looking to jerk-off, I would read this one, because it was fun seeing her get gangbanged. I don't know that I can believe how it came about, but that's okay. Your other story, "The Girl With The Past" is more believable to me about a woman choosing to do something like this. But I don't think that was the kind of story you wanted to tell this time, was it? I should check dates to see when you wrote each one, but it doesn't matter. Good hot story and who the fuck are leaving all those anonymous comments? I'm surprised most of them even know how to read!

Suspension of Disbelief

The story was well written, not rushed and very exciting as a plot line. My only critique is that it would have been more believable if she were to do it with more
hesitancy and extended convincing.
To just jump in with five guys, DP, etc was a bit much. Perhaps having her move from a little volunteer fluffing to doing one or two guys would be more believable. My experience is that women don't open up that quickly. Still, a very hot concept and storyline. The "inside baseball" details of the filming made it more real.

Great Story

Just wanna say I wish my name was Jill. Made me wet and horny. Gonna find a man or two right now. Thanks.

Thanks Blue and Naughty.

@ Blue: Wrote the stories a week or two apart. As for it her falling into the action too quickly, it's a fair comment. I tried to back it up with the things they had done in bed already and since it's told from the hubby's point of view, we don't really know how much of a slow simmer Jill's been on all day. Oh, and I was writing from a suggestion from a suggestion from the "Story Ideas" forum, so I sort of had to follow the suggestor's desires.

Thanks both for the praise!

Doing it for herself

What do they call a woman that engages in sex for money? What do they call a man who uses money his woman has received in return for sex? What do they call a husband who doesn't stop his wife from having sex with 5 giant cocks? A complete Idiot and Cockold. This story was not very good.

What do they call

What do they call a person who reads porn, whacks off & attacks the writers that feed his addiction. Hmmmm.... How about white trash loser.

Excellent story. Going in my favorites.

The next time he was in the cast of a gay porn film.

The role he was born to play. His wife dumped him and moved in with a real man.